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pjtalty
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0 posted 03-12-2003 04:05 AM       View Profile for pjtalty   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for pjtalty

He cried at her cruelty;
her duplicity; her failure
to treat reality with honesty,
but the tears, waves of them
were not crystal pure.

They were dangerous, were charged
with currents of hurt; deep distress;
rushing like raging torrents
flooding reason, drowning will
to rise above the deluge.

The gait that used to happily swing
in joyous rhythms of life became
a shamble of shuffles descending
into deep chasms of bitterness:
now his alter ego.

Thirty years struggled to pass;
the constant pain, the aching thirst
for vengeance never passed; disdain
for love had soured a spirit now
in a kind of death

Poor fellow! What can be done?
What can friends do for him?
What can life do for him?
What can he do for life?
Can he live again?

Pity! Only he can rise
from his grave of deathly sadness
to cull the weeds of bitterness,
to forgive and then to live again
with hope, happiness, renewal.
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1 posted 03-12-2003 09:11 AM       View Profile for Enchantress   Email Enchantress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enchantress

Very well done!

~ Trace my body with your words..
And in doing so, you touch my heart. ~

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(big hugggsssssss) Oh Patrick, this is so very heartfelt and ever so common between us all, sweet friend, sadly I know this feeling too and I know by experience only oneself can rise above and seek forgiveness! (sad sigh) I send angel hugs to you for this sensitive and touching write, sweet friend, you have my vote, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Patrick, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

KristieSue
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3 posted 03-12-2003 10:12 AM       View Profile for KristieSue   Email KristieSue   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit KristieSue's Home Page   View IP for KristieSue

sad, but well written...

KS
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4 posted 03-12-2003 10:59 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

pjtalty
Good one, enjoyed.
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5 posted 03-12-2003 03:08 PM       View Profile for garysgirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit garysgirl's Home Page   View IP for garysgirl

Patrick, this is a very well-written
poem.

"Love makes the world go around"
~with love and hugs from Ethel__GG~  
                  

WhiteRose
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6 posted 03-19-2003 12:10 AM       View Profile for WhiteRose   Email WhiteRose   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for WhiteRose

I agree, this is a really well written poem.
Earth Angel
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7 posted 03-19-2003 02:22 PM       View Profile for Earth Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Earth Angel's Home Page   View IP for Earth Angel

Your closing stanza summed up the poem very well.

Peace & Light,
Earth Angel
Jamie
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8 posted 03-24-2003 06:26 PM       View Profile for Jamie   Email Jamie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Jamie's Home Page   View IP for Jamie

an angst ridden ride--well done

There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar.
byron

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9 posted 03-25-2003 01:07 AM       View Profile for SPIRIT   Email SPIRIT   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SPIRIT

Enormously vote worthy piece.
Joyce Johnson
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so sad, but only he can clear his own mind.  Joyce
Jason Lyle
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11 posted 03-25-2003 04:09 PM       View Profile for Jason Lyle   Email Jason Lyle   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jason Lyle

Very, very nice write.
Jason
Street Heart
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Good Lord,Patrick,do you know me? If not,you must be psychic! You have no idea how much I am there within your work.I bet we could talk volumes together,you and I.You have written such an eloquently insightful free
verse here.A "keeper" for me and you have my vote.If this is autobiographical,I sincerely hope that you find some type of healing.Man,
I'm telling you...your references to duplicity,bitterness,and so on...goodness,
if you only knew.The effects of betrayal and abandonment can last forever.I am not telling you this to have you reply,but read my offering in the "Corner Pub" called
"9/11/2000".That is what happened to me as the "jet" of betrayal crashed into the "tower" of my belief,trust,life.Still healing and trying to turn disaster into good.Wishing you better days and better Love.

Peace On Earth,Geoffrey  

If a man has not discovered something he is willing to die for,his life is not worth living.

Martin Luther King,Jr. Detroit,1963

dgvarner
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13 posted 04-29-2003 11:28 PM       View Profile for dgvarner   Email dgvarner   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for dgvarner

enjoyed -- great ending!

hugs, g

"If you suppress laughter, it goes down and spreads out your hips."- Steve Allen

 
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