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Skyfire
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0 posted 2003-03-20 05:34 AM



"He's in the hospital"
Nothing.
I'm still numb.
It didn't even really register.
Shock or denial,
either was okay.
The coldness of not feeling...
There was nothing
Nothing at all.
When I heard they rushed you to surgery,
I felt.
The pain was unbearable;
I nearly choked on my own emotions.
So I became numb...
Again.
It was easier for me.
And when I see you
I'm going to hold you close to me.
I'm going to softly kiss you.
I'm going to look into your eyes and whisper,
"I love you"
And then...
That is when I will cry.



© Copyright 2003 Rhonda Adolph - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2003-03-20 08:43 AM


Skyfire, my husband had major surgery in 1991. I will never forget that feeling of numbness that you speak about. I couldn't feel anything. I didn't dare, for fear I would just crumble, and then be of no use to him at a time when he needed me most.  You will feel it when it's over, then watch out for the deluge of tears.  I think it is the mind and body's way of protecting itself, this feeling of numbness.

A very poignant write.

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2 posted 2003-03-20 08:49 AM


Excellent write Rhonda!
Gets my vote!
~Hugs~

~ I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before ~

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3 posted 2003-03-20 04:33 PM


*Hugs* Great write Rhonda


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4 posted 2003-03-20 07:48 PM


very sweet...I  wrote about crystal tears once..someone inspired me on here. *s

Crystal Tears

I hide my heart, tamed for you
but below the surface
I need to love you the way I know how,
unconditionally.
Disappointments, fallen sensations
I shall let it all flow in crystal,
spilling, these raindrops of my soul.
Walking alone, tasting tears
from an opportunity missed
needing to be who I choose to be.
Could you ever see things my way?

~A~

Skyfire
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5 posted 2003-03-20 09:09 PM


Thank you for your replies. My Will is due home soon if all goes well (ie if he can keep himself out of trouble lol), and he can't come home soon enough in my opinion. *grins and twirls*

Sometimes you find a friend where once there wasn't one. Sometimes you find a love where once there was a friend.

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6 posted 2003-03-20 11:33 PM


Rhonda, how could I not vote for this? I'm so happy to hear Will is doing better. Great poem.

sky

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7 posted 2003-03-21 02:03 PM


*BUGS* I love the poem, and I'm happy for you... but you know that.

Kielo

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8 posted 2003-03-21 02:27 PM




(big hugggssssssss) My heart sympathizes with these emotions you feell dearest friend, I too always cry when I see someone in the hospital, it can be so difficult to see and I always hold that persons hand and convince them all will be alright! (wipes tears) You have my vote, dearest friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Rhonda, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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9 posted 2003-03-21 10:19 PM


Rhonda... I love this!!! It gave me goosebumps! This definately should go into the book!!! You get my vote.

Tara

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call my name and save me from the dark"
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10 posted 2003-03-22 12:56 PM


My vote for this great write is cast.
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11 posted 2003-03-23 04:59 AM


Cast my vote too

Charisma

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12 posted 2003-03-23 10:36 AM


heart hugssss hon....I know the feeling well....

Lauren~

I close my eyes and there in the shadows I see your light
You come to me out of my dreams
Across the night

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13 posted 2003-03-24 01:06 AM


Rhonda,

I had a very close friend in the hospital last year and knowing they were in the hospital and couldn't get there to comfort them was really hard. Maybe this poem also describes to me how my family has felt the many times they have seen me in the hospital or going through surgery. I really enjoyed this. Gave me much to think about.

                                 Dawn

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14 posted 2003-03-25 07:51 AM


well told... and nicely written.. glad to read he is better and understand how the numb takes over at times...


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15 posted 2003-03-25 01:33 PM


Nicely written and well deserving of praise in publication, especially one on "reflections!"
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16 posted 2003-03-25 01:40 PM


*Big Smiles* that all will be well.
Skyfire
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17 posted 2003-03-25 03:31 PM


Thank you all so much. I wasn't sure how well this one would go over, but I'm glad that I listened to myself and posted it. Thank you again!

If I love you enough will you feel it over the distance?

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18 posted 2003-03-26 12:34 PM



Lots of emotion in this one, and well expressed.

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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19 posted 2003-03-27 07:55 AM


And when I see you
I'm going to hold you close to me.
I'm going to softly kiss you.
I'm going to look into your eyes and whisper,
"I love you"
And then...
That is when I will cry.
==============================

beautiful heartfelt emotions.
well done poetess skyfire!!

"and when we get to the pearly gates ...
we'll find what we called our sins were just mistakes."

Tom Kimmel


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20 posted 2003-03-29 01:25 AM


Lots of love in this one..that last line - the giving-in to the tears that are eventual, and inevitable - that part gave me chills...

Hope your honey is doing well..

hugs, g

"laughter is the shortest distance between two people"  - victor borge

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