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LastMoments
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0 posted 2003-04-19 12:11 PM



As the bells fade to silence
The winds glide in unison
To brush the tears away
As betrayal signs its mark

A heart, the puppet
Misconception to its whole
Incomplete and now burned
Eternal resting in confinement

Never hear the whispers ending
That lines itself to pain
As it's everlasting whimper
That twists within my smile

The endless times that seem
To break down at a fault
A mimic to the other
And a relic to myself

Reliance has dimmed to nothing
Pity reached out its wings
To bury me in shadows holding
Now locked in whispers flow

No one to hear me, anymore

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wranx
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1 posted 2003-04-19 12:24 PM


I really enjoyed this.An excellent write.

~wranx

"The shortest distance between two points is.....sometimes intolerable"

~Bukowski~

littlewing
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since 2003-03-02
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2 posted 2003-04-19 04:10 AM


amazing lines here:

Pity reached out its wings
To bury me in shadows holding

nice job Moments . . . xxoo

Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
3 posted 2003-04-19 08:53 PM



Some wonderful lines, LM...
enjoyed this very much!

Karilea - if I whisper, will you listen?

passing shadows
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displaced
4 posted 2003-04-20 03:28 AM


kind of sad, but I enjoyed it
BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside
5 posted 2003-04-21 10:56 PM


The endless times that seem
To break down at a fault
A mimic to the other
And a relic to myself

This verse is like a single tear that falls alone.  

Sadly, this, and heartfelt~



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