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Into This House, A Loss Has Come

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Miah
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25 posted 03-22-2003 03:49 PM       View Profile for Miah   Email Miah   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Miah

This is a wonderful poem.  One I will keep in my favorites forever.
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26 posted 03-22-2003 04:09 PM       View Profile for Greeneyes   Email Greeneyes   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Greeneyes

quote:
I close my eyes, brush tears on cotton, knowing it's all right.
My memories will be enough to fill my dreams tonight


This is really amazing....


Lauren~

I close my eyes and there in the shadows I see your light
You come to me out of my dreams
Across the night

Duncan
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27 posted 03-22-2003 04:10 PM       View Profile for Duncan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Duncan

'This missing you remains a quiet, ever-spreading ache,
A hole that, still unfilled, fills every hour I'm awake.
How can something not really here, by dint of being gone,
Bring such an empty pain into my house from dusk to dawn?'

I thought of Lyra when I read the title and the poem brought back many memories from many homes.  Beautiful poem Ron.  
Dark Angel
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28 posted 03-22-2003 04:44 PM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

This poem is simply beautiful and amazing and so are you Ron

Maree
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29 posted 03-22-2003 06:09 PM       View Profile for vlraynes   Email vlraynes   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit vlraynes's Home Page   View IP for vlraynes


Ron...I don't have the words right now,
but I have hugs and understanding...LOTS of hugs.

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

Jason Lyle
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30 posted 03-22-2003 06:23 PM       View Profile for Jason Lyle   Email Jason Lyle   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jason Lyle

wow, a nice rhyme, how cheesy, an understatement, I found myself reading the first time, rhyming the second, and counting syllables the third.
Nice job on three counts
Jason
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31 posted 03-22-2003 06:27 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Ron...Beautiful and spoken from the heart.  Touched so many feelings that I know and understand.  
Bill Charles
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32 posted 03-22-2003 07:01 PM       View Profile for Bill Charles   Email Bill Charles   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Bill Charles

Ron - this writing is to touching to even comment about. I can't find the words to do it justice, except I can vote for it to be included in the book...

BC
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33 posted 03-22-2003 08:55 PM       View Profile for LoveBug   Email LoveBug   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LoveBug

"The loss you left behind, the emptiness I'm going through,
Exist today only because they once were filled with you.
I close my eyes, brush tears on cotton, knowing it's all right.
My memories will be enough to fill my dreams tonight."

It's a pity that you're so busy... your poetry is so beautiful and emotional, the kind that I love. I'd love to read you more. This is such a wonderful choice for our book, Ron. It's also going in my library.. it has a lot of meanings for me right now. Thank you so much for everything.

Oh, make me Thine forever
And should I fainting be
Lord, let me never ever
Outlive my love for Thee

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34 posted 03-22-2003 08:57 PM       View Profile for LoveBug   Email LoveBug   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LoveBug

I forgot the button, silly me...

Oh, make me Thine forever
And should I fainting be
Lord, let me never ever
Outlive my love for Thee

Justbleu
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35 posted 03-22-2003 09:04 PM       View Profile for Justbleu   Email Justbleu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Justbleu's Home Page   View IP for Justbleu

Ron,  
This really tuggs at my heart.  It is a beautiful and touching poem.....
I'm all teary-eyed now but, it was worth it.  

HUGS,
Bridgette
P.S. I'm voting and putting this in my library too!!!!!

"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again.  To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown

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36 posted 03-22-2003 09:05 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

It appears this poem has launched more tears than Robert Burns' Ode to an Onion!

On a serious note, it is indeed an excellent poem, both in substance and form. Excellent work, Ron..
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37 posted 03-22-2003 10:30 PM       View Profile for Trillium   Email Trillium   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Trillium

Ron:  A really impressive poem, which I voted for.  Very moving and well written.

Betty Lou Hebert

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38 posted 03-22-2003 10:32 PM       View Profile for WhiteRose   Email WhiteRose   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for WhiteRose

The loss you left behind, the emptiness I'm going through,
Exist today only because they once were filled with you.
I close my eyes, brush tears on cotton, knowing it's all right.
My memories will be enough to fill my dreams tonight.

This is sad, yet lovely. Enjoyed the feel of this.
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39 posted 03-22-2003 10:36 PM       View Profile for Larry C   Email Larry C   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Larry C's Home Page   View IP for Larry C

Ron,
My experience tells me you have experience on this topic too. But this keeper puts words to many unexpressed thoughts! Such an incredibly meaningful write. It fits the inspiration of this book so well and touches my heart deeply. I'm voting twice.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

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40 posted 03-22-2003 10:43 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

...shame on me.

sometimes I forget that I didn't invent grief...
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41 posted 03-23-2003 04:49 AM       View Profile for Charisma   Email Charisma   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Charisma's Home Page   View IP for Charisma

Crying, just because you translated so much feelings from deep inside.
yes I think many can relate on your words, thank you for sharing Ron

(((hugs)))
Charisma
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42 posted 03-23-2003 06:11 AM       View Profile for kaile   Email kaile   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kaile

Ron,
i like the way you varied the memories line  to suit the context in each stanza...thought that was pretty creative
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43 posted 03-23-2003 07:09 AM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Thank you, Sir...
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44 posted 03-23-2003 02:44 PM       View Profile for Nightshade   Email Nightshade   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nightshade's Home Page   View IP for Nightshade

Ron - you have captured the longing and emptiness of one's heart in loss so well, I have a lump in my throat. This certainly gets my vote. thankyou. Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers-
that perches in the soul....
                  
                       -Emily Dickinson

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45 posted 03-23-2003 05:28 PM       View Profile for Local Parasite   Email Local Parasite   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Local Parasite's Home Page   View IP for Local Parasite

I like the irony of the title... that she was never in your house, but her loss enters your house so tangibly.  "A loss has come."  I couldn't help smiling at the cleverness of those four words.

As for the whole poem, I love your use of repetition, especially how you altered each line just enough to make it distinct, and still stick with the theme.  The result is a flowing, light and easy read, appropriate to one whose underlying sentiments are the focus of the poem.

It is a sad situation.  Loss of that not tangible can itself be tangible.  I've felt this myself, so at least a little, I understand...

Lovely tribute, Ron.  And of course I'm voting.  

Parasite

"Faith" means the will to avoid knowing what is true.
~ Friedrich Wilhelm Nietzsche

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46 posted 03-23-2003 05:31 PM       View Profile for Alicethruglass   Email Alicethruglass   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alicethruglass

I close my eyes, brush tears on cotton, knowing it's all right.
My memories will be enough to fill my dreams tonight.


I  love those lines. A very touching and tender writing, Ron. I could feel the warmth.

*s
Maureen
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47 posted 03-23-2003 07:57 PM       View Profile for NewEnglandlazurlu   Email NewEnglandlazurlu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for NewEnglandlazurlu

Ron, I am so thrilled to see one of your wonderfully written poems. The loss of a loved one is always so difficult and leaves a void that can never be replaced. You captured this loss incredibly.

Hugs, Marti

Few are those who see with their own eyes and feel with their own hearts.  A.Einstein

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48 posted 03-24-2003 12:08 AM       View Profile for DawnG   Email DawnG   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for DawnG

Ron,

Thank you for sharing what is such an emotion that all of us are or have been dealt in life. This is an awesome write and I'm very happy you have chosen to put this in our book.

                        Dawn
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49 posted 03-24-2003 08:32 AM       View Profile for El_Campeador   Email El_Campeador   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit El_Campeador's Home Page   View IP for El_Campeador

You already have 48 replys and about as many votes, but I am going to throw my vote in as well...

“We are all travelers in the wilderness of this world, and the best that we can find in our travels is an honest friend.” –Robert Louis Stevenson

 
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