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0 posted 2003-04-03 07:48 PM



I want to find the one he read
where he felt the liquid smooth,
where some one thing I skimmed in thought
could get him in that groove….

I wish to learn just how to be
like the others that I read,
where “liquid smooth” is their forte,
and silver rims their keys…

I love to find those poets here
that trickle down their thoughts,
where love is love and laughter's fine
with words that can’t be bought.

For were I to find pearled wisdom shelled,
whether smooth dark black or pearly white,
I’d give it to the poets whose fountains
spill this love for sake of write…

I want to find the one she read
where she felt the liquid smooth,
where some one thing I dreamed in thought
could get her in that groove…

and then I’d cache well this feel,
this silk gone satin stream,
and lay it there beside your head
amid your night limned dreams

then in briefest break of day
with soft touch to your throat,
the muse would then awaken well,
and pen those words dreams wrought.


[This message has been edited by Sunshine (04-11-2003 06:58 AM).]

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1 posted 2003-04-03 08:08 PM


Smiling at you!!
Very beautiful piece here Karilea!
~Smiles & Hugs, hip-sis-one~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

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2 posted 2003-04-03 08:48 PM


Wonderful Karilea! Boy..oh boy. hugs, Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers-
that perches in the soul....
                  
                       -Emily Dickinson

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3 posted 2003-04-03 09:09 PM


limned...I am always learning new words and phrasings from you *s

M

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4 posted 2003-04-03 09:56 PM


OH MY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

KARI?????
where is the book vote box?????
THIS IS A POETS POEM!!!!
It BEGS to be in a poetry book....

Girl...get in here and make it so we can vote while there is still time!!!!!


and dont make the moth ask twice

and?

I WISH I HAD WROTE THIS!!!!!


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5 posted 2003-04-03 09:58 PM


I know I commented on this earlier, but my reply is not here.  It is now...

Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn.
Nil Desperandum, Fata viem invenient

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6 posted 2003-04-03 10:11 PM


Oh, Karilea, this is the most beautiful
poem about poets I have ever seen. The
words flowed like liquid gold..


Heart Hugs,
Ethel

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7 posted 2003-04-03 10:12 PM


All I can do is sit here and smile at the wonder of this writing...beautiful!
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8 posted 2003-04-04 12:15 PM


This tells me that we all press to make our writing "better", even when we're not sure what better is, but that we want the flow of syllables, alliteration, verb choice, meter and foot to be "right" to convert our thoughts and moods to words.  (The pedantic meter must be redlined!!)
Such a lovely expression of poetry's purpose.  KJ

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The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

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9 posted 2003-04-04 12:20 PM


Karilea,
A wonderful write. But you don't want to hear my dreams in poetry or prose. Your generous heart shines through again.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

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10 posted 2003-04-04 09:22 AM


came back to put in my mothy library since I dont get to vote!!       tee hee


where “liquid smooth”
is their forte,
and silver rims their keys…

---------------
I wish that if
I were to find
pearled wisdom shelled, smooth dark black
or ever pearly white,
I’d give it to the poets
whose fountains pen spill in love
for simple sake of write…
-----------------

and then I’d cache well this feel,
this silk gone satin stream,
and lay it there
beside your head
amid your night limned dreams


-----------------------


AGAIN I SAY--------

IWIHWT!!!!!!!!!!!!

"and when we get to the pearly gates ...
we'll find what we called our sins were just mistakes."

Tom Kimmel


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I think you found it, Karilea..

believe in what your heart feels...

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12 posted 2003-04-04 09:53 AM


this is extremely beautiful work... my friend... much enjoyed...

regards,
sudhir

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13 posted 2003-04-04 10:05 AM


So beautiful. Even though it's about fluid silver it has a brilliant touch of gold.
Love, Margherita

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14 posted 2003-04-04 10:07 AM


Karilea~
So delicate ... so lovely~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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15 posted 2003-04-04 10:57 AM


Karilea....Exquisite....and I don't say that often!  
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16 posted 2003-04-04 01:11 PM


Wow... I think thats Woman of Wonder. I tried Poet of Praise but it didnt look right.
Wonderous work much enjoyed.

Regards,
Olias.

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17 posted 2003-04-04 05:33 PM


What lines you've weaved in this one to describe what lies behind a poets words. I have to copy from one of the earlier responses, this is truly a poet's poem Lovely!!!!
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18 posted 2003-04-04 06:29 PM


enjoyed
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19 posted 2003-04-04 07:56 PM


Love the way that your words drip on the page and seep into my thoughts!

Shenachie

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.....a little hint.....I think you just wrote it....

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21 posted 2003-04-04 08:01 PM


This poem IS the essence of liquid smooth.
Into my library, to soothe the roughest edges of my day.

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22 posted 2003-04-04 09:17 PM


Silver is my favorite color. i absolutely loved this Sunshine!

Never be normal!

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Hugs, all of you...
and JM?  Remind me when #4 comes around, OK?

This...
IS a poet's poem.

Bless your hearts.

[This message has been edited by Sunshine (04-04-2003 11:02 PM).]

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mmmmm...
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That is absolutely breathtaking. I'm putting it in my library

Life may be hard, but it's your attitude that determines your happieness

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oops

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27 posted 2003-04-06 10:49 PM


I agree with JM, this is a MUST for the book.  This is fantastic, Karilea, so beautiful.  I'm proud to call you a poet and as always you inspire me

Take care,
Melissa~

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28 posted 2003-04-10 10:17 AM


OK...a few of you beat me to death with your wings...So...I've submitted it for the book.

Have at it - if you wish!

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29 posted 2003-04-10 10:29 AM


OOOOHHHHHHH  A MOTH JUST LOVES TO HAVE HER WAY WITH HER POETRY  ....

and POETS     LMAO  

THANK YOU Kari...this one NEEDS to be in the book!! Or I NEED it to be ... either way...
I win   

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30 posted 2003-04-10 10:34 AM


yeah...

regards,
sudhir

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31 posted 2003-04-10 10:54 AM


Oh to be numbered among your "liquid smooth". Lovely, lovely.  Joyce
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32 posted 2003-04-10 11:09 AM


YES!! YES!!  YES!! ..came the cheer from Canada!!  
You know this has to be in Reflections!
~Hugs~

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33 posted 2003-04-10 11:48 AM


Yippeeee! By all the replies--and votes--this poetic jewel has engendered, this poem for poets will most assuredly find a home between the covers of Reflections!

Lovin' hugs,
Linda

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Well, of course I think it should be in the book!   hugs, Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers-
that perches in the soul....
                  
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I'M   BACKKKKKKKKK!!

Hugs,
Ethel

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36 posted 2003-04-10 03:43 PM


I'm back to vote!  
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37 posted 2003-04-10 05:35 PM


I liked it.  Very smooth.  

ex animo,
Aaron

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38 posted 2003-04-10 07:05 PM


Big votage

Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn.
Nil Desperandum, Fata viem invenient

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(smiles) Oh Karilea, this is lovely, sweet friend, you always seem to make silver streaks across these pages which you briad with the sunbeams! This has my vote, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karilea, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

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40 posted 2003-04-10 07:16 PM


Vote's in!

(JM, release my Spam! )

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41 posted 2003-04-10 07:31 PM


I missed this?  Well goodness me!  Karilea this is such an example of you - giving and for the other poets, never yourself!  I love it, and will of course    
Girl, you really have to send links around for us busy folks.  


God bless our soldiers, for it is now
a brand new beginning for those so long suppressed.

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42 posted 2003-04-10 07:32 PM


This is beautiful, but I don't understand how I missed it.  Happily voted on this great piece.

I be me BUT who does me be?

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43 posted 2003-04-10 08:02 PM


Voting again...as many times as it takes
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44 posted 2003-04-10 08:04 PM


What would a book of poetry be without this beautiful weave Karilea ~ absolutely outstanding ~ Bonnie
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45 posted 2003-04-10 08:24 PM


A poets poem indeed.....
grinz*****it's gotta be in the book....

I must have had my momma's will
and Gods Amazing Grace...

I'm a survivor....
(Reba)

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46 posted 2003-04-10 08:31 PM


This brought a big smile to my face....
Much Enjoyed Karilea!!!!
Bridgette

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47 posted 2003-04-10 09:15 PM


This is a wonderful example of "liquid smooth", Karilea! Beautifully done!

p.s. thank you for the birthday card! You made my day!

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48 posted 2003-04-10 10:18 PM


Sunshine:  Just totally lovely and touching!
It has my vote and I hope it makes it into the book.

Betty Lou Hebert

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49 posted 2003-04-10 10:21 PM


I knew there was a reason why I loved Sunshine.

Beautiful!

Sunkissed.

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50 posted 2003-04-10 10:33 PM


Hello Karilea

So very fluid were your lovely words.

Take care......Sue

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Another gem, Kari.
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52 posted 2003-04-10 10:59 PM


Very nice,Karilea,very.....liquid smooth
You have my vote,m'dear.

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53 posted 2003-04-10 11:16 PM


Sunshine
Just beautiful you have my vote.

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54 posted 2003-04-11 01:39 AM


Liquid smooth...I really like that image.  And you let it flow, unchecked, with boundless beauty and grace.  A wonderful poem.
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You folks are the best.  This wouldn't be here if I had not been cajoled [and a bit wing-beaten] and that you have all come to vote, is a blessing that cannot be repaid.  You sure all bring the "aw, shucks" out...

bless you all!

          Karilea - If I whisper, will you listen?...

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56 posted 2003-04-11 11:41 AM


Karilea, thank goodness I stumbled upon this. It was 'silky smooth' and I just loved it. But then, I love evrything you write.

Hugs, Marti

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thank you
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58 posted 2003-04-11 01:02 PM


Hi Sunshine, finally got here and I'm glad I did. Very nice and smooth. Good job and good luck!!

mysticpoe

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59 posted 2003-04-11 01:57 PM


When all you want is words that flow
Liquid smooth's the way to go
When Erato passes by ?
Liquid smooth gives you a high.
Sunshine has the technique cold
Liquid smooth will ne'er grow old

I'm so glad you submitted this.  But you've given me such a quandry.  Which of your poems do I like best.  Count a vote here!!  KJ
  

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

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60 posted 2003-04-11 04:48 PM


Absolutely wonderful.

Love reading all these great writes.
I write not!

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61 posted 2003-04-12 03:30 AM


I simply love the 'melody' of this poem!!!

Neeraja

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Well you already know how much I have always enjoyed your writing and this one is no exception.  It is a perfect selection for the book also as it gives insight to the thoughts of writers but it also pays a wonderful tribute to all of us that hold a desire to pen our feelings, thoughts, dreams, etc ... you get the point.  Very much enjoyed and so glad to read your words as I always come out a with a little more understanding.  
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63 posted 2003-04-14 02:34 PM


Wow...All I can say...Thanks for sharing!

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64 posted 2003-04-15 09:52 PM



(moth gloating)  
heh

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Karliea~ Beautiful thoughts from your pin to share with us.To dream it and write it what a gift. Thanks for sharing...Paul

"To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you"

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66 posted 2003-04-16 07:01 AM


Karilea.. I'm sitting here absolutely stunned..I don't know how I missed this, this beautiful beautiful write.

I'm smilin at ya

hitting the vote button and
adding it to my library.

hugs

Maree

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67 posted 2003-04-16 08:14 AM


I loved this!!!!  Going to vote.  Thank you
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68 posted 2003-04-17 12:02 PM


You're right. This one should be in too.
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69 posted 2003-04-18 07:22 AM


Good Morning Sunshine!  Sorry I'm so late...
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70 posted 2003-04-18 09:53 AM


The imagery in this beautiful piece is expressed in sharp,sensuous, concrete language. You have chosen language through the use of what my English professor used to describe as words that bear with them strong emotional overtones for all lovers of poetry and, in particular, for those who aspire to the title of *poet*.This is truly a poet's poem and a delight to read and reflect on. I am proud to be able (I hope) to vote it into the anthology.

Patrick Talty

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BUMP
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Oh my....what a treat Karilea, ashamed that I haven´t read it till now.....but not to late to cast my vote I hope

((hugs))
Charisma

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73 posted 2003-04-21 02:28 PM


what a charming write and with so much feeling.
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Voting's about over, folks.  I don't know if there will be a round five, but I can guarantee, if you come back to read this, you'll know I haven't submitted another [I can hear the cheers!] for I'm quadruply pleased to know that I have what I have in Reflections.

Some of you are moths, some of you are angels, some of you are poets who have it in your hearts to see other poets get a leg up.  I have a good feeling about what you have all done for me.  I have a small novel in the works...some of you have seen bits and parts when I was first putting it in the Prose forum...but folks, it's taking on a life of its own...and it's all because of you that I have grown to the point where I am now beginning to think "it can happen" and you know what?

If it doesn't...?  You'll all know it hasn't been because I haven't tried.

If I were to begin to thank folks...I would have to thank you ALL!  So I shall begin, and end, with one.

Ron, thank you.  For giving me a place to find myself; a place for me to grow...a place to say...thank you...to you, and all of our "family" in Passions.  Family usually comes by blood ~ we don't get to pick them; you give us that second family; where we can pick to stay, or go; learn, or lose; share, and educate....

Ron, I know what I've done with this wonderful home of yours; I only hope you know what you have done for the thousands of us who have come, and gone, come, and stayed.

Until I can find a way to better pay?  Thank you.

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