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Shallow Breathing
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Shallow Breathing |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines 
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Shallow breathing, accompanies my thoughts today. I question the love I have, thinking that it isn't enough for you. I am blinded for believing and am fighting the two sides of me. I've framed you, allowing you to look upon me as I sleep. But my dreams are empty, confusing my waking hours. I remember your words and wonder if they were meant to last. I question if it is not a test or if I have failed somehow to get across the truth of my feelings. I cannot be judged, because I have never been down this path before. So interrupt me if you must, and ask me what is in my heart. And if my truth is your truth then the wondering can end. M "Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less." (Will Moss) [This message has been edited by nakdthoughts (04-21-2003 08:11 PM).] |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
what a wonderful heart felt reading of words expressed so loving,,,, |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
I remember your words and wonder if they were meant to last. I question if it is not a test or if I have failed somehow Awww, dear poetess, your words strike a chord with me. Why are we always questioning ourselves? We work so hard at pleasing others...hoping for acceptance and possibly love....with this nagging uneasiness in the back of our minds. Very good write of feelings. hugs, Chris  "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
I've framed you, allowing you to look upon me as I sleep. But my dreams are empty, I have been dreaming way too much these nights. I think I was better off without them, that is before the glass shattered! Beautiful poem and a lovely expression of longing for a heart to dream within yours. Hugs Maur~ |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
~M~ I love the first stanza, though all is great. Enjoyed, Hugs, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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life Junior Member
since 2003-04-14
Posts 36India |
i too have sometimes felt the same.... n it seemed tht u were talkin abt my feelin gaaaaaaawwd it touched me!! this is goin in my library!!  luvs life friendship is unnecessary...like philosophy...like art |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
very nice ending to this M |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Maureen: I've framed you, allowing you to look upon me as I sleep. I doubt you have framed anyone they may not fully see . . . Amazing write xxoo |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
QjQ, thank you. I am glad you thought so. Nightshade, I question myself hoping to learn the answers, although most times there are none. BluesSerenade, hey *s thanks for the read. I guess I am not meant to dream. hugsssssss regards2you, thanks for the visit. life, in your library?  thank youDixie, I never have an ending that works out. But I am getting use to it by now. littlewing, oh I have framed someone but not in the negative sense thank you for reading. M |
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bslicker
since 2000-12-04
Posts 2321state of mind |
oh yes this is good, bump and hope you can stop wondering soon A smile a day keeps the world in smile's. |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
And if my truth is your truth then the wondering can end. If you want the truth, it is yours, and indeed the wondering can end. Sometimes, at least for me, I think I want the wondering to end. But alas, wondering allows the dream continue just as is. The truth releases the dream into reality. Reality can be good or bad...but the dream can always be good as long as you dream it to be. Gee, did that make sense? I am basing this on a past relationship...I needed his truth, but really didn't want it. In the end, I paid the price. OK, Maureen, maybe I need a nap or something. LOL Hugs to you,  Patricia |
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Startime55 Member Elite
since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148Alberta, Canada |
Hearfelt words to touch the soul with the openess and truthfulness of your words...Stunning poem that comes from your soul...I love it....I wish for you that his truth is your truth...**hugs** |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I find that the truth for me at times is to relax and be patient...life unfolds at its own pace, oblivious to our desires and needs...James |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
So interrupt me if you must, and ask me what is in my heart. And if my truth is your truth then the wondering can end. yes, but who's gonna go first and take the risk? good words, as usual, from experience and insight |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
bslicker, oh I will probably always wonder if my feelings are matched by another. Patricia, yes I think the wondering and dreams go hand in hand, and maybe the answer given would not be what I wished to hear. SO wondering may not always be such a bad thing. Karen, I wish the same, but some people keep their feelings tucked inside...never letting them out. SO good to have you back here. hugss M JamesM, patience is my middle name. And isn't that funny, that you use the word unfolds because I am ~nakdthoughts unfolding~ M Michele, oh I will go first. But I think my truth is already known. hugss M *glad you have returned. |
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