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Jamie
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Blue Heaven

0 posted 2003-03-16 06:06 PM



Your ariose voice
              is cabled
and wears the sound of  the sea
   Each thought arrives
                    before you
rebreathe the last whisper
   A seductress calling me
                          from sleep
with words  gently
   disappearing into
              my fantasy
reborn into a nautical dream
   where a musical ship
                      must ferry
your words to me in song

   No journey of ease in
             tranquil leisure
a bond of harmony
   is formed with
           the shore
   There are no mermaids
                    riding  waves
to kiss drowning sailors
   so hymns are offered
               to lighthouses
that answer  in steady bright beats

   Each note is
      a promise
of hope  that endures
   within each song
   as  yet unwritten
every dream left unscored
   I frown as
    I wonder
if a deafened Beethoven
   was cursed with
        silent dreams
or maybe in blessed sleep
   he found his salvation
                               not in
sawing legs from pianos
   but through walking meadows
                                   in the night
accompanied by his pastoral sixth

   It's easy to
          dream
with my eyes closed
   I can taste the
    distant winds
that sweeten  austere sails
   with a lingering scent
               freshly missed
and unmistakably yours
   I can hear you
          calling me
and should feel your breath
   It’s  very absence
           awakens me
to find your voice again cabled
   thickly whispering goodnights
                                     and regrets
It is your time now to dream

© Copyright 2003 Jamie Patterson - All Rights Reserved
Enchantress
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1 posted 2003-03-16 06:32 PM


Beautiful!!  A must for the book!

~ Trace my body with your words..
And in doing so, you touch my heart. ~

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2 posted 2003-03-16 06:51 PM


















(big hugggssssssss) Oh Jamie, this is lovely, sweet friend, may that muse always orchestrate a symphony of romance that is bound to last a lifetime with all the bells accompanying in melody! (smiles) This is mesmerizing, sweet friend, you have my surreal vote, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Jamie, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton














"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

WhiteRose
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3 posted 2003-03-16 08:30 PM


This is wonderful, enjoyed the read of it very much.
Dark Angel
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4 posted 2003-03-17 05:19 AM


Ahhh Jamie.. reflections needs this exquisite poem.

You have my vote.. m'friend

Flower
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5 posted 2003-03-17 11:56 AM


This is awesome.

Love reading all these great writes.
I write not!

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6 posted 2003-03-17 02:32 PM


A very beautiful poem for book submission, Jamie.

"Love makes the world go around"
~with love and hugs from Ethel__GG~  
                  

skyshine
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7 posted 2003-03-17 04:55 PM


This deserves a place in the book. I loved the last line.

Elizabeth


I've waited on a line of greens and blues, just to be the next to be with you..
~Mr. Big

[This message has been edited by skyshine (03-17-2003 04:55 PM).]

SPIRIT
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8 posted 2003-03-17 06:36 PM


Lovely!
Poet deVine
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9 posted 2003-03-17 07:31 PM


Simply beautiful. I miss reading you - please post more often!!
Janet Marie
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10 posted 2003-03-17 09:00 PM


Your ariose voice
              is cabled
and wears the sound of  the sea
   Each thought arrives
                    before you
rebreathe the last whisper
   A seductress calling me
                          from sleep
with words  gently
   disappearing into
              my fantasy
reborn into a nautical dream
   where a musical ship
                      must ferry
your words to me in song

   No journey of ease in
             tranquil leisure
a bond of harmony
   is formed with
           the shore
   There are no mermaids
                    riding  waves
to kiss drowning sailors
   so hymns are offered
               to lighthouses
that answer  in steady bright beats

===============================

It's easy to
          dream
with my eyes closed
   I can taste the
    distant winds
that sweeten  austere sails
   with a lingering scent
               freshly missed
and unmistakably yours
   I can hear you
          calling me
and should feel your breath
   It’s  very absence
           awakens me
to find your voice again cabled
   thickly whispering goodnights
                                     and regrets
It is your time now to dream

====================================

Well this is just as enchanting & exquisite as it gets...what a lovely surreal offering Poet Jamie...
I'll vote once and *sigh* twice
Very cool write poet sir.

  

If I am right ... if I can be ...
constant and faithful ... you'll find me

TC

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11 posted 2003-03-17 09:09 PM


Like a dream
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12 posted 2003-03-18 01:58 PM


yes, a dream indeed, and Jamie I sure wish you would get in there more often, your choice of words for imagery are absolutely fabulous.  Again, congratulations on your publication, and I bet there are tons more that are book worthy than this one.

  
Sharon

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13 posted 2003-03-18 08:10 PM


I totally loved the musical theme, Jamie.  Excellent work!!  You got my vote.  

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

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14 posted 2003-03-18 08:28 PM


huggles and votes pooh

K

Jamie
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Blue Heaven
15 posted 2003-03-19 01:00 PM


Many thanks for the votes, and a special thank you to the inspiration.

J

There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar.
byron

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16 posted 2003-03-19 11:22 PM


A firefighter with the soul of a poet...a beautiful combination!  

Peace & Love,
Earth Angel

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17 posted 2003-03-24 09:58 AM


Jamie,this poem is just beautiful.I love your lines in reference to prayers to lighthouses and the ones about Beethoven.It lulls one with its placid eloquence.A keeper for me.Vote!

Peace,Geoff

If a man has not discovered something he is willing to die for,his life is not worth living.

Martin Luther King,Jr. Detroit,1963

Street Heart
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18 posted 2003-03-24 10:00 AM


I needed to come back to store this one in my "vaults".

Thanks,Jamie,Geoff

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19 posted 2003-03-25 04:07 PM


Reads like the last part of The Wasteland, spread over music and the sea.
Nan
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20 posted 2003-03-26 08:39 AM


This is a wonderful "Dreamsong" Jamie... I enjoyed the tune...
Justbleu
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21 posted 2003-03-26 10:12 AM


Nice...
Bridgette

"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again.  To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown


LngJhnAg
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22 posted 2003-03-30 06:53 PM


I especially like the reference to Beethoven - well done.
Jamie
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Blue Heaven
23 posted 2003-03-30 11:36 PM


Thanks!

There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar.
byron

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24 posted 2003-04-03 11:38 AM


Hi my old haikuing friend, thanks for remembering me..

this was slightly intimidating..you had me reaching for my dictionary after reading your very first line~to check out "ariose"...

i dig the Beethoven stanza as well and no, i am not stealing LongJohn's line...

Macsen3
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25 posted 2003-04-03 11:45 AM


Just looking in on ya'll..... new to the site  
Sunshine
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26 posted 2003-04-03 12:04 PM


   Each note is
      a promise
of hope  that endures
   within each song
   as  yet unwritten

~*~

Yep!

        Karilea - If I whisper, will you listen?...

Joyce Johnson
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27 posted 2003-04-03 12:12 PM


Wonderful phrases.  Joyce
Dark Angel
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28 posted 2003-04-03 04:40 PM


Darn, wish I could vote again m'friend.


Martie
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29 posted 2003-04-03 05:04 PM


So very beautiful!!!
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30 posted 2003-04-03 11:33 PM


This is one fine piece of poetry -- voting in a heartbeat, and I think I have a new voice among my favorites around here.

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31 posted 2003-04-04 07:58 AM


Ahh what beauty you have penned with this Jamie ~ simply beautiful ~ Bonnie
Sudhir Iyer
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32 posted 2003-04-04 09:30 AM




so good to see you around...

regards,
sudhir

Susan Caldwell
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33 posted 2003-04-04 09:50 AM


"It's easy to
          dream
with my eyes closed
   I can taste the
    distant winds
that sweeten  austere sails
   with a lingering scent
               freshly missed
and unmistakably yours"

Wow!  I want a man to think that way of me..
Voted.

Susan

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34 posted 2003-04-05 10:47 AM


Jamie,

Beautiful writing! You definitely got
my vote!! So good to see your work
again. I'm sorry Ive been out of touch
for so long. Life has been busy crazy
here lately. I'll write you soon. Hope
you're well!

take care.
amy

"love is like a butterfly--
if you chase it,
it will surely fly away,instead
hold it close and watch it grow into
something beautiful"
~me~

BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside
35 posted 2003-04-05 10:16 PM


I can taste the
    distant winds
that sweeten  austere sails
   with a lingering scent
               freshly missed
and unmistakably yours
   I can hear you
          calling me
and should feel your breath
   It’s  very absence
           awakens me
to find your voice again cabled
   thickly whispering goodnights
                                     and regrets
It is your time now to dream


Here's to you and every dreamer who dares to believe in them.

I wish I could find the words to thank you for this.  

It speaks to me in every way...as if the wind swept me up, softly.

Martie
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36 posted 2003-04-06 12:11 PM


bump!!
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37 posted 2003-04-07 09:10 PM


Well, I've read this one three times. It's going into my favorites file, and I certainly hope it goes into the book.
Jamie
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Blue Heaven
38 posted 2003-04-09 01:12 AM


many thanks to each of you

There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar.
byron

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