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ecrivan
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0 posted 2003-04-04 11:22 PM



The world trip menu presents travellers
with the chance to see different faces
smiles that push lips into pleasant shapes
eyes brighten in conjunction with that oral gesture.

But I am still at my wood burning stove
candle wax has long since dripped from wick laced mantles
childhood kodak snapshots are cracked
and old relationships have shed like dead skin
tell me, does the world still offer a better way?

Or do I have to threaten to be heard
clean the cage and throw out the bird
file complaints about misplaced work ethics,
on longtime friendships that lose their sense
on undecided resolve that sat on the fence.
Would this be a kind of internal visit
to my office of what appears to be perceived,
at the board of "lets see life through a prospector's sieve?"

How self-deceiving..caught in frayed relations
on my time, time so precious...at this station.

Should I rant about character fallout?
how some characters rub the wrong way
evoking memories from the past
of relations that have since washed
their minds of any recollection
of what was, or appeared to be
and I be considered again a ship in the night
a traveller adrift in stormy gales that bite.

Should I still not speak to strangers?
but kind tasks will return to me
yet sour friendships may curdle
resolve will transport me to other hurdles.
But what if I were to fall
and have to live with all those characters
and memories of what made smiles genuine.

[This message has been edited by ecrivan (04-06-2003 09:32 AM).]

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kaile
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1 posted 2003-04-04 11:24 PM


Martin,
i'll come back to read later but this isn't in book submission mode yet

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2 posted 2003-04-05 12:27 PM


I am happy to vote for this.  Joyce
waldopepper
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3 posted 2003-04-05 02:17 AM


Carefully thought out self reflection of the very finest sort Martin.  Going through the motions of our lives gives us very little time to take stock of such things.  You have put you finger on the genuine pulse to healthy living.  Good words my friend.
Nan
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4 posted 2003-04-05 08:07 AM


The characters we meet along the path... Quite a motley bunch, eh?... Well done, ecrivan...
Earth Angel
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5 posted 2003-04-05 02:48 PM


You are a thinker, an hypothesizer, a raconteur, a philosopher--and a poet!

I enjoy your poems for the snippets and glimpses of the you of you!

Love & Light,
Linda

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6 posted 2003-04-05 04:20 PM



You do manage to leave me with the strangest thoughts...I was beginning to feel like a piece of charcoal, just itching to leave a message on a wall...

Well done, Sir..."click"

        Karilea - If I whisper, will you listen?...

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7 posted 2003-04-05 06:47 PM




(sigh) I think it is real important to have all these characters join us in the cast of our lives, to go on and stand in silence is a phlegmatic and lonesome feeling and if we invite all those we meet along the way to the curtain call it can feel so much colorful! (big hugggssssss) This is marvelous, sweet friend, you have my vote, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martin, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

kaile
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8 posted 2003-04-05 10:25 PM


Martin,
i guess we do the best we can and just keep on trying...I liked how each line in this poem is a complete thought in itself..cool stuff

The world trip menu presents travellers
~what a delightful novel way to put it

childhood kodak snapshots are cracked
~i also liked this

on longtime friendships that lose their sense
~what an understated way of expressing the ache

my vote for a read well received

ecrivan
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9 posted 2003-04-05 10:45 PM


Hello Linda,

Raconteur? well now I can use this word in English then..always thought of this one being only in the French...thanks for all these compliments


ecrivan
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10 posted 2003-04-05 10:54 PM


Hello Waldo,

have a knack of looking deeply into myself and the characters I meet and that should be a key to successful living, if that living means coming to terms with these people and myself...thanks for sharing.


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