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pjtalty
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0 posted 2003-04-05 10:12 PM


I speak to you
as morning’s gold filament
fades in leaves
and strong brown limbs of trees
shake hands
with early breezes.

The sights and sounds
clothe your spirit
against tomorrow's promises
weaving illusions,
which may bare
a thousand sharp needs.

Yet solitude will be fleeting:
for as surely as trees
give summer shade, moments
purple as love songs
white as whispered vows
will return when I am with you
again on that tomorrow,
as the golden fingers of morning
banish illusions, dress our dreams.

Patrick Talty

© Copyright 2003 Patrick Talty - All Rights Reserved
Kethry
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1 posted 2003-04-06 12:22 PM


Patrick, I love the softness of this, it's a softness  that hides depths in particular this phrase that shows the reefs beneath.
"weaving illusions,
which may bare
a thousand sharp needs."
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



Joyce Johnson
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2 posted 2003-04-06 01:01 AM


Very tender.  Joyce
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3 posted 2003-04-06 09:06 AM


very nice imagery! I'd love to see this one in the book.
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4 posted 2003-04-06 09:20 AM


...I think you spoke very tenderly...and so warmly that your words of love could melt the polar ice cap!

Love & Light,
EA

Street Heart
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5 posted 2003-04-08 07:28 PM


Brushing this one off and bumping it to the top.Beautiful writing.

Peace,Geoffrey

If a man has not discovered something he is willing to die for,his life is not worth living.

Martin Luther King,Jr. Detroit,1963

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6 posted 2003-04-08 07:37 PM


Beautiful imagery I do agree, and the gentleness of the poem along with it makes it a definite choice for the book (will find more of your work now - this was lovely).

Don't be too hard on yourself - even Einstein had trouble tying his shoelaces.

Titia Geertman
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7 posted 2003-04-08 09:24 PM



Yep, all the above are right, beautiful poem.
Getting my vote for the book.

Titia

Like scattered leaves...my words will flow

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8 posted 2003-04-10 08:21 PM




(sigh) Keep looking to the morning light and perhaps the morning glories will again open for you and present to you that same classic love, dearest friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Patrick, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

SPIRIT
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9 posted 2003-04-11 01:44 AM


Beautiful write and extremely vote worthy.
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10 posted 2003-04-11 12:18 PM


Beautiful images... I like this very much. *S*
Flower
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11 posted 2003-04-11 12:20 PM


Awesome!

Love reading all these great writes.
I write not!

passing shadows
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12 posted 2003-04-29 04:41 AM


how vivid!
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13 posted 2003-04-29 12:33 PM



You could hurt me with your bare hands. You could hurt me using the sharp edge of what you say. JEWEL

Martie
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14 posted 2003-04-29 10:19 PM


Lovely love feelings here...enjoyed!
waldopepper
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15 posted 2003-04-29 10:43 PM


Heady, mildly wicked, and very good.  Got my vote.
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