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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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There is a stair spiraling-- there are no rail assurances hugging walls wide angle lens counting brick that line the halls rust and odd placed vertigris make the mortar interesting as does the steps of differing levels brings you to your knees taunting me, "go back..." There's shadow long in flaming cup mocking in the angles played smoke gray paint of silhouette threatening the tower'd bid for power of the steep stair begs to give an ankle twist reprieve. Hermit, knows the ways of dark. He knows just when to pause; enough to see the flickering of lantern winking in the smog as fog creeped in from river bank blending with the ash of soot. Hermit knows just when to wait-- he knows the placement of the foot upon the marble slick with wet and just a look beneath eyebrows is warning to beware--I watch. There are times I almost crawl handholds where my feet will fall and pull myself in willfullness to see what I have not seen yet even when it's more the same-- another brick--another day-- it beats just standing still, in bones-- of those who tried and just gave up... there's shadow long in flaming cup-- the Hermit burns a steady guide. A beacon chars his hands for me and holds for me, the north star home. He knows just when to pause. [This message has been edited by serenity blaze (04-15-2003 03:00 AM).] |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
"There are times I almost crawl handholds where my feet will fall and pull myself in willfullness to see what I have not seen yet even when it's more the same-- another brick--another day-- it beats just standing still, in bones-- of those who tried and just gave up..." Yes...it definitely beats just standing still. This is excellent, Karen. I read, I listened, and I heard the voice behind the verse. Hugs to you, friend.  "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
in awe... |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
K: . . . and in that quest there is no turning back . . . brilliant again xxoo |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Hermit knows just when to wait-- he knows the placement of the foot upon the marble slick with wet and just a look beneath eyebrows is warning to beware--I watch. There is not enough room to put my favorites without repeating this poem - Lady, so this is how it is done. Okay so now do you give lessons?  Oh and for you my friend a heart hug.  [This message has been edited by Mysteria (04-15-2003 05:51 AM).] |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oooh geeesh! You are SO good!! Man...speechless here. ~Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
excellent Karen. I could feel your words and the intensity. And I know how hard it is to climb those stairs or crawl down a hall, as well as the denial and phobias that filland or drain one. I sometimes wish I had someone at my back pushing, then I wouldn't have any excuse to fill my days. *this would be a great one for reflections a hug for you ((Karen)) M |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
There are times I almost crawl handholds where my feet will fall and pull myself in willfullness Karen, your words once again give me chills as I have been there....I am there...gotta keep on keepin' on...even when the light seems so far away. Bless you for your power with words. Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
serenity, But does he know the way to San Josey? Excellent write, enjoyed. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
There is a stair spiraling-- there are no rail assurances hugging walls wide angle lens counting brick that line the halls rust and odd placed vertigris make the mortar interesting as does the steps of differing levels brings you to your knees taunting me, "go back..." **************************************** Karen, my friend, you just don't know how much I am relating to this right now. Sometimes it would be so much easier for me to go into isolation until all the turmoils of life would settle down. Heart Hugs to you, friend  Ethel (Psst.....I think I would really go into the isolation thing if I could take my Love and my little Scooter doggy with me. LOL) |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Karen - where do you find the words like these. You're awesome, just awesome. Must be from inside, deep inside a heart sensitive... BC |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
And I still quest for light at the end of rabbit-hole, to find what lies beyond. Perhaps, to find the other side of this mirror. Good witchy things, here |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Dunno where this one came from, was just doing one those straight to keys exercizes and wanted to write about a journey and this is what came about... Based on the archetype of The Hermit, as pictured in the Rider-Waite tarot, major arcana, #9-- sheesh. Sometimes I give myself the creeps.  Thanks for reading!  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I doubt seriously you can look at this and truly see how brilliant it is.... not just in imagery and metaphor and personification, not just in its aching emote and angsty conflict...but just in the sheer depth of expression and also the fact that in your reply you say it "just came to you" from looking at a pic on a card... that in itself proves what Ive said many times...you absorb poetry....with every breath, you are poetry.  Ocean wrapped around the sun |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
forgot to put this in me mothy library Ocean wrapped around the sun |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
You already know what I think, and these: in bones-- of those who tried and just gave up... they struck..patience I must have patience |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Well, since some of you have recognized him, I will confess that this was also based on conversations with a certain favorite poet of mine here at Pip (sorry Ed, I was tryin' to spare ya the embarrassment) So for those of you who suspected that wranx also played a part in the inspiration of this, you are indeed correct. So I would be remiss if I didn't thank my gentle yeti friend, not just for the inspiration, but for his compassion, patience and wisdom. So thank you Ed. You HAVE held the lantern for me many a bad night, and I am grateful. and Raph? grin, there's nothing else to do but go on, yanno? Standing still bores me! |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Thass ok my witch. Seems there's enough of me here to recognize (even with my own eyes, I can see....me) Sheesh, and thanks ~yeti |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
grin grasping those handholds....... well |
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