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Martie
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0 posted 2003-04-13 01:56 PM


From the Bathroom Window

The old hose ran through it like a river
creasing the meadow grass of the back back yard
blooming wheat weed like last year’s candles
and a butterfly took root on the smallest pale flower
weaving light into the movement of air.

I am little and climb on the clothes hamper
to see the acacia tree
for it is spring from the bathroom window
and the yellow is like a smudge of joy
caught within the plum’s prolific fragrance  
and I clamor for the time of bare feet.

Flutter flap the sheets are sunning
and mother is a flowered skirt that twirls
although I don’t think she did really
except only in my gypsy feelings from this high place
looking down on her arms bare then and brown
a clothespin in her teeth and the wind her sail.

Was safely far upstairs hanging out there
as if I could see secrets
little dart of blond brother grim with starched legs
and some old dusty car with running board
posing there on the oil slick of the driveway.

It is so like a photo
what I've captured here in mind
from perhaps a Sunday of a long ago April
where the creak of the porch swing
the steady rhythm of it like time itself
is following me or has stopped long enough
for the click of the shutter.

[This message has been edited by Martie (04-13-2003 04:28 PM).]

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1 posted 2003-04-13 02:02 PM


Wonderful...I was right there with you...You gave me a memory that made me smile from the inside out...this is beautiful...I sit here and remember just such days as this....Thank you for the trip back in time....to simpler days filled with wonder and beauty.
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2 posted 2003-04-13 02:03 PM



How did I know
we would be in sync...

just because, I guess...
just because...


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3 posted 2003-04-13 02:04 PM




(smiles) Oh Martie, your beautiful words are always like beautiful paintings, sweet friend, I bet not only are you a wonderful poet but you can also be a wonderful painter, as I can see pastel grass and tulips and the dusty car and your mother by the clothesline swaying in the wind and your brother all running around in the front lawn! (kiss on cheek) Yay, this is precious, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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4 posted 2003-04-13 02:06 PM


This is incredibly beautiful, but then again, all your writings are special gifts.
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5 posted 2003-04-13 02:11 PM


Good god, you just transferred me to my own childhood, when I had a special little window ... to watch, unseen, the scenery in the garden beneath ...
Absolutely wonderful piece.
Love, Margherita

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6 posted 2003-04-13 02:33 PM


What a picture -- you almost let us be that little girl for a moment. Many, many facets in this that we can see in the grown-up Martie.....

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7 posted 2003-04-13 04:23 PM


Memory is such a beautiful source of inspiration.  I very much admire your talent, Martie... the scene you've described here is so beautifully vivid, and yet it has such a swaying tone... I felt joy and melancholy in a strange, but wonderful mix.  This is fantastic poetry.

Martie, you truly are a wonderful poet.

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8 posted 2003-04-13 04:38 PM


Well this cetainly is a beautiful picture. It's so vivid I could actually hear the flip flap of the sheets and the faint hiss of spring hovering in the air. The whole lot Martie I could see it all.

Fantastic write sweet lady!

doing the library thing.

Maree

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9 posted 2003-04-13 04:55 PM


Martie - lovely your write about seeing this from the bathroom window. Very touching...

BC

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10 posted 2003-04-13 05:01 PM



Martie~
Well, you already know that I think this is gorgeous.
Once again, you've wowed me with your talent for imagery.
NO ONE paints a word picture like you.
Hugs, friend,
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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11 posted 2003-04-13 06:34 PM


Martie,
To my knowledge, I had  never seen an acacia tree before reading this. Thanks,
Doc

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12 posted 2003-04-13 09:31 PM


Martie...oh Martie..
What can I say?  With your imagery beyond compare
you always manage to take the reader right there.
Beautiful poem of remember.
~Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

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13 posted 2003-04-13 09:41 PM


Yes....what my sister Enchantress just said. Enjoyed this so much Martie! Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers-
that perches in the soul....
                  
                       -Emily Dickinson

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14 posted 2003-04-14 01:06 AM


Martie, I don't know if there's anything I can say that hasn't already been said. You certainly did paint a beautiful picture with your words, dear friend. I enjoyed this so much. It was really like I was watching through the window right beside you.

Hugs,
Ethel

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15 posted 2003-04-14 02:09 AM


so many fantastic lines with vivid images...and yes, that closing,

"for the shutter to click."

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

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16 posted 2003-04-14 02:13 AM


A lovely picture to have in your memory and to share with us.  Joyce
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17 posted 2003-04-14 03:08 AM


a warm hug
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18 posted 2003-04-14 03:48 AM


Martie,
That put a smile on my face. Not so long ago that plumbing wasn't involved. But such fond memories that you conjure up in my mind. Excellent write as always.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

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19 posted 2003-04-14 10:39 AM


I remember this day... Same picture - Different bathroom window... Wonderful, Martie..
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20 posted 2003-04-14 11:44 AM


for it is spring from the bathroom window
and the yellow is like a smudge of joy
caught within the plum’s prolific fragrance  
and I clamor for the time of bare feet.

If photography had never been invented, we'd see pictures of past moments... simply by reading your words. *S*

This is magnificent. *S*

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21 posted 2003-04-14 01:15 PM


Lovely. This reminds me of my own childhood and the images your presented were vivid and spectacular.  I was there in my childhood again.  Thank you.
Martie
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22 posted 2003-04-14 01:31 PM


Hello and thank you so much...so many have said that I took them to memories of their own childhood...I'm glad.  I wish I had a real photo of this, but the one in my mind never gets lost...even gets better.  
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23 posted 2003-04-14 04:28 PM


quote:
It is so like a photo
what I've captured here in mind

Yes it is Martie.  Do you even have any idea how good of a poet you truly are?  You take me to places I never saw as a child and I continue to live through your eyes always.  I never get tired of telling you that you see things differently than the rest of the world and lady, that is a gift!  I can not wait for you to get a book out there, as I am sure you will become my favorite author and I am not just saying that.  You gift me every time you write.  Thank you.


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24 posted 2003-04-14 06:50 PM


Martie - what a wonder to lose myself in the imagery of your wonderful poetry.  A lovely picture that you painted so well for us.  Loved it - Paul
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25 posted 2003-05-12 11:52 AM


I loved the images of your memories....
Very nice....
Enjoyed!!!!
Bridgette

"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again.  To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown


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