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Mistletoe Angel
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0 posted 2003-04-17 10:59 PM




Prayer
By: Noah Eaton
4/17/03

Children duck in the shadows
Dissolve into the colors like a reverie gone astray
Feels like the moon is hidden deep in the thief’s back pocket
Trying to fit in the body of a promise I could partake

So souls of men, why will ye scatter?
Lying beside each other in your graves
Rinse these glasses for the believers
So we can drink in comfort…

In my place I’ve seen Siloam’s shady rill
Saw the Rose of Sharon weep in attestation
Couldn’t tell if it was His voice speaking to all the lambs
Saw white prisms dance in their own intercession

So souls of men, why will ye scatter?
Lying beside each other in your graves
Rinse these glasses for the believers
So we can drink in comfort…

I see Mary standing out there in the garden
Hoping perhaps they can be another bountiful immaculation
I see her wear a blue mask half the day away
Seems what you believe and what you see is put in moderation

Come on down to me
I’ve got to ask for your blessing
Because I’ve came here with a load
I see a wideness in your mercy
Rinse these glasses for the believers
So we can drink in comfort…

Come all angels, ever singing with grace
Awake my beating heart to the rhythm of the sun
Sing my song backwards
Lend me the ears to listen and let me come
Come all angels, embrace your Brothers
Crown Him with more crowns
As I sit in this chapel, I shall reflect on all I’m blessed
And upon all that I’ve wronged and all I regret…

If I could only tell you what I see…
Tell me what you see…

What you see,
what you see,
what you see
What you see is a blinding light…

What you see,
what you see,
what you see
What you see is a warning sign…

What you see,
WHAT YOU SEE,
WHAT YOU SEE
Temporarily blinds…


.
.
.
.
.
And I hold this lamp, asking for your light
I see your pale eyes bleeding
I realize there’s no east, no west, no onieromancy
Joyful, I find myself embrace Thee

Shall we gather at the river now?
O come, all you faithful siblings
Rinse these glasses for the believers
So we can drink in comfort…

So I come, the Great Redeemer cries
In blessed assurance, Jesus is mine
So I come, the Great Redeemer cries
In blessed assurance, Jesus is mine…
So I come, the Great Redeemer cries
In blessed assurance, Jesus is mine
So I come, the Great Redeemer cries
In blessed assurance, Jesus is mine…





And that's the most wonderful thing about creating. It will always be a mystery.

***Shakira***

[This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (04-17-2003 11:04 PM).]

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Bill Charles
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1 posted 2003-04-17 11:04 PM


Noah - did I ever mention to you that you write with such explemsatation?...

Noah, you're an excellent writer...

BC

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2 posted 2003-04-18 10:58 AM


Keep up the good works Noah.

We're gonna live forever.  Knowing together that we did it all for the glory of love.

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3 posted 2003-04-18 11:15 AM


The brilliance of your poetry may blind the eyes of the reader, but it serves to open them as well...

Glory to Thee on the Highest!

Peace, Love & Eternal Light,
Warm hugs for a special being,
Linda xo

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4 posted 2003-04-18 11:21 AM


This is amazing, Noah... you write with such skill and imagination, it really, honestly makes me envious.  The images you've conjured here, combined with the beautiful way in which you worded everything... it all comes out just perfect.  The style you used, was kind of song-like... is this intended to be sung?  

Oh and while I was reading I copied a stanza to paste when I replied.

quote:
I see Mary standing out there in the garden
Hoping perhaps they can be another bountiful immaculation
I see her wear a blue mask half the day away
Seems what you believe and what you see is put in moderation


That's definitely my favourite stanza.  Excellent, excellent work, Noah.

Oh and, love the new pic.  

Parasite

God becomes as
we are that we
may be as he
is
~William Blake

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5 posted 2003-04-18 02:33 PM


Noah, This is very special. Blessings of Easter to you. hugs, Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers-
that perches in the soul....
                  
                       -Emily Dickinson

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6 posted 2003-04-18 02:58 PM


Noah...Superb songwriting and so appropriate for Easter. You are very talented, my friend. I think your writing skills have grown and flourished. ***Ivy Rose
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7 posted 2003-04-18 03:11 PM


Nice...James
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8 posted 2003-04-18 06:39 PM


enjoyed
QjQ
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9 posted 2003-04-19 03:36 PM


I enjoyed reading your write!
          >>QjQ<<
looking forward to reading  more!

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10 posted 2003-04-19 05:32 PM




Just about what everyone said.
I would love to hear this.


Happy Easter, Hugs, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
        "Desiderata"

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11 posted 2003-04-19 05:37 PM


I wish I could hear the melody that you envision with this psalm
Beautiful. TD

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12 posted 2003-04-19 06:35 PM


Noah, would you come and sing to me? Please, Please, Please!

You are truly a gifted and amazing writer.

God Bless you today and always.
Easter Peace ... Hugs, Marti

P.S. Adore the angels!

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13 posted 2003-04-21 01:02 AM


Fascinating and philosophical poem.  I like the way you've placed the repetitions and subtle ironies in this piece.  I'll be adding this to my library I think.

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14 posted 2003-05-08 02:35 PM


Noah I know you get this all the time but HOLY amazingly spellbinding hrm..something or other poem batman..I'm dead serious and candy for the heart just sweet and right now I can so totally relate if you know what I mean and that pic of yours just plain ol eye candy lol sorry we'll just blame it on the chocolate today..ciao *hugs*

Kris

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15 posted 2003-05-08 02:42 PM


Noah, I don't know how I missed this the first time around,
but I am so glad that it came back around. I love the whole thing,
but this part especially.....

Come all angels, ever singing with grace
Awake my beating heart to the rhythm of the sun
Sing my song backwards
Lend me the ears to listen and let me come


Hugs, friend  
Ethel

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16 posted 2003-05-08 03:03 PM


you are so blessed, thank you for sharing this beautiful spiritual song.

((hugs))
Charisma

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17 posted 2003-05-08 03:13 PM


Noah,

You sure have a talent beyond my own conciousness.  You take me to a place I've never been.

Thanks,
quatro

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18 posted 2003-05-08 03:37 PM


Noah:

this is your best
it gave me chills
right now . . .

this is a song - go play it
please - bring the words to melody


Come on down to me
I’ve got to ask for your blessing
Because I’ve came here with a load
I see a wideness in your mercy
Rinse these glasses for the believers
So we can drink in comfort…

you have written a song here, my friend

amazing
xxoo

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19 posted 2003-05-08 03:48 PM


Wonderful Noah!
Eric

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20 posted 2003-05-08 09:26 PM


Noah ~

I just had to come back and read this one again! Absolutely astounding piece of writing!


EA

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