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BSC
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0 posted 03-31-2003 07:07 PM       View Profile for BSC   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for BSC


A moonbow umbrellas the evening,
So peaceful this nights deep hush,
Stars in the sky seem spattered,
As if from an artists damp brush.
Drifting on untethered waters,
Away from the dark, shadowed shore,
Silhouetted by beams of moonlight,
A swan glides into the moor.
The reeds bow gently in welcome,
As she weaves her way to her mate,
A wake of whispering movement,
Waters stirred now slowly abate.
Nestled together in umber light,
They settle in to their dreams,
Wings embracing the others heart,
Under the moon's softest beams.
© Copyright 2003 Bonnie Church - All Rights Reserved
Drummerboy06
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1 posted 03-31-2003 07:27 PM       View Profile for Drummerboy06   Email Drummerboy06   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Drummerboy06

Beautiful.  It seems like you have captured the grace and magnificence of the swan with your words, the flow of you poem almost resembles the flow of the waters as the swan glides about it them.  This piece should definitely be included in the book.  Great write and good luck with being accepted.
Enchantress
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Somewhere in time~


2 posted 03-31-2003 07:43 PM       View Profile for Enchantress   Email Enchantress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enchantress

Very very beautiful Bonnie!
~Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

Justbleu
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3 posted 03-31-2003 07:47 PM       View Profile for Justbleu   Email Justbleu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Justbleu's Home Page   View IP for Justbleu

BSC...You painted a beautiful picture before my eyes with your words.....with each line I could see!!!!! Beautiful!!!!
Bridgette

"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again.  To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown

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4 posted 03-31-2003 09:10 PM       View Profile for Mistletoe Angel   Email Mistletoe Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Mistletoe Angel's Home Page   View IP for Mistletoe Angel



(sigh) Oh Bonnie, this is beautiful, sweet friend, this made me cry as I long to be enfolded in the wings of my love and just imagining how beautiful that feels! (kiss on cheek) This is breathtaking and heavenly, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Bonnie, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Lighthousebob
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5 posted 03-31-2003 11:27 PM       View Profile for Lighthousebob   Email Lighthousebob   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Lighthousebob's Home Page   View IP for Lighthousebob

Most dreamy are these your graceful words that describe the habitat and gentle movement of the swan and her mate. Very very well written.

-Bob
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Beneath the northern stars


6 posted 03-31-2003 11:39 PM       View Profile for skyshine   Email skyshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit skyshine's Home Page   View IP for skyshine

I enjoyed this, Bonnie. Nature poems are always nice to read!

~Liz

Waited on a line of greens and blues, just to be the next to be with you..
~Mr. Big

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7 posted 04-01-2003 12:03 AM       View Profile for Joyce Johnson   Email Joyce Johnson   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Joyce Johnson

Truly perfect rhyme and meter and beautiful words.  Joyce
Sunnyone
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Bonnie, this is absolutely gorgeous! I really loved the story, but also the wonderful meter and how it flowed as smooth as a swan glides on the water!  Reminded me of the pair of swans across the way in our park. What a great write, my friend!!!

Accept these small gifts from my gypsy heart  ~~S~~

sweetwater
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I agree.. this is a simply beautiful piece, the subject is reflected in the words and rhythm.
Nan
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Lovely - I had seven gorgeous swans swimming in front of my house yesterday... It's nesting time, and the yearlings are looking for new homes... It's a beautiful sight... Nicely said, Bonnie...
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11 posted 04-01-2003 09:35 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Bonnie...the images you've created with this piece are stunning to say the least. It gets my vote
P.S. Check your mail
Janet Marie
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12 posted 04-01-2003 11:04 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

A moonbow umbrellas the evening,
So peaceful this nights deep hush,
Stars in the sky seem spattered,
As if from an artists damp brush.
Drifting on untethered waters,
Away from the dark, shadowed shore,
Silhouetted by beams of moonlight,
A swan glides into the moor.
=================================

well this is just pure poetry in motion...
what a treat of cadence and assonance to read aloud this is!!!
And it goes unsaid the lovely imagery is the centepiece. Wonderful writing Poetess Bonnie

"and when we get to the pearly gates ...
we'll find what we called our sins were just mistakes."

Tom Kimmel

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OH ,this is so beautiful and peaceful. I can see it.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

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on the threshold of a dream


14 posted 04-02-2003 02:48 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

This is just beautiful. *S* Thanks for giving us a peek into such gracefulness. *S*
Lone Wolf
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15 posted 04-02-2003 08:28 PM       View Profile for Lone Wolf   Email Lone Wolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lone Wolf

Sigh...awesome write, Bonnie.  Much enjoyed!

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

Charisma
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lost in blue pages


16 posted 04-03-2003 02:32 PM       View Profile for Charisma   Email Charisma   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Charisma's Home Page   View IP for Charisma

*sigh* Gorgeous piece you present us here

Charisma
BSC
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Thank you all so much for your kind replies, they mean a lot to me.  I wish I could tell you just how much I have missed these blue pages, and how glad I am to be back.  Thanks again.  Bonnie
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18 posted 04-11-2003 02:23 PM       View Profile for mysticpoe   Email mysticpoe   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mysticpoe

Very nice poem Bonnie. I enjoyed the picture, with you words. Good luck!!

mysticpoe
Poet4Christ
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Gotta love those nature poems,and this one is very eloquent and well developed in form and imagination.  God bless you

He that trusteth in his own heart is a fool: but whoso walketh wisely, he shall be delivered. Proverbs 28:26

Marilyn
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Ahhhhh......*sigh* Such a beautiful and tranquil piece. Lovely and relaxing to read. Very well done.

Marilyn
 
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