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Krawdad
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0 posted 2003-04-16 01:48 PM


                    Stealing the world like cataracts



                    Can we forget the spin of this war
                    and listen to a concerto from another time?

                    Let’s enjoy the rain that comes less often now
                    but at least for today rinses this vile air

                    I stay this lonely road on pure momentum
                    and the fractions of ancient swamps and forests

                    Each day the despair I cannot share
                    becomes another caustic memory

                    locked behind dull dimming eyes
                    in the blackness of a long night

                    I would show you scars elsewhere
                    that would remind us of another war

                    one we stopped not quite too late
                    suggesting we can again be in time

                    before tiger salamander attempts his crossing
                    needing more protection than this spring rain




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Seymour Tabin
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1 posted 2003-04-16 02:27 PM


Krawdad
An interesting write, enjoyed.

Enchantress
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2 posted 2003-04-16 03:13 PM


Very interesting and much enjoyed!
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

Aenimal
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3 posted 2003-04-16 03:21 PM


Excellent write
Kahlil
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4 posted 2003-04-22 11:09 PM


this is so deep, and:
"I stay this lonely road on pure momentum
and the fractions of ancient swamps and forests" tells me you're still there.  

passing shadows
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5 posted 2003-05-05 02:55 PM


excellent

love the ending...brilliant!

Earth Angel
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6 posted 2003-05-05 04:09 PM


Not only was your poem intriguing--your creative title was as well!
"Stealing the world like cataracts" --this piece of brilliance has your stamp all over it!

Peace, Love & Light,
EA

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7 posted 2003-05-05 04:14 PM



Yes, please...

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