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Feel It Fade
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Feel It Fade |
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MikeFessel Member
since 2003-04-19
Posts 321Brooklyn, NYC, USA |
Shrill screams awaken him to a world he'd like to forget. Whispers its only a dream, but this nightmare is all too real. Warm tears pouring down, he holds his breath as she sobs herself to sleep, clinging to him tightly though her thoughts are so far away. This used to be a rarity, now all the nights are like this. He bites his lip in despair, as he realizes all he can do is love, and watch her slowly fade away. By Michael J Fessel |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
oh Michael...how touching and sad... Welcome To Passions!  looking forward to more from you...I love those sad poems... |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
I want to welcome you here, and tell you what a talented addition you will make to our family. Excellent write...exceptional. ThisDiamond |
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MikeFessel Member
since 2003-04-19
Posts 321Brooklyn, NYC, USA |
Thank you so much passing shadows! I wish I could have conveyed this better, but I am still so, so bad. The feelings were there, but the words were failing. But you should have seen the first poem I ever wrote in March, now that was awful!  Anyways, 8000+ posts, and yet you liked my poem  I am so grateful, though bewildered. Thankyou!Mike Fessel P.S.- Be sure my work will disappoint you in the future. |
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MikeFessel Member
since 2003-04-19
Posts 321Brooklyn, NYC, USA |
ThisDiamond: What? I am shocked. Surely you flatter me. Thank you so much, but now I am going to be so afraid to post anything else, I don't want to let people down. If this is good, and I don't see it, surely I just got lucky.Thank you so much though I tried hard to convey my emotions with this. Maybe I succeded just a little bit? Mike Fessel P.S.- Thank you for the kind welcome. Why is everyone so nice around here? Not that I'm complaining. LOL |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Mike~ We like it cause it feels real~ That's the sure sign of a poet who expresses his thoughts so that others may grasp the intend of his words~ That trait goes in the PLUS (+) column !  WELCOME again, 'gusher'!  Tee-Hee We're nice ... cause we're REAL We'll grow on ya' ...  Honest Injun !*Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Welcome to Passions, Mike. You wrote your first poem in March? Then you're coming in on your own ground floor - and a lot of us don't take poetry lightly. I see what you're trying to say - I know what it made me feel...and think. I think you're going to like it around here...so I'll just say... Welcome to Passions! Please, check your E-mail for a Special Greeting! Karilea - if I whisper, will you listen? |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Mike, ~WELCOME TO PASSIONS~ Well written in that you did touch me by using imagery; sights and sound. Look forward to reading more of your work. Hugs, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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MikeFessel Member
since 2003-04-19
Posts 321Brooklyn, NYC, USA |
Big smile. Once again you are TOO nice. Sigh...fine I shall complain about my work no more, for today anyway  "We like it cause it feels real~ That's the sure sign of a poet who expresses his thoughts so that others may grasp the intend of his words~"- Wow "Tee-Hee We're nice ... cause we're REAL We'll grow on ya' ... Honest Injun !"- Sorry to tell you this, but you've already grown on me LOL Huglets in return, Mike |
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MikeFessel Member
since 2003-04-19
Posts 321Brooklyn, NYC, USA |
Thank you so much Sunshine! My own ground floor, no no no! I can't believe I have gotten such positive responses, whereas I had expected only silence, or this is terrible, or worse. So happy And thank you for the Greeting Card It is a great feature, I must look into it for sure. Everyone is trying to kill me with kindness around here, my heart hurts so good! (oops gushing, sorry) Mike Fessel |
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MikeFessel Member
since 2003-04-19
Posts 321Brooklyn, NYC, USA |
Regards2you: Thank you so much!!! A million smiles! I just hope my future poems don't disapoint everyone, but if they do, at least now I feel everyone will be nice and helpful in their criticism, and not abuse me And I so do need the help. I shall try hard to do better in the future I promise. Mike Fessel [sorry I love smilies] |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
I would also like to welcome you to Passions. I have only been part of this wonderful place for a couple of weeks now, but I am so glad I am. Your writing brought tears to my eyes...Beautiful...I could see the lines unfolding in my mind. I could feel your frustration in my soul. My dear, you have it! I want to thank you for your in-depth critique of my writing. You got what I was trying to convey...that's the connection I (and I dare say) every writer craves. Thank you so very much. Let me make myself clear about one thing: Anyone who thinks, feels, and writes the way you do can never be deemed a loser. You have so much to offer this world with your talent. Take the gift God has given you and touch the hearts of His children. God Bless You...I look forward to reading so much more of your verses. -Patricia |
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J. K. Mitchell Member
since 2002-01-12
Posts 311GA |
You've touched my heart. This is a wonderful write. Keep it coming! "Cuidado con mi corazon."--R. Martin |
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MikeFessel Member
since 2003-04-19
Posts 321Brooklyn, NYC, USA |
Patricia: Where do I begin? First of all, relating to your poem was so easy, because it was so good. You made me see and feel everything! I couldn't help but connect to something like that. You are so very talented I can't believe I moved you so much with my poem, I hope I didn't upset you too much. My poetry can be so dark, I can't help it though... "Let me make myself clear about one thing: Anyone who thinks, feels, and writes the way you do can never be deemed a loser. You have so much to offer this world with your talent. Take the gift God has given you and touch the hearts of His children."- Thank you, but I don't agree for a second. You are so incredibly nice though! God bless you too! Big smile! I'm so afraid you'll hate my other poems. But if you do, could you at least tell me, so I know where I went wrong? Thanks! You are the amazing one! Thank you angel. Mike Fessel |
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MikeFessel Member
since 2003-04-19
Posts 321Brooklyn, NYC, USA |
J. K. Mitchell; Oh thank you, thank you! I shall try so hard to do better, but I doubt I shall do anything but worse. I can't believe people keep liking this (confused) But I am so grateful for your reply. Thank you again! Mike Fessel |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Enjoyed this Mike. Welcome to Passions!  |
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karebear07 Member
since 2003-04-15
Posts 64Texas |
That brought tears to my eyes. So sad. keep up the good writing. love ya-kara <>< |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
I enjoyed reading your write! >>QjQ<< looking forward to reading more! |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Hello Michael ~~ Welcome, welcome, welcome! There is so much feeling and passion and love in your poem that I nearly burst into tears. A wonderful, touching write. He bites his lip in despair, as he realizes all he can do is love, and watch her slowly fade away. I look forward to reading more of your poems. Hugs and Smiles for Peace. Marti Few are those who see with their own eyes and feel with their own hearts. A.Einstein |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice read welcome to passions |
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MikeFessel Member
since 2003-04-19
Posts 321Brooklyn, NYC, USA |
Thank you Dark Angel [love your name ] for taking the time to reply to me! I'm so glad that you enjoyed this. Yay! Mike |
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MikeFessel Member
since 2003-04-19
Posts 321Brooklyn, NYC, USA |
Oh, Kara I'm so glad this moved you. But not to tears, oh no! Sorry  Love ya too!!! [You are such a sweet heart!] Mike |
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MikeFessel Member
since 2003-04-19
Posts 321Brooklyn, NYC, USA |
I'm so flattered >>QjQ<< by your response. You are way too kind. Your reply put a big smile on my face, and I can use all the smiles I can get. THANK YOU! Mike Fessel |
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MikeFessel Member
since 2003-04-19
Posts 321Brooklyn, NYC, USA |
Marti: I've spent most of my 24 years wondering where all the wonderful people in the world were. I think they are all here! [Big smile] for the wonderful welcome! I feel so at home here now with all the welcoming! Oh do you really think so about my poem? I am still doubting it myself, but...thankyou. If only I had written it as I had wanted too, as I felt it, but I am so weak at writing, and in mind. I bet a million people could have done this better, but I am so glad you enjoyed it! Sorry, I have a tendency to babble I dream of Peace as well. I'm usually doubtful we'll ever stop all the fighting, but I shall be hopeful today! Hugs to you too! I pray a million smiles will come your way Mike [I want to add more smilies, but there is a five smilie limit here, so imagine them floating all over the place!] |
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MikeFessel Member
since 2003-04-19
Posts 321Brooklyn, NYC, USA |
A thousand thank you's Vandana! Oh my! Are you writing me from all the way in India? I am so amazed! I am so pleased that you enjoyed this Mike |
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MikeFessel Member
since 2003-04-19
Posts 321Brooklyn, NYC, USA |
Re: EVERYONE. I just want to thank everyone here for all your warm greetings and kindnesses!!! I didn't do anything to deserve it and that fact only makes me doubly grateful I'd never in a million years have imagined I would find so many beautiful people on one site. Hugs to everyone! [Big, big smile] And may everyone have a HAPPY HOLIDAYS!!! That goes for anybody I haven't had the immense pleasure of meeting yet as well! Mike P.S.- Sorry for gushing. I shall try to control myself from now on. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
He bites his lip in despair, as he realizes all he can do is love, and watch her slowly fade away. *************************************** It's sad to watch someone you care for fade right before your very eyes. You've given us a very tender first write. Thank you. WELCOME! |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Hi Mike...the enthusiasm of your replies makes me smile. Welcome to Passions..your first post, emotive and honest. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
WELCOME TO PASSIONS MIKE! Fantastic first post! I'm looking forward to seeing more of your work! ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
 Enjoyed your first post!! |
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Ringo
since 2003-02-20
Posts 3684Saluting with misty eyes |
Mike- WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!!!!!!!!!!! Brother, if this is the quality and the talent you possess, I am definately looking forward to reading more from you. I do think we're gonna like you here, and you us. When the morning cries and you don't know why... |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssssss) Oh Mike, this is a sad but beautiful debut, dearest friend, your golden heart shines with poetic honesty here and I love this, may peace come to his heart with love, God Bless You! Welcome to Passions, sweet Mike, may you be inspired by all of us here as we will all be inspired by your lovely words! I can't wait to read more of your lovely words, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Mike, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton  And that's the most wonderful thing about creating. It will always be a mystery. |
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MikeFessel Member
since 2003-04-19
Posts 321Brooklyn, NYC, USA |
Midnitesun thank you for taking out the time to reply to me. I am so grateful!!!"It's sad to watch someone you care for fade right before your very eyes.'- I'm such an idiot. I was sitting here for ages just thinking about this line of your reply and feeling well...I'd rather not say. Yes it is horribly sad isn't it. I am thankful for your reply, and so glad you liked this. And please don't thank me for my poem, it is so poor especially when compared to its context. Mike |
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MikeFessel Member
since 2003-04-19
Posts 321Brooklyn, NYC, USA |
Midnitesun: Oh sorry Midnitesun, I meant: My poem is poor especially compared to its Subject, not Context. Sorry I was in a dark place for a couple of minutes and couldn't think straight enough to write out the proper reply that you so deserve Can I make up for it with extra smilies? Mike |
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MikeFessel Member
since 2003-04-19
Posts 321Brooklyn, NYC, USA |
Martie: Yay! I hope to make everyone smile here, for everyone is so nice! "Emotive and honest."- I always strive to be honest in real life in everything, especially my emotions, so I am so glad you found this in my poem as well. To say this is emotive is the biggest compliment I think anyone could give me! Thankyou. I tried so hard to convey emotion with this, I am so pleased that you thought I was succesful. Still it is a very weak poem, I know. Mike Fessel |
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MikeFessel Member
since 2003-04-19
Posts 321Brooklyn, NYC, USA |
Enchantress: Stop it, you are hurting my heart by saying such kind things, and that won't be the first time today Fantastic? No no no! Too nice, too nice. You are not going to like my future posts, I am sure. But I will appreciate your criticism then as much as your praise now I promise. You can kill me with such kindness, and I will die happy Thankyou for your warm welcome. So warm! Smiles and Hugs for you too! Mike |
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MikeFessel Member
since 2003-04-19
Posts 321Brooklyn, NYC, USA |
Nightshade: Thanks for the welcome. Your reply is so cool! That you enjoyed my poem brings me tons of joy I'm so happy you took the time to write to me Mike |
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MikeFessel Member
since 2003-04-19
Posts 321Brooklyn, NYC, USA |
Ringo: Oh you are too kind! But I will try so hard to live up to all your expectations, though I will fail I know. Thank you for your post! Mike |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Fabulous expression of your feelings...James |
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MikeFessel Member
since 2003-04-19
Posts 321Brooklyn, NYC, USA |
Mistletoe Angel: Oh no way you could have prepared this for me? This is one of the sweetest, kindest, most thoughtful things I have ever received. BIG, BIG, BIG HUGGGG!!!!Oh this was so beautiful, I couldn't help but cry. But they are all tears of joy I asure you! God bless you too Noah! And thank you for calling me friend. For that I am eternally grateful. Mike |
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MikeFessel Member
since 2003-04-19
Posts 321Brooklyn, NYC, USA |
James Michael: Oh thank you so much James! Do you really think so? Mike |
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dreambuilder Member
since 2003-03-23
Posts 319caddyshack |
welcome to pip I'm sure you will love it here . . . all that we see is but a dream within a dream . . . |
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MikeFessel Member
since 2003-04-19
Posts 321Brooklyn, NYC, USA |
Thank you dreambuilder! I can never tire of all these warm greetings!!! Mike |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
Mike, a beautiful write, I shall be looking for more. Welcome to Passions! |
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MikeFessel Member
since 2003-04-19
Posts 321Brooklyn, NYC, USA |
Oh Lady In White, do you really think so? [Big Smile] You are so incredible for stopping to reply to me and tell me you enjoyed this! Thankyou. Mike |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Welcome to the family. As you've noticed we are a welcoming bunch. We don't judge too harshly here - feelings and a will to do better in our work are what count most. |
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MikeFessel Member
since 2003-04-19
Posts 321Brooklyn, NYC, USA |
Poet deVine: Thank you for going out of the way to welcome me. Yes you are all SO wonderful!!! Thank you for the advice. I shall strive both to better myself and express myself with all my might. Mike |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Mike: OH MY - this just splits my lip . . . Amazing writing - you will love it here Welcome to PIP! xxoo |
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poetSeaMaiden Member
since 2003-04-25
Posts 107 |
So so so so sad...the last two lines just make me ache. *Ugh* This is sadly wonderful too! I think you have a great gift of expressing your pain. We all do - a true poet cries with words, not so much with tears. I think you've just inspired my next poem sir! |
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Startime55 Member Elite
since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148Alberta, Canada |
Oh my gosh....my heart hurt with this reading....tears flowed freely as I felt the words of your poem....All you can do is love but remember there is nothing stronger than love and it can work many miracles... |
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MikeFessel Member
since 2003-04-19
Posts 321Brooklyn, NYC, USA |
Dear SeaMaiden, Ahhh stop it! You're sweet words really are overwhelming me! Oh, and I read your poem, it is SO good, why are you wasting your time with mine? But thank you for doing so As for inspiring you for your next poem, WOW I'm stunned. I can't wait to read all of your future poems. I will be looking out for all of your work! Mike Thank you SeaMaiden |
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MikeFessel Member
since 2003-04-19
Posts 321Brooklyn, NYC, USA |
Startime55, Oh to say that my poem moved you like that, WOW that is the biggest compliment possible!!! Thank you so much for your kind words Mike |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Solid. Very solid. That's a hard thing to write about, and you did it with both style and compassion. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Mike - your thoughts pour out with this write. My thoughts go with you, and may peace be your companion... BC |
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MikeFessel Member
since 2003-04-19
Posts 321Brooklyn, NYC, USA |
Ratleader, Well thank you again Ratleader. This is one of the few poems of mine I actually like. Mike |
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MikeFessel Member
since 2003-04-19
Posts 321Brooklyn, NYC, USA |
Bill Charles, Thank you Bill. What wonderful things to say! You are very kind Mike |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Mike, I sure am glad that someone bumped this back up to the front, or I would have surely missed it. The poems get pushed back so fast when so many are posting. I wanted to tell you, though, that I love this poem. You took a very hard subject and even though it was sad, you wrote the words beautifully. Even though it wasn't very long, you made every word count. I like that. I wish I could do that. Sometimes my poems get rather lengthy. I also love the enthusiasm that you show with your responses to the replies. You seem to be very real and that's what we like around here. You probably can tell that I love the smilies, too, huh? Aren't they the cutest little things. I loved them since I saw the first one a long time ago. Well, I didn't mean to say all that. Oh, did I ever tell you WELCOME TO PIP?Hugs, Ethel [This message has been edited by garysgirl (05-25-2003 03:48 PM).] |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
I'm sorry I missed this...please forgive me..it made me think of certain things in my past...I really am not good at commenting nor pin pointing the meaning...you know how that goes right? we all think differently at times... Kristen If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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MikeFessel Member
since 2003-04-19
Posts 321Brooklyn, NYC, USA |
Gary'sGirl Oh I'm glad you said so much, even if you didn't mean too! Oh you are such a sweet heart! Thank you for all the kind words, and the praise, which was way more than I deserve. Oh and I miss most of the poems too! Don't feel bad for that. And as for the late welcome? Well sometimes it's better late, because it stands out so much more than when thrown in at the same time as everyone else Thank you, that was so nice I highly doubt your poems are ever wordy at all LOL And lengthy is a wonderful thing in a good poem. A good poem is like a dream to me, and I can just float in it forever, it can never be too lengthy. You like smilies to huh? Yay! I would give you dozens here, but for the 5 smilie limit. Oh well. Thnk you Ethel, you helped to light up my day!  Mike |
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MikeFessel Member
since 2003-04-19
Posts 321Brooklyn, NYC, USA |
Ceinwyn Don't you dare apologize for missing a poem of mine, you hear  Seriously, I know exactly what you mean Kristen. You expressed yourself to me much better than you realize. Your response pulled at my heartstrings there. I could feel some of your own pain, though I don't know if you had meant me too. I wish you would see this reply, though I doubt you will ever look back here. But if you do, my heart goes out to you, whether the pain I sense is past or still lingering. Sigh...I can't take pain in others I guess, tears my heart. You deserve to be happy. Plus I'm selfish. I want you to be!Mike [This message has been edited by MikeFessel (05-25-2003 10:31 PM).] |
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