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Ericc
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0 posted 2003-04-14 04:55 PM



My fingers burn as they trail
along the fluid lines of
your lips -

There is fire here.

My lips ask for this burning.

But my fingers say -
"No...not yet...not yet."
As they play slow across
these holy flames.

There is a time to burn.

Before this...there is only
a longing for the fire.



© Copyright 2003 Eric P McCarty - All Rights Reserved
1slick_lady
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1 posted 2003-04-14 04:57 PM


...sizzle...

Sunnyone
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2 posted 2003-04-14 05:00 PM


Oh yes!!!  The last phrase speaks a million words all by itself!! Great write, fantastic style and I am going back for a second read!

Accept these small gifts from my gypsy heart  ~~S~~

Black Swan
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on the moon
3 posted 2003-04-14 05:23 PM


You see it as fire, I see it as electricity,anyway you describe it, its some inner power exuding. Loved this too!!!
~Talia

ThisDiamond
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4 posted 2003-04-14 05:50 PM


Spectacular write!
These expressions of the ecstacy and agony of longing, in a love such as this...
romantic. TD

KoKo
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5 posted 2003-04-14 06:47 PM


Absolutely Brilliant

I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man.
--Chang Tzu

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6 posted 2003-04-14 06:56 PM



Eric~
I love the 'romantic' of this.
Beautifully done.
Hugs,
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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7 posted 2003-04-14 08:13 PM


Oh so beautifully romantic!
~Hugs & Smiles, Nancy~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

Patricia
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8 posted 2003-04-14 10:09 PM


The burn of desire.  I love this!
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9 posted 2003-04-14 10:35 PM


Very romantic.  Joyce
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10 posted 2003-04-14 10:45 PM




(sigh) Oh Eric, this is beautiful, sweet friend, I too know this desire so well, let it light your heart but don't get burned and fondle it with loving care, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Eric, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Margherita
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Eternity
11 posted 2003-04-15 09:40 AM


There is sacredness in this desire to touch and to burn ….. do you know what impact your beautiful words have on the reader?

These flames reach out far …..you stir the longing for the fire.
Love, Margherita

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12 posted 2003-04-15 09:43 AM


Hehehehhe i could px that but also the thought behind i love its good.

i think its really good.

Smile

Dreamer


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13 posted 2003-04-15 10:31 AM


enjoyed
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14 posted 2003-04-15 12:44 PM


wow....hot!

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15 posted 2003-04-15 05:02 PM


I've got a thing for fire...

the simplicity of this, the almost stop and go quality of the expression just emphasized the theme of having to will one's self to slow down.

Enjoyed much, and yep, there IS fire here.


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16 posted 2003-04-22 09:49 PM


ooooo!!! That's the way to say it!!!
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17 posted 2003-04-22 09:52 PM


Eric, this is a very hot write...
Hugs,
Ethel

Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
18 posted 2003-04-22 09:56 PM



I hope your
fire
is
eternal...

poetSeaMaiden
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19 posted 2003-04-27 04:46 PM


HOT HOT HOT, this is HOT HOT HOT! *hosing you down with the nearest fire extinguisher!* Yowza, this is good, steamy!
Startime55
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20 posted 2003-04-27 04:49 PM


Sensually passionate....Magnificent...

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Gaia
21 posted 2003-04-27 05:46 PM






yum

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22 posted 2003-04-27 06:58 PM


I burn in your gentle sensuality and love... and within this beauty, I am gladly consumed.

Magic.

Thank you...

I love you,
Moca

Sunshine
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23 posted 2003-04-27 09:45 PM




Oh, yes!

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24 posted 2003-04-28 10:32 AM


Love this Eric.
Sandra

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