Deafening Silence...............A Rictameter

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garysgirl

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since 2002-09-29

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Florida, USA

0 posted 2003-03-26 10:37 PM

~*~
Silence
Quiet stillness
A stillness felt by both
Causes chill to be in the air
This type of silence has very loud sound
So loud that it is deafening
Hurting between ones ears
Very painful
Silence
~*~

[This message has been edited by garysgirl (03-28-2003 08:59 AM).]

Earth Angel
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Realms of Light

1 posted 2003-03-26 10:48 PM

Gadzooks, Ethel! This was another terrific rictameter! You've got it down to a science--and an art!

Springtime hugs,
Linda

Enchantress
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Canada eh.

2 posted 2003-03-26 10:55 PM

Ethel....You do these beautifully.
This one is especially wonderful!
~Hugs & a vote~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

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Portland, Oregon

3 posted 2003-03-26 11:13 PM

(big hugggssssss) Oh Ethel, I too don't like that kind of silence, dearest friend, the only serenity I like is when it is beautiful outside and the sparrows and crickets are chirping! (sigh) I send special healing hugs your way, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ethel, thank you for sharing!

May love and light awlays shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

SPIRIT
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since 2002-12-29

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California Desert

4 posted 2003-03-26 11:18 PM

Awesome!

Vote's in.

Jason Lyle
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since 2003-02-07

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With my darkling

5 posted 2003-03-27 12:22 PM

Well done! This kind of silence is painful.I have heard it at home often lately.
Jason

jjote
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since 2002-12-25

Posts 1088
Ontario, Canada

6 posted 2003-03-27 12:54 PM

Don't know about rictameters (duh). How does that differ from cinquain?

Anyways, whatever it is, I like this powerful short message.

Voting.

Joyce Johnson

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since 2001-03-10

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Washington State

7 posted 2003-03-27 02:25 AM

Well done, Voted. Joyce

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

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8 posted 2003-03-27 08:00 AM

Quiet stillness
=======================

that line spoke to me ... (very quietly)

I havent tried one of these poetic forms...
seems you have it down...
well done poetess Ethel!

"and when we get to the pearly gates ...
we'll find what we called our sins were just mistakes."

Tom Kimmel

littlewing
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since 2003-03-02

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New York

9 posted 2003-03-27 09:28 AM

Ethel - nevermind - I found it!

You know you got mine - love this . . . xxoo

zenny
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since 2002-11-24

Posts 371
Belgium

10 posted 2003-03-27 03:31 PM

hmmm... beautiful
*silence*

hugs, kelly

Flower
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since 2003-03-15

Posts 240
California

11 posted 2003-03-27 03:38 PM

Besides looking great it is a terrific write. I voted.

Love reading all these great writes.
I write not!

christian
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Posts 331

12 posted 2003-03-27 03:44 PM

goosebumps. this is ridiculously amazing.

click click.

Sunshine

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13 posted 2003-03-27 03:45 PM

You know I know you know...

Karilea - If I whisper, will you listen?...

suthern

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since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

14 posted 2003-03-27 04:30 PM

This type of silence has very loud sound

I remember the song "Silence is Golden"... and it can be. *S* But the wrong kind of silence can fade all colors to bleak... you've written this very well! *S*

garysgirl

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since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

15 posted 2003-03-28 02:05 AM

Linda, thank you, friend.......
.
Nancy, thank you. I appreciate
your vote.
.
Noah, thank you very much.
.
Spirit, Thank you, I appreciate
your vote.
.
Jason, I'm sorry you've heard
this kind of silence. It can be awful.
.
jjote, I'm glad that you liked it
and I appreciate your vote. A Cinquain has
5 lines...A rictameter has 9 lines, the
first and last lines being the same 2 syllables.
The syllable count for the rictameter is 2-4-6-8-10-8-6-4-2. I really
enjoy trying to do them.
.
Joyce, thank you for liking it. I
appreciate your vote.
.
Janet Marie, thank you. You should try it.
.
.

They're fun to do.
.
Sue, I'm glad you found it. I really
appreciate your vote.
.
Kelly, thank you.
.
Flower, thanks for liking it and
for voting.
.
Chris, thank you for liking it and
for the click...click.
.
Karilea, Yes!
I know that you know that I know.
.
Suthern, thank you for liking it.
.
.
.
I really appreciate each and every one for
replying to my poem, and to the ones who voted.............thank you all.
Heart Hugs,
Ethel

[This message has been edited by garysgirl (03-28-2003 08:58 AM).]

Pilgrimage
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since 2001-12-04

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Texas, USA

16 posted 2003-03-28 05:09 PM

Ethel, I like form poems. And I like simple poems that are deceptive in their simplicity. So you know I like this one!

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

SimplyGold
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since 2002-07-10

Posts 1453

17 posted 2003-03-28 06:50 PM

Garysgirl,

Bravo, it's true you do these quite well.

Vote is in.

SG

waldopepper
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since 2003-03-18

Posts 157
Tennessee, USA

18 posted 2003-03-28 10:19 PM

Yes it can truly be deafening the awkward silence that stifles the ability to find the way back to each other. Poignantly said Ethel.

catalinamoon

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The Shores of Alone

19 posted 2003-03-28 10:43 PM

Well done. Very thoughtful poem.
Sandra

dgvarner
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High Springs, Florida

20 posted 2003-03-29 12:53 PM

yes..loud like the atmosphere...

enjoyed the read..

hugs, g

"laughter is the shortest distance between two people" - victor borge

Nan

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21 posted 2003-03-29 07:04 AM

Very nice, Ethel...

sweetwater
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since 2002-12-16

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Perth

22 posted 2003-03-29 07:49 AM

well, I've learned a new form! And from a 'Master' it would seem. How could I not vote?

Alicethruglass
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23 posted 2003-03-29 05:05 PM

nicely done, Ethel

~A~ for today

Lighthousebob
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California

24 posted 2003-03-29 11:08 PM

It seems that you've really found your poetic niche within your seemingly natural ability for writing in Rictameter. YAY!!! Sorry, but I just can't be silent about it, I think that this particular poem would represent your talent very very nicely in the coming book. Good job.

-Bob

hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

25 posted 2003-04-04 06:41 AM

Ethel...I've never tried this form before, but it seems you do it well. Thanks for the explanation for us less versed poets

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