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A Hirsute Man Is Beating On His Wife

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RSWells
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A hirsute man is beating on his wife
is this His image mirrored in the manger?**
the witness son I fear thinks this is life

The blows rain hard when e'er the boozing's rife
with every belt he thinks that he can change her
a hirsute man is beating on his wife

Seeds sown this way are sure to reap in strife
assures the next crop all the more estranger
the witness son I fear thinks this is life

Thus coiled in the legacy lowlife
compassion always hides, a perfect stranger
a hirsute man is beating on his wife

The beast enchants, his song of drum and fife
the boy enlists, is culled into the danger
the witness son I fear thinks this is life

Brute's final act attacks her with a knife
and passes on his role as a deranger
a hirsute man is beating on his wife
the witness son I fear thinks this is life

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** Genesis 1:27 "And God created man in His own image...."
hirsute=hairy
I love the villanelle
© Copyright 2003 Richard S. Wells jr. - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 04-18-2003 06:30 PM       View Profile for Nightshade   Email Nightshade   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nightshade's Home Page   View IP for Nightshade

Richard, yes, children learn by watching and listening. Some learn to be violent or an abuser of chemicals & drink. Some of us learn to be the caretakers who stay quiet...clean up...carry on. Chilling write here. Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers-
that perches in the soul....
                  
                       -Emily Dickinson

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nicely done Richard. I enjoyed
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3 posted 04-18-2003 06:33 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Richard...

this is SO good...

and um..kind of intense for me--and even aside from the obvious, I have to say, there's so much more than the outer layers of this. This is what I call a blanket spread verse--meaning--while it is universally applicable, it maintains a quality of intimacy.

And oh, there is more than one shade of green here on me for your skill with the Villanelle....it's a form that vexes me and I adore it, as it has that "chanting" quality inherent, and? Rumor has it I am partial to "chant".

Mind if I keep this one? (Of course you don't.)

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enjoy your read
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Chris....yes a sad truth for too many
         families. Some break the cycle
         however.

CPat.....Thanks

Serenity..Chant on. If you think about it
          the villanelle is for lazy folks.
          19 lines, 2 repeated four times
          leaving 11, plus those 2 equals
          13 lines of poetry. The trick, I
          find is seeing that the repeated
          lines carry their weight        
          throughout the verse. The trick
          here was that there are only 6
          rhyming words for life. Thanks

vandana...enjoyed your reading
          
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dang!
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If I may concur with PassingShadows,
"dang, dang"
I learned something about a villanelle and enjoyed this poem. Gave me the chills.
SG
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And I appreciate the fact that you can perform a Villanelle so well...they are not easy, and it takes a Master of form to perfect them...

Well done, Sir Master...
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9 posted 02-16-2004 12:38 PM       View Profile for Mysteria   Email Mysteria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mysteria

I missed this before Richard - great example of course, but would NOT expect you to NOT meet a challenge
 
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