Still She Waves (tribute to the flag)

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jaysh
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since 2003-04-16

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IL, USA

0 posted 2003-04-16 10:15 PM

"Still She Waves"
By: Janna Shaffer age: 14

It’s four A.M,
Smoke covers the area,
Like a thick fog,
Faint smells fill the air,
Gun Powder and Blood,
Smells Of Victory,
And Still She waves,
Red, White and Blue
In all her glory.

Loss of many lives,
But devoted they were,
To our wonderful country,
They won’t be forgotten,
Fighting and dying
For us their people,
And still she waves,
Red, White and blue
In all her glory.

Wars have been fought,
But united we stand,
Strong and Bold
For what we love,
Memorials stand
And still she waves,
Red White and blue,
In all her glory.

[This message has been edited by jaysh (04-17-2003 08:45 PM).]

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

1 posted 2003-04-17 06:20 AM

Jaysh - I haven't come across your name before, but WELCOME to Passions! This certainly deserves a home in Reflections - although you are entering the voting process late in the game, let's hope you get this tribute to our Country in there!

Seymour Tabin
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2 posted 2003-04-17 03:00 PM

jaysh
Well done you have my vote.

Street Heart
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3 posted 2003-04-17 03:01 PM

Janna,this is wonderfully written,heartfelt and incredibly insighful considering your age.I can see that you are going to be quite a writer as you get older.Very impressive.I truly admire your precociousness in writing
such an intuitive offering where so many tend to shy from writing honest and emotional
statements on the world and the human condition.I admonish you to continue writing as such.Write from your heart.Examine all things in the people around you and explore new ways to see things and how to state them in a unique perspective.I give you an A+ and a vote,to boot!

Peace,Geoffrey

If a man has not discovered something he is willing to die for,his life is not worth living.

Martin Luther King,Jr. Detroit,1963

Enchantress
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Canada eh.

4 posted 2003-04-17 03:07 PM

Excellent..gets my vote!
Welcome to Passion in Poetry!
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

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dancing with you in the summer rain~

Toerag
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5 posted 2003-04-17 03:15 PM

Well done youngin'....

SPIRIT
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6 posted 2003-04-17 03:30 PM

Very impressive, well done indeed.

jaysh
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IL, USA

7 posted 2003-04-17 03:53 PM

Thank you to all of you for your wonderful comments, it really encourages me to write more often. Thank you so much

SEA

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with you

8 posted 2003-04-17 04:00 PM

I love anything patriotic, and this is great! voting

Trillium

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9 posted 2003-04-17 04:49 PM

jaysh: Impressive poem! Hope you enjoy the site and your writing. Will look for more and I did vote for this one!

Betty Lou Hebert

Martie

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10 posted 2003-04-17 05:11 PM

jaysh...I'm impressed with your poem, because of its content and your young age. I hope you keep on writing!

Mistletoe Angel

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11 posted 2003-04-17 05:18 PM

(smiles) Oh Janna, your wonderful heart shines with poetic magic, swet friend, yay, with your youthful spirit and grace so young of the written word you are bound to become a poetic favorite, yay, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Janna, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

And that's the most wonderful thing about creating. It will always be a mystery.

***Shakira***

[This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (04-17-2003 05:21 PM).]

aries_luv_ppl
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12 posted 2003-04-17 06:22 PM

lovely post. Hope you would write more.

Eliza Simmons
~Every girl has a dream within.

garysgirl

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since 2002-09-29

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13 posted 2003-04-17 06:59 PM

This is very good. I hope it gets in the book.
You have my vote

Hugs,
Ethel

Joyce Johnson

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14 posted 2003-04-17 07:50 PM

Janna this is very good and I am voting for it. I love your patriotism and understanding. I hope it gets in the book. ( if it does it will need editing. Do you have a teacher or someone with good grammar skills who will help you with it? won't not wont.Memorials, their not there and others) Joyce

[This message has been edited by Joyce Johnson (04-17-2003 07:54 PM).]

jaysh
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15 posted 2003-04-17 08:02 PM

thank you joyce, yes I probably should have my poems checked before I post them on here, I will correct things but what do I do with the poem after I edit it? does anyone know?

Balladeer

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16 posted 2003-04-17 08:19 PM

If the future of our country lies in the hands of our youth then I say the future looks very good....nice writing!!!

ps...simply hit the edit/delete symbol above your poem, make the changes and then presse submit and it will print the corrected version.

jaysh
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IL, USA

17 posted 2003-04-17 08:46 PM

thanks for helping me figure out how to edit it and thanks for the sweet comment!

Larry C

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18 posted 2003-04-17 10:10 PM

Awesome!Voting...

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

suthern

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19 posted 2003-04-18 10:22 AM

I'd like the poem regardless... knowing your youth makes it even more special! *S* Keep up the great work... and WELCOME! *S*

passing shadows
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20 posted 2003-04-18 01:18 PM

wonderful writing! here's my vote!

Dark Angel
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21 posted 2003-04-18 05:38 PM

This is an impressive write and a real pleasure to read

You have my vote!

Maree.

vandana

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22 posted 2003-04-18 06:38 PM

welcome to passion

enjoy your read

QjQ
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23 posted 2003-04-18 07:50 PM

I enjoyed reading your write!
>>QjQ<<
forward to reading more!

Startime55
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24 posted 2003-04-18 09:11 PM

This poem easily earns my vote...it is a wonderful tribute to your magnificent country and all it stands for....BRAVO!!!

jaysh
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since 2003-04-16

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IL, USA

25 posted 2003-04-21 01:06 AM

that you all for the sweet compliments, I am glad you liked my poem!

JamesMichael
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26 posted 2003-04-21 04:31 PM

Here at Pearl Harbor the flag looks beautiful waving over the Arizona Memorial...James

Manth88
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IL, USA

27 posted 2003-06-18 02:38 AM

Janna yue poem means alot, i like it and i hope you go far in life with your writing, dont stop writing.

!^*Manth88*^!

D'sWhisper
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28 posted 2003-06-19 05:32 AM

What can I say that hasn't been said already?...well alot probably, but I'm very tired and my brains not working very fast so I'm just gonna say.... I absolutely love this! ~DW~

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