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Dr.Moose1
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Bewilderment , USA

0 posted 2003-04-22 04:07 PM

Skulking in our dark sweet lair,
pockets full of deep despair,
thieving Hobbits, tricks, will play,
trouble is a-foot this day.

Dine on insects, worms, and fish,
spiders make a tasty dish.
Hungry Gollum, Precious say,
"Let us not be easy prey"

Once did walk among the men,
Precious came to us, and when
we knew then that comes what may,
yes my Precious, hide away.

Nasty Hobbits, see them creep,
Gollums' Precious, he will keep
out of filthy Hobbits way,
Precious, Gollum, will obey.

Skulking in our dark sweet lair,
pockets full of deep despair,
Yes, my Precious, as we say,
"Hobbits can't be trusted, Eh?"

QjQ
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since 2003-04-18

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1 posted 2003-04-22 04:14 PM

i really liked this write

Enchantress
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Canada eh.

2 posted 2003-04-22 04:17 PM

Oh what a wonderful write!
Thanks for the smiles...
~Hugs, Nancy~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

Joyce Johnson

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since 2001-03-10

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3 posted 2003-04-22 04:18 PM

This is FUN. Joyce

littlewing
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4 posted 2003-04-23 03:05 AM

hehehehe

William - you penned this perfectly

"Precccioooouussss"

*wink* nice job xxoo

Ratleader

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5 posted 2003-04-23 03:34 PM

Nicely done -- says the guy whose favorite nick after Ratleader is "Grishnakh"....

You really caught him with this!

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Aenimal
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since 2002-11-18

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the ass-end of space

6 posted 2003-04-23 03:43 PM

I love this beyond words..my god do I really have to wait until December for the next installment of the movies? Even though that last one didn't sit well with me.

Oh well I have my books, originals were completely worn thank god I got new copies..

Jason Lyle
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since 2003-02-07

Posts 1438
With my darkling

7 posted 2003-04-23 04:20 PM

This is awesome, I agree with Raph...must i wait till december?( not really

got the other two online 2 months early)great write.
Jason

Martie

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8 posted 2003-04-23 04:54 PM

Doc...enjoyed how this took me back to another place still light and dark within my mind.

Dr.Moose1
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since 1999-09-05

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Bewilderment , USA

9 posted 2003-04-23 05:49 PM

QjQ,
Thanks. I haven't seen the movie, I just drew on the memory of the book which I read some 25 odd years ago. Judging from the replies, I haven't offended too many Tolkien fans.
Doc
Enchantress,
Thank you. I really tried to get inside his head to write this ( as much as old memories would allow).I'm glad you liked.
Doc
Joyce,
Thank you much. Fun it was to write also. Trying to capture the essence of the poor twisted creature J.R.R. so eloquently created.
Doc
littlewing,
Thanks. Done with much trepidation on my part. To attempt to write of a Tolkien character without insulting the writer belies the simplicity of the read.
Doc
Ratleader,
Ah, high praise. Thank you sir. I've always
admired this character( poor twisted creature that he is). The parallels that can be drawn and applied to those around us(and even ourselves) never cease to amaze.
Doc
Aenimal,
Thank you. I've read quite a few of your works, and have been quietly impressed. If I may say so, you seem to filter the extraneous
well, paring things down to their essentials.
Your comments are appreciated.
Doc
Jason,
Thanks for the reply. I'd have to say it's all about focus. How well you can get inside
the subject. For the time I was writing this
I was Gollum. Beset by outside forces, twisted by needs and obsession. A shadow creature. Perhaps I should seek help.
Doc
Martie,
Thank you so much. You're a wonderfully gifted poet and an inspiration.
Doc

Munda
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since 1999-10-08

Posts 3544
The Hague, The Netherlands

10 posted 2003-04-29 09:22 AM

Ok Doc! I Gollummed you! Printed you out and am keeping you with my Tolkien collection for ever and ever and ever...
Nope, not even te 'Stute can save you this time!

Android 17

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since 2001-07-21

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11 posted 2003-04-29 11:11 AM

Hahahaha! This is BEAUTIFUL!!! Almost reminds me of something that would be put into the book! ^_^ This was definetly fun to read!

The world is good, and nothing bad ever happens!

Dr.Moose1
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since 1999-09-05

Posts 3448
Bewilderment , USA

12 posted 2003-05-01 06:29 PM

Munda,
I am deeply honored. As for the "stute" saving me, it didn't work the first time, did it? I guess some people are just beyond redemption, ( so... no, you don't get your nickel back. Be well.
Doc

Android 17,
Thank you much, I wasn't sure if this would appeal to constructs or not. You must be one of the more advanced models.
Doc

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