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kaile
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0 posted 2003-04-13 12:39 PM


Traits in abundance-
apathy and laziness,
showing reluctance
to use God's life gift fully
I hope to dump them behind


larry's challenge~~ /pip/Forum7/HTML/000552.html

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1 posted 2003-04-13 12:42 PM



Kaile!  Challenge well met!  In Tanka form yet.  Not easy, taking a full message and diluting it to its full richness!

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kaile
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2 posted 2003-04-13 12:48 PM


hey, thanks for the kind and flattering sentiments...i do my best and hope it's enough...
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3 posted 2003-04-13 12:52 PM


BRAVO!!! This is wonderful. So few words that express so much feeling. Very well done.
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4 posted 2003-04-13 01:20 PM


Quite a deed! In content and challenge met.
Love, Margherita

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5 posted 2003-04-13 01:21 PM


I am totally impressed!
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6 posted 2003-04-13 01:36 PM


Kaile, this is a wonderful message
and a challenge well met.
Hugs,
Ethel

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7 posted 2003-04-13 02:44 PM


Good job!

(¨`·.·´¨) (¨`·.·´¨)
  ·.¸(¨`·.·´¨)¸.·´
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8 posted 2003-04-13 02:53 PM


Kaile,
Tell me again how you got so mature so early! You're too cool dude. I love it. Way to go and such a unique format for that challenge.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

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9 posted 2003-04-13 04:31 PM




Kaile,

Ever teaching me more. Liked the form and your ability to bring across the idea so well.

Hugs, Pat

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10 posted 2003-04-15 01:38 AM


I agree!
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11 posted 2003-05-12 05:00 PM


You've got it....
Enjoyed!!!
Bridgette

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13 posted 2003-05-13 02:00 AM


  BRAVO!
You're just getting better and better, yanno that? This is one of my favorite forms...tanka. Though you'd never know it, I haven't written one in over a year.
OK, so maybe I'm inspired.

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14 posted 2003-05-13 03:58 AM


nice
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15 posted 2003-05-13 09:36 AM


This is really so true! We blame everything on anything, never stopping to ponder about past events that helped to shape current situations. This is the result of apathy and laziness...

Good take on reality.

_,,,^.^,,,_
Florence

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16 posted 2003-05-13 09:52 AM


I juz had to pop in again, coz something juz struck me.

I understand where you got the title from, but how does it relate to what you wrote in your tanka?

_,,,^.^,,,_
Florence

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17 posted 2003-05-14 03:33 PM


your tankas always shine.....thanks for this jewel.

Joanna

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18 posted 2003-05-14 08:44 PM


LOL - Well done, kaile - apathy and laziness are surely under-rated personal assets...
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