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QjQ
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0 posted 2003-04-20 01:42 PM


Click Click we are.
You do it our way
or we hit you with
a stick,   We ban
togeather and we
have ran them off
quick,

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QjQ
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1 posted 2003-04-22 02:13 PM


i was trying haiku,
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2 posted 2003-05-29 02:38 AM


Hi, QjQ.
Thes Japanese verses are kind of tricky sometimes. I'm putting this back to the top so someone else might read and give you instruction. Okay?
Hugs,
Ethel

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3 posted 2003-05-29 02:43 AM


haiku has a subject of nature, always something about nature...otherwise it's a senryu or something like that...

three lines in a haiku

first line has 5 syllables
second line 7
third line 5

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4 posted 2003-05-29 03:26 AM


Is it Haiku? Heck who cares? It's a cool write anyway!

Blessings!
Shirl


Till oceans cease to flow and deserts lose their sands, may beauty surround you every day and wealth be in your hands.

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5 posted 2003-05-30 10:42 AM



Haiku and Senryu are, as mentioned, syllable counting
5
7
5

some do
4
3
4

Senryus can encompass everything...Haiku is strictly nature oriented.

Tankas are
5
7
5
7
7

and I don't know that if a Tanka is subject to strict subject matter as a Senryu is.



slick green ribbeters
tree clingers will soon kerplunk
swamp water crooners

Patricia
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6 posted 2003-05-30 11:29 AM


I am so glad you posted this one...it is a wonderful learning poem...lessons brought to you by Professor Sunshine. Believe me, no greater teacher can be found...I have noted her instructions and shall try these poetic arrangements in the near future.

Thanks Q and Sunshine,
Patricia

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