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Corinne
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state of confusion

0 posted 2003-04-16 12:42 PM


What it was –

two desperate shadows
in the dark act,
forming vase-faces

a wretched dance,
the dips and twists  
of misery

sunk lower
in depressions left
behind.


© 2003 Core

[This message has been edited by Corinne (04-16-2003 12:47 PM).]

© Copyright 2003 Corinne - All Rights Reserved
wranx
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1 posted 2003-04-16 01:44 PM


A wondrous portrait of amphorae settled into the dust of time...Still wearing the glazes of the past.
Sunshine
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2 posted 2003-04-16 01:45 PM



Now! you have caught my imagination
as I am trying to see what you see
in a vase face...

a multi-layered write...this....

Aenimal
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3 posted 2003-04-16 02:56 PM


There is strength in this, to confront and write of the act and to post it.. Though perhaps I'm way off in my interpretation of this,(too many horror stories in my circle of friends) it's a powerful write in small package brilliant as always Corinne.
Justbleu
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4 posted 2003-05-13 10:27 AM


Good write....
Bridgette

"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again.  To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown


Sven
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5 posted 2003-05-13 12:33 PM


this cries out for a picture of thought. . .

well done. . .

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Nan
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6 posted 2003-05-13 08:50 PM


I've read this a couple of times already - Going back for another...
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7 posted 2003-05-18 01:29 AM




(sigh) That's certainly what it was, now only imagine what it could be now as the lunar eclipse cancels out! (big hugggsssssss) Wonderfully sketched, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Corinne, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shien upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story

***Shakira***

passing shadows
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8 posted 2003-05-18 04:41 AM


cool write...I can sure relate
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