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Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

0 posted 2003-04-20 06:25 PM

Once more you walk
upon these fields
death defiant
Why do you refuse
to remain buried?

Each time you rise
the soil stains
your dress and
the perfect image
etched from the
first time you left

regards2you
Member Elite

since 2002-10-01

Posts 3940
California

1 posted 2003-04-20 06:40 PM

Raph,

Concise, though painful.

I like this very much. Well written with not one wasted word! With additional read the layering more pronouced.

Enjoy your talent,
Hugs,
Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
"Desiderata"

QjQ
Member Elite

since 2003-04-18

Posts 3756
U.S.A.

2 posted 2003-04-20 06:46 PM

nicely written

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

3 posted 2003-04-20 07:39 PM

. . . funny . . . you just described exactly how I feel when I see my sons' father . . .

amazing Raph truly - as always
xxoo

Jason Lyle
Senior Member

since 2003-02-07

Posts 1438
With my darkling

4 posted 2003-04-20 09:48 PM

You are a master of imagery, and take emotion to its stripped base point.Loved this, as usual.
Jason

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

5 posted 2003-04-20 11:05 PM

Thanks Pat appreciate the compliment

QjQ thanks for the read

Sorry Sue, remember 4 more months

Thanks Jason I try I try grin Thanks as always for the support

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

6 posted 2003-04-21 02:42 AM

reminds me of one I wrote called "Just Die Already!" I can feel ya, Raph

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

7 posted 2003-04-21 02:54 AM

"Are you talkin' to me?"

chuckle...

rest awhile is about the nicest invitation I can think of...except in this case.

and oh I do know what could inspire...

hugs Raph.

we all need to get back to ASoTS and talk a bit, methinks...

I miss the us of us.

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

8 posted 2003-04-21 05:51 AM

is ok - 4 months too long . . .
write is amazing . . .

[This message has been edited by littlewing (04-21-2003 05:52 AM).]

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

9 posted 2003-04-21 06:16 AM

Hey Raphael

Like I always say, you sure do pack the
thoughts into a few words....making every word
count. You don't know how much I wish I could
do that. Maybe one day I can.

Hugs,
Ethel

dreambuilder
Member

since 2003-03-23

Posts 319
caddyshack

10 posted 2003-04-21 12:29 PM

I too am haunted by the soiled souls of my past
excellent write friend

. . . all that we see is but a dream within a dream . . .

[This message has been edited by dreambuilder (04-21-2003 12:31 PM).]

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

11 posted 2003-04-21 12:35 PM

Dixie great minds think alike

K someone from my past wrote me an email as she does from time to time and I'm just tired of it..I here asots is jumpin again will have to swing by

Thanks Sue hang in what else can you do..hugs

Ethel thanks and I'm sure you can, as I've said before in my family you have to hurry to get your point across so maybe it comes from that for me

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

12 posted 2003-04-21 12:37 PM

Hey dream snuck in there as I was responded, thanks for the reply i think we all are to some degree, this particular person just hurts every time

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

13 posted 2003-04-21 01:20 PM

Ghosts rise from the past now and then .... many have such difficulty in letting go .... Your words are sharp, a cold breath down the neck ... may the ghost rest in peace!
Your poems are always powerful.
Buona Pasquetta!
Love, Margherita

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

14 posted 2003-04-21 01:21 PM

Amazing...you have such an amazing talent
for saying so much with so few words.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

15 posted 2003-04-21 03:24 PM

Margherita in this case its not so much letting the ghost go as it is the ghost coming back to haunt from time to time

Nancy thank you for always supporting my musings

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

16 posted 2003-04-22 09:49 AM

thanks Raph - needed this today . . .
thanks xxoo

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

17 posted 2003-05-26 03:48 AM

MikeFessel
Member

since 2003-04-19

Posts 321
Brooklyn, NYC, USA

18 posted 2003-05-26 07:12 AM

Aenimal,
Woah! I like this. Glad I didn't miss this. Thank you Passing Shadows for giving this a bump up

Mike

But true beauty can never be soiled.

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

19 posted 2003-05-26 07:51 AM

Sounds like the intro
into a longer piece of prose...

Yes, Dixie...thanks for bringing this back
to the top!

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

20 posted 2003-05-26 08:42 PM

Thanks everyone I'd forgetten i'd written this, this one just too damn painful..ugh

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