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Aenimal
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the ass-end of space

0 posted 2003-04-16 10:13 PM


Conveyor belt black
moving tins of people in
pre-packaged lifestyles

© Copyright 2003 raphael giuffrida - All Rights Reserved
dreambuilder
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caddyshack
1 posted 2003-04-16 10:20 PM


I love that...
morning rush hour
watching those "happy" people
I lmao and usually sing & make faces
just to irritate them -

[This message has been edited by dreambuilder (04-16-2003 10:24 PM).]

wranx
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2 posted 2003-04-16 11:40 PM


Damn dude! That about sums it up, eh?


garysgirl
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3 posted 2003-04-16 11:48 PM


Raphey, you can sure tell it like it is.

Hey, you're good at writing these short writes. Why don't you go add something onto the "add-on" thing I just started?

Hugs,
Ethel

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4 posted 2003-04-16 11:48 PM


hanging out at the mall, dude?

smile...

You know I love these snippets of insight.

You have an edge with social commentary that I adore, Raph. (helps that I agree with ya too, huh?) HUGS

Aenimal
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5 posted 2003-04-17 12:09 PM


Grin its fun to irritate them isn't it? Thanks dreambuilder

Ed I think so

Thanks Ethel and done in fact the one I psted for you could be one of my favourites

No malls, stuck in highway traffic watching faces and gestures and wondering why they never show this in car commercials, thaks for agreeing it proves i'm not crazy..or that I'm not alone in being so.. grin

passing shadows
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6 posted 2003-04-17 03:11 AM


very observant Raphael...I admire your perception
littlewing
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7 posted 2003-04-17 06:27 AM


. . . far from alone Raph

when I read this I thought:

plastic people
driving
nowhere really
smiling
plastered faces
in their own reality

this is good - I will never look at traffic the same again tyvm
xxoo





Sunshine
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8 posted 2003-04-17 08:55 AM



Why is it I suddenly
have a hankering
for sardines?



On spot, Raph!

dreambuilder
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caddyshack
9 posted 2003-04-17 07:02 PM


bump
Aenimal
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the ass-end of space
10 posted 2003-04-17 10:03 PM


Thanks Dixie most round here call it madness

Thanks Sue I also thought of Police's "Packed like lemmings into shiny metal boxes" from synchronicity II

Karilea one word..eeeeeeeeeeew. thanks for the reply I'll pass on little salty hairy fishies

Dream much appreciated


passing shadows
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displaced
11 posted 2003-05-31 01:42 PM


found this way back in the back
icebox
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in the shadows
12 posted 2003-05-31 06:23 PM


A great poetic statement.

Some of my favorite memories from my wandering days are of riding past a city or a town just at day break.  Looking at the commuters intently focused on the beginning of their day, I would always laugh because I knew before they got back to their little boxes I would be hundreds of miles away.  

Thank you for making those memories surface.

Dark Angel
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13 posted 2003-05-31 08:02 PM


Excellent imagery Sir Raph!

Enjoyed!

Maree

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