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Into This House, A Loss Has Come

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Ron
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This house is darker now, as candles burn past molten quick,
The furnace ever colder now, its flames infirm and sick.
A sheen of slowly drifting dust alights on all in sight,
And memories are not enough to warm this house at night.

Your picture hangs on shadowed wall, 'tween stains of sallow green,
As eyes that danced, in times gone by, trace movements yet unseen.
I know it's just illusion, caused by shimmers in dim light,
But memories are not enough to light this house at night.

Your laughter hides in every creak of every rustic board,
As house joints settle for the night with sighs I long ignored.
Your voice yet whispers through each room, but labor though I might,
The memories are not enough to hear this house at night.

This missing you remains a quiet, ever-spreading ache,
A hole that, still unfilled, fills every hour I'm awake.
How can something not really here, by dint of being gone,
Bring such an empty pain into my house from dusk to dawn?

Your touch upon my shoulder is a phantom of my mind,
I will not turn, I cannot turn, for fear of what I'll find.
The squeeze lasts but a moment more, and then, like you, is quit,
With just enough of gentle strength that I'll remember it.

I take a deeper, longer breath, then slowly stand and tread
Down darkened hall, past silent bath, then to my waiting bed.
How much darker, colder, silent, would my house forever be
Had I not known your name at least just momentarily?

The loss you left behind, the emptiness I'm going through,
Exist today only because they once were filled with you.
I close my eyes, brush tears on cotton, knowing it's all right.
My memories will be enough to fill my dreams tonight.
© Copyright 2003 Ron Carnell - All Rights Reserved
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GG
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oh my...
you penned what I feel... the kind of thing I won't let myself say I feel, anymore. Very amazing write.. fel honored to see it and even more so to vote.
*trying not to cry* ..should have warned us to get a tissue.
Always, Alyssa

- And so it was that time stood still -
     (blink, breathe, stand, fight)

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3 posted 03-22-2003 11:09 AM       View Profile for garysgirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit garysgirl's Home Page   View IP for garysgirl

Ron, I'm speechless, but voting.
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The smile was for the fact that you’ve finally got around to posting a submission.

The vote was for the fact that the book wouldn’t be complete without a poem from the person who put it all together.

This second reply is just to say that I enjoyed the poem, it was well thought out, well constructed and well written.

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5 posted 03-22-2003 11:23 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Anyone who has lost a loved one will be able to relate to this. Everything about it is perfect - emotion, meter rhyme. I too am voting for it.
Kit McCallum
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Oh Ron ... this piece touched this tender lovin' heart this morning. I too have known this emptiness you've described so eloquently. Beautifully written ... I've got some misty eyes and goosebumps as I type my reply to you from this end.

Best wishes and hugs,
/Kit
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7 posted 03-22-2003 12:26 PM       View Profile for Mysteria   Email Mysteria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mysteria

Oh my, this speaks of the emptiness and pain that I have felt with many and I am sure so many more will feel in days to come.  I send my understanding, and acknowledge what a fantastically written poem this is on loss as well.
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I'm crying and I'm voting.
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I really don't know what to say, as tears stream down my face.

Sometimes we have to follow a stronger voice, even if it's silent.


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This blue screen breathes of purest passion and compassion with this post.
Ron, this is one of the most beautiful pieces that I've ever read, and I'm not just saying this because YOU posted it.
This poetry lives and breathes the essence of unconditional LOVE.

May ripples of LOVE
become waves of PEACE

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I forgot to add this to my library
..not that I want to cry every time I go to my library... or maybe I do.. *sigh*

Always, Alyssa
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wow
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Ron,

You capture the feelings of missing very well as your poem touches and harnesses our senses to every squeak and dying ember in the empty house and then you leave us thankful for the times once shared and those times of which continue to be shared through your dreams. A wonderful poem, filled with sentiment, longing, and promise and most deserving, I think, of inclusion in our anthology. Great job!!!

-Bob

whoops... had to come back to vote.

[This message has been edited by Lighthousebob (03-22-2003 01:07 PM).]

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Ron, I too, have felt such a loss, and in the still of the night, the loneliness has pervaded my very soul. I have not been able to write of that pain, but the held-back tears are now silently sliding down my cheeks as I read your words...

.....I am feeling much better now! The endorphins are kicking in! Thanks! I needed that!

---and I'm thrilled that this eloquent piece of writing will be published in Reflections! We're definitely voting this one right into the book!  

Peace & Love,
Linda

[This message has been edited by Earth Angel (03-22-2003 02:20 PM).]

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You got my vote Ron. Memories are wonderful.

~Liz

Waited on a line of greens and blues, just to be the next to be with you..
~Mr. Big

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I know this feeling all too well..
Extremely well done poet sir.

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
Dancing with you in the summer rain~

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A vote for this write...these feelings...this woman.

And a hope that the new book will have a dedication to her.
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A smile and a hug... a hug and a smile... and another hug...
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Ron~

'Your touch upon my shoulder is a phantom of my mind,
I will not turn, I cannot turn, for fear of what I'll find.
The squeeze lasts but a moment more, and then, like you, is quit,
With just enough of gentle strength that I'll remember it.'


Printed and hanging on my remember wall~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~



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Fantastic,Ron. Glad to see you put something in the book. This has a strong, heart touching feel.
Sandra
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(big huggggsssssss) God Bless You, sweet friend, I am delighted you have submitted as I wanted to say how this touched me so as I know it would for all who inevitably cope with a loss at some point! (wipes tears) My heart goes out to you as you truly are a wonderfully loviung and compassionate person and you write of the truth of these feelings we ever feel so much and this poem is truly remedy to the heart and soul! God Bless You, sweet friend, you most graciously have my proud vote, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ron, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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Ron,

This is most touching, the pain lays upon the paper for me to see. It helps to touch it, feel it and be able to put it down to rest. You have expressed this emptyness too well!

Excellent.

SG
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24 posted 03-22-2003 03:49 PM       View Profile for Chanson   Email Chanson   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Chanson

"How much darker, colder, silent, would my house forever be
Had I not known your name at least just momentarily?"


Some people have the natural ability
to light up a place, a heart, and
their presence is a source of joy
and strength.

Her loss is tangible
as you pen expressively.

Hugs,
Chanson



When you think you have heard it all,
listen more closely.
~Dorene
 
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