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majnu
since 2002-10-13
Posts 1088SF Bay Area |
Not really new, this was one of the ones that was lost.  ------------------------------------------------ The Lot of Man In the soft shade of the apple tree Lazy days pass by slowly for her. But Adam ever rejoices about the garden, Pleasure in the animals, rapture in the Flowers, Presented open just for him they Raise their little heads out of lucious lips. Today the heat of the beating sun Dries the grass and fire licks the sky Where the slivering serpent has passed. Adam's away, down a snaking path Oblivious as something slinks its way Near the tree where ripe apparently is the fruit. Whim carries him to a near by bush, And taking a flower heads to return, A pretty present for his pretty one. The serpent circles round the shade, His blood cold requires the warmth But he smells another source. Whistling away as he nears his hill, Circling the trunk as below she sleeps, Adam strides long and strong, noble. His forked tongue tickles her ear as she... Stopping to pet the animals his ease is ill, She wakes and feels but is rooted as the tree. His ascent up the lush knoll begins Just as the serpent's head descends To her breast as Adam's descends to his Hands whence he drinks deep of a small brook While she breathes deep and sighs, The serpent caresses one then two... They both reach the crown together, Snaking into one valley as Adam Arrives from his the serpent tongue Dances inside her and Adam happening Upon the sight stands stupified as The serpent sinks his fangs into her He drops to his knees as, she, says, Yessssss. -majnu |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
OH YESSSS! LOL, Ron needs to feed that hungry server more bytes. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Wow!!! Oh my course, I never remember reading this story like this, but I sure like your version very much as well, and just enjoying it the second time around is even more a pleasure! (big hugggssssss) God Bless You, sweet friend, this has my vote, condemn that serpent, hehe, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Well done! ~ Trace my body with your words.. |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
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KristieSue
since 2003-01-31
Posts 1460PA, US |
LOL that was an interesting twist. Neat! |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
 "Love makes the world go around" |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
re-voting Manju - you know I liked it before and its better with age |
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SPIRIT Senior Member
since 2002-12-29
Posts 1745California Desert |
Great! Great!! Great!! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
That is not how the story of Adam and Eve was taught to us in Sunday School! Your rendition is far more interesting! |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
 Read, voted, and oh so enjoyed! |
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waldopepper Member
since 2003-03-18
Posts 157Tennessee, USA |
My man, this is truly worthy of consideration for the book. You know it reads just as good, if not better, the second time around. The serpent doth truly beguile! You 'da man. |
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DawnG
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494United States |
Quite interesting, but I liked it. Dawn |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Man! This brings lots of images with it. The subleties are there, waiting to be seen if the reader takes his time. I did, and I'm glad I didn't skim. Great write, majnu. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
bump! |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
goodness, what a write! def interesting and sensual yet chilling spin. you got my vote, hope this makes the book! take care. amy "love is like a butterfly-- |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
?This certainly is not..... just another Adam and Eve story. Joyce |
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SPIRIT Senior Member
since 2002-12-29
Posts 1745California Desert |
Bump!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! |
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