Poem: The Long Jiang River.

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pjtalty
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W.A., Australia

0 posted 2003-03-30 08:01 PM

Memories of the Long Jiang River
flow easily through my mind
like the slow motion replay
of a treasured film.

Images of her fall free like a waterfall
from the edge of my knowing
to the reservoir containing
all important symbols of my life.

There she is, standing by a boulder
on the banks of the Long Jiang River;
in the background locals do the family wash,
the river swiftly carries swirling suds away.

My mind’s eye zooms in on her:
Beautiful, fragile, wondrously bathed
in a mystic smile that makes the waters
glitter with a frenzy of sparkling beams.

We slowly cross the river in a ferry
powered by two women with oars.
We share the backdrop of surreal limestone peaks
with fisherfolk on Chinese river boats.

Something else we share: flooding emotions,
desperate realization that soon we must part
at the Long Jiang River, and even worse,
she must stay with her river; I must go to mine.

Jason Lyle
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With my darkling

1 posted 2003-03-31 12:51 PM

Beautiful, happy to cast first vote.
Jason

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

2 posted 2003-03-31 07:34 AM

Thank you Patrick...

Karilea - If I whisper, will you listen?...

Earth Angel
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Realms of Light

3 posted 2003-03-31 10:51 AM

Thank you for sharing your loving memories...

Peace & Light,
Earth Angel

bsquirrel

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4 posted 2003-03-31 01:53 PM

That ending came out of nowhere. Sweet.

Pilgrimage
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5 posted 2003-03-31 04:29 PM

This brought me there, I could see and feel it. Very well done.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

Sunnyone
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Staffordshire, England

6 posted 2003-04-01 05:06 AM

What a beautiful painting this is...the glimpses of everyday life in a far off, and exotic land.....a wonderful write, and has my vote!!

Accept these small gifts from my gypsy heart ~~S~~

kaile

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singapore

7 posted 2003-04-01 10:30 AM

I liked the premise of this one: how people make striking connections in spite of everything...it's precisely incidents like these that make me believe in fate so much...

is she a local or a foreigner, may i ask?

Joyce Johnson

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Washington State

8 posted 2003-04-02 12:56 PM

This poem rings true and heartfelt. It gets my vote. Joyce

WhiteRose
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somebody's dungeon

9 posted 2003-04-02 09:38 AM

Patrick, this is a wonderous write. Enjoyed the read.

Mistletoe Angel

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Portland, Oregon

10 posted 2003-04-03 07:16 PM

(big hugggssssssss) Oh Patrick, this is beautiful, sweet friend, the ending is sad but know that every river has a confluence and every river connects to the ocean in life and in time love will make its course to you again! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Patrick, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Charisma

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lost in blue pages

11 posted 2003-04-04 03:29 PM

Enjoyed the read very much, thank you for sharing

Charisma

Street Heart
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12 posted 2003-04-08 03:16 PM

Patrick,this is gorgeous and needs to bumped to the top.Your writing creates such imagery
that saturates my mind.You are a talented writer.I enjoy every offering you write.

Peace,Geoffrey

If a man has not discovered something he is willing to die for,his life is not worth living.

Martin Luther King,Jr. Detroit,1963

Mysteria

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British Columbia, Canada

13 posted 2003-04-08 03:29 PM

Beautiful! I wonder how many said goodbye at one river or another? I vote for you and for them as well.

To be hugged by a friend is wealth beyond words.

[This message has been edited by Mysteria (04-08-2003 03:30 PM).]

Midnitesun

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Gaia

14 posted 2003-04-09 02:54 PM

Loved this one, hope it makes it into the book.
Perhaps these two hearts will yet find a way to make those two rivers merge into one?

BTW, I'm keeping this one in my library.

Martie

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California

15 posted 2003-04-09 11:25 PM

The beauty of the journey is the sadness of the parting...so well done.

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