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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2003-03-11 09:42 PM


There are scratches in the velvet--
lines that don't connect the dots.
There are winds that feed the water.
There are visions in ink blot.



Where there is light, a shadow plays--
aspersions cast by luck of moon.
Scratches in these velvet days--
that sound a hollow-ringed spittoon.



There is sand and memory,
fluid,
through a traipse of glass
mesmerizing in journey--
ruins--
through a glance of past.



There's hope in ticking of a clock
insistant in its urge to run--
the scratches in a velvet pile
show colors in the pass of sun.



Velvet scratches in deny,
that boast of being worn...
As if they told a war story.
As if they screamed of being born.



*    *    *


[This message has been edited by serenity blaze (03-12-2003 12:10 AM).]

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Enchantress
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1 posted 2003-03-11 09:44 PM


YES!!! YES!! YES!!!  
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2 posted 2003-03-11 11:13 PM


Hungry as the server is, we won't let him gobble this one up without registering another check mark to 'submit.'
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3 posted 2003-03-11 11:38 PM




(sigh) Velvet is no ordinary texture, it is filled with so many more scratches than meets the eye, waves and wrinkles that only pacience and focus can marvel, and between the lines there may be even more scratches yet! (big hugggssssss) I love this, sweet friend, I am glad you re-posted this so I can get my vote back in, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karen, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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4 posted 2003-03-12 08:52 AM



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5 posted 2003-03-12 03:26 PM


Yes before and Yes, now!!

"Love makes the world go around"
~with love and hugs from Ethel__GG~  
                  

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6 posted 2003-03-12 03:42 PM


Love this before and love it now gorgeous!...

voting

Maree.

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7 posted 2003-03-12 11:45 PM


Yuppers you are my heroess (hero, whatever)

           
R.E.S.P.E.C.T.
Aretha Franklin  

Nan
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8 posted 2003-03-13 07:48 AM


Indeed - worth the re-read...
Chanson
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9 posted 2003-03-13 08:05 AM


"Scratches in these velvet days"...
Love that! And the whole metaphor
is awesome, serenity.

When you think you have heard it all,
listen more closely.
~Dorene

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10 posted 2003-03-13 09:18 AM



brian sites
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11 posted 2003-03-13 05:17 PM


unbelievable....
magick
shaking head.....

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12 posted 2003-03-13 08:41 PM


Serenity~
Just so very beautiful~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com                        

SPIRIT
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13 posted 2003-03-13 09:19 PM


My vote is in.


Bill Charles
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14 posted 2003-03-14 12:02 PM


witch of the cypress - now how could I not vote for this one. H'mmmm...

BC

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15 posted 2003-03-14 12:47 PM


Aaackkkk! Was this lost as well?

Sheesh!

*click*

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16 posted 2003-03-14 04:24 PM


Glad you were able to recover this one.
WhiteRose
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17 posted 2003-03-15 11:11 AM


Wonderful!
vlraynes
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18 posted 2003-03-16 02:31 AM



I LOVE this, Karen...an excellent write.
Very cool!
Hugs,
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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19 posted 2003-03-18 01:21 PM


  

If I am right ... if I can be ...
constant and faithful ... you'll find me

TC

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20 posted 2003-03-18 01:27 PM


This one scratches more than just the surface!

Warm hugs,
EA

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21 posted 2003-03-18 05:49 PM


enjoyed it very much

Charisma

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22 posted 2003-03-25 06:12 PM


Velvet scratches in deny,
that boast of being worn...
As if they told a war story.
As if they screamed of being born.

even alone this says so much...
*s
~A~

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23 posted 2003-03-27 04:10 PM



language defies. poetry surpasses. damn.

click click.

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24 posted 2003-03-27 08:00 PM


Karen,
I didn't mean to wait this long to vote! I like this for sure... At my age a little sign of wear is a good thing.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

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25 posted 2003-03-27 10:12 PM


Perfect choice, this is fantastic.
Sandra

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26 posted 2003-03-28 08:20 PM


This is amazing, vote cast!  

[This message has been edited by Auguste (03-28-2003 08:21 PM).]

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27 posted 2003-03-28 08:48 PM


Exceptional...
Serenity, I didn't have the priviledge to catch this poem before but am sure glad I did now...
Smiles2uPoetFriend...
*~coco~*

Mark Bohannan
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28 posted 2003-03-30 11:45 AM


Sometimes a wallflower learns to dance and never leaves the floor.  I count a little over two and a half years since I watched you take the floor and you are still dancing strong.  

Wonderful piece and plenty of food to feed the mind in this one.
  and nooooo ... those are not my heels I am clicking.

Janet Marie
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29 posted 2003-04-03 10:11 PM


like a bad rash the moth keeps coming back

"and when we get to the pearly gates ...
we'll find what we called our sins were just mistakes."

Tom Kimmel


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30 posted 2003-04-03 11:31 PM


Back to the top...

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

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31 posted 2003-04-06 11:09 AM


Excellent. definately deserving of Reflections I feel.  

Sometimes we have to follow a stronger voice, even if it's silent.


[This message has been edited by Lost Dreamer (04-06-2003 11:09 AM).]

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32 posted 2003-04-06 04:16 PM


Entrancing.  Joyce
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          Karilea - If I whisper, will you listen?...

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34 posted 2003-04-08 07:01 PM


Pure excellence Ms. Serenity!
Certainly book material!

~Sheri

"Don't wait for your ship to come in ...
Swim out to it"

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35 posted 2003-04-08 07:32 PM


If I was elloquent enough I would have said what Mark did, so I will just go "ditto", and tell you this is a must in that book.  You sure squeeze a word for all its worth you know that?

Don't be too hard on yourself - even Einstein had trouble tying his shoelaces.

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36 posted 2003-04-09 07:13 PM


karen,

missed this the first time around, and
so glad I got to see it now! a really
cool write! sorry lack of better words
but cool is what i think. you got my
vote!
take care
amy

"love is like a butterfly--
if you chase it,
it will surely fly away,instead
hold it close and watch it grow into
something beautiful"
~me~

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37 posted 2003-04-10 07:34 AM


YES.......



regards,
sudhir

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38 posted 2003-04-11 01:25 PM


This poem is reaaly good serenity. Good luck!!

mysticpoe

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39 posted 2003-04-12 01:03 PM


wow...
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40 posted 2003-04-13 04:30 AM


K:

There is sand and memory,
fluid,
through a traipse of glass

someday . . . someday . . .
I will write like this
I promise you
Peace to you
Good luck with this one
truly  xxoo

Velvet scratches - mannn - that brings me back to these scary velvet burgundy drapes that used to hang in my mothers living room . . .  

[This message has been edited by littlewing (04-13-2003 04:34 AM).]

passing shadows
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41 posted 2003-04-14 02:45 AM


can I vote again?
Martie
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42 posted 2003-04-14 03:47 PM


A vote, and my admiration!
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43 posted 2003-04-15 10:17 AM


Again I read one of yours, enjoy, then go back and read again, take a lesson in how to write....

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44 posted 2003-04-15 11:02 AM


ditto to the 43 replies...

awesome

Failure isn't failure if a lesson from it is learned ~ KS

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45 posted 2003-04-17 10:41 PM


Just a bump for visibility. Great!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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46 posted 2003-04-20 11:30 AM


BUMP
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47 posted 2003-04-20 09:06 PM


a wonderfull write i enjoyied it much!!
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48 posted 2003-04-21 12:19 PM


Very well done, Serenity! I 'ditto' all the above!
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49 posted 2003-04-21 07:35 PM


Well, look who flew into your window!
This is great and I love to read you.
Voted

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