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Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

0 posted 2003-04-13 05:56 PM

Exhausted from sorrow – oh, there was no day
when grief fell asleep and then it was night.
Release, I believe, is the reason, the goal,
for conscious awareness to hasten retreat.

Alive to my needs like a black magic witch
sleep darkens my room with weighted eyelids.
Tension succumbs to soft, gentle, strokes
as a lover would bring from ecstasy peace.

I sleep and I dream, trees, rivers, moonbeams,
yet I can hear you cry.  Sleep lies!
It cannot hide an agony not of my design
and I must wait; I’m waiting still,
how long, what for, this waste of time?

And in the shadows echoes roam,
from mountaintops such sweet refrains,
and I’m again asleep, my grief a second string
to the melody of agony played hauntingly in me.

Exhausted from sorrow – oh, there was no peace
when grief fell asleep and then it was night!

© Helen / 13 April 2003

Dreamer@
Junior Member

since 2003-04-13

Posts 38
Denmark

1 posted 2003-04-13 06:00 PM

Its truly inspiring your poem !

i loved to read it cause it gave out a rythm it was like a musical beginning to play by itself.

The words are rolling.

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

2 posted 2003-04-13 06:24 PM

Thank you Dreamer@. I'm usually hauled over the coals for "singing" as it were.

Startime55
Member Elite

since 2003-04-05

Posts 2148
Alberta, Canada

3 posted 2003-04-13 07:07 PM

The music that flows through this poem is perfect...I loved every note and how it felt singing thoughtout this poem...I love it...BRAVO!!!

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

4 posted 2003-04-14 12:13 PM

Thank you very much for your kind comment which is much appreciated.

A2J
Junior Member

since 2002-11-22

Posts 43
South Africa

5 posted 2003-04-14 12:44 PM

enjoyed the poem.

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

6 posted 2003-04-14 02:11 AM

Hi to a fellow South African! Thanks for reading and commenting.

Justbleu
Member Elite

since 1999-08-31

Posts 3329
Oregon, Originally From Alaska :)

7 posted 2003-05-11 11:34 PM

Very nice....
I like your use of words here....
Bridgette

"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

8 posted 2003-05-12 12:17 PM

Thank you for commenting, Bridgette. I'd forgotten that this was posted here so it was a surprise to have it come to light. Fortunately, the feeling of that moment has passed.

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

9 posted 2003-05-12 04:03 AM

enjoyed this

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

10 posted 2003-05-12 11:25 AM

Thanks "muchly"!

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