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waldopepper
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0 posted 2003-04-11 02:31 AM


The old woman, driven by pain, and come to her end
battling no more the purchase of breath,
sees beyond her wizened degrade, assuredly unafraid
of the life that no longer depends

On powders and cures, professionals' demure
to the needs of a stretched and wearied soul,
that needs not regain thru' some prolonging stain
her length of days now finite, and sure.

What of the loved ones, that gather to bedside
in reach of a hoped-for and hesitant hand,
laying to rest in this time of their duress
the last pound of flesh from the old woman's hide--

Or hidden away from the inglorious delay,
the widow's release to newly-partner'd peace?
They might soon realize in the drying of eyes
the woman's turn to love, to laugh, and to play.

[This message has been edited by waldopepper (04-11-2003 02:34 AM).]

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Joyce Johnson
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1 posted 2003-04-11 02:36 AM


I like the message of hope in this one.  Joyce
waldopepper
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2 posted 2003-04-11 02:39 AM


Thanks Joyce. A very good friend's Mother passed away this morning.  Her Mom was the kind of person that everyone came to for support and love and kindness.  She was a most giving soul.  Now its time for her to get back some of what she gave for so long.
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3 posted 2003-04-11 02:57 AM


When someone passes away and is really sick
or elderly, comfort can always be found in
the fact that they aren't hurting or lonely
anymore. Your poem told this very well.
Very vote-worthy.
Hugs,
Ethel

Magicmystery
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4 posted 2003-04-11 03:06 AM


(drying eyes~~~~ swallowing hard)

This poem brought me to my knees.... and to tears of a grief that I do not know first hand yet..... and hope will not be too soon. I just recently moved away from the city where my grandparents live, too far away to make regular visits.... I worry about them both because they are in their late 70's and early 80's.... Grandma is heavy and arthritic, and tires easily...and Grandpa has Parkinson's... Luckily, my uncle still lives in the area.  But I know that every day for them is precious... and they are precious to me.... they raised my brother and me for the most part.... and put up with a lot.... getting off track.... Voting.....

Sherry

Cherish the good memories of the past and look forward to the adventure called Tomorrow. But above all... be kind to yourself today.

SPIRIT
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5 posted 2003-04-11 04:08 AM


Beautiful!
BSC
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6 posted 2003-04-11 09:41 AM


Oh Waldo how beautifullly you have summed up feelings I know only too well ~ "They might soon realize in the drying of eyes
the woman's turn to love, to laugh, and to play." Such a glorious thoughts as they move on.  Bonnie



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7 posted 2003-04-11 09:58 AM


What a lovely poem! --It would make such a wonderful gift for your friend. I hope this poem makes it between the covers of Reflections, not only for its poetic merit, but for the treasured family keepsake a  book with this poem would be.

Love & Eternal Light,
Linda

WhiteRose
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8 posted 2003-04-11 09:59 AM


Walter, I agree with Linda. This is a treasure, meant to be kept and cherished. Simply lovely my friend.
pjtalty
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9 posted 2003-04-11 10:00 AM


This poem has the virtue of brevity. This allows it to be understood only if other features, such as an appropriate tone of gravity and respect and clarity of expression, are present. You have created a fine poem here by paying attention to such technical issues. For me, the poem created emotions in me akin to those felt by you and which inspired the piece. It has my vote!  

Patrick Talty

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10 posted 2003-04-12 03:13 PM




(tears fall down my cheeks) God Bless You, sweet friend, we must never take for granted the ones we love and as long as they always know we are here for them, they will always find solace in the warmth we offer, and as our loved ones times come, they will always feel free and proud! (wipes tears) God Bless You, sweet friend, this is wonderful, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Walter, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton


"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

[This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (04-12-2003 03:14 PM).]

cupcake
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11 posted 2003-04-12 06:02 PM


Emotional write.

I'm a reader - not a writer.

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