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Lifelines and Hope

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Severn
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0 posted 02-22-2003 07:18 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Severn

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Itís tangled, love:
my life, and the hope
that stretches, thin as the apple
peelings I remember my mother
discarding; I craved
her apple crumble, and I havenít
had it for years.

Yes, some things, we leave behind
and others we carry,
theyíre unreleasable, unable
to fall into the waste

although they force a prodding -
like sore teeth in
an aching, wet mouth.

This is my disease, this tangle
of lines and affliction.
                Waitings, and unknown roads.

If I could shake it all out
Iíd walk smoothly, knowing I
could feast on my childhood
safeties
         for the duration,        
         for my seasons.

2

I remember playing elastics with
the snooty girls who could always
jump higher (but could they climb
trees, catlike?)
than I.
      
Their breath flew out in great gasps
with each triumph, and I saw myself
in the tangles I made,
their mockery rolling over me,

and I thought of how I had deciphered
my future from a cheap
fortune telling book, how
my dirty right palm told me I would
be successful after struggle.

Is success measured in the amount
of burns I carry, and the strength they
have supposedly infused?

3

                      Sometimes, Iíd like the
                      fantasy of weakness

My lines are long now, they soar out
past my palms and through the places
I have been, the hearts I have caressed
and burned.

The hearth fire I knew is cold;
I survive by an inner heat of memory
and my electric heater, recalling days of
thistle blossom breezing through my castles
in the trees

Aging, Iím surrounded by the blank looks
of go-getters and vitamin poppers, all
hoping for that extra year
or two. I hope they live, in their ecstasy of
body maintenance, I hope they feel
the hurt that brings strength and a need
to find

weakness and relief.

4

Perhaps, time will bring you to me,
and I will find one more tangle, and
one more survival to scratch into
the telling of my right palm.



~You can't see my eyes
They don't see yours
Hear me when I say
They don't mind at all~

Delerium


[This message has been edited by Severn (02-22-2003 07:21 PM).]

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Martie
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1 posted 02-22-2003 07:27 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Kamla...Sometimes it is hard to formulate a reply to something that is so personal and heart touching...so just hugging you, and voting.  
the_loner_23
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2 posted 02-22-2003 07:30 PM       View Profile for the_loner_23   Email the_loner_23   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for the_loner_23

This is such an awesome write I have to give you my vote.

Cold hands means a warm heart

Mistletoe Angel
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(sigh) Oh Kamla, this is wonderful, sweet friend, remember the best palm reader is YOU, tarot cards can't detect weaknesses, you can, and truly in the short run you may feel weak, but in the long run, you find you are stronger than before and I think people miss that point sometimes! (big hugggssssss) This is marvelous, sweet friend, BRAVO, you have my vote, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Kamla, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Chanson
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4 posted 02-22-2003 07:38 PM       View Profile for Chanson   Email Chanson   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Chanson

You have stirred
all of the senses.
Nicely done, Severn.

When you think you have heard it all,
listen more closely.
~Dorene

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5 posted 02-22-2003 07:43 PM       View Profile for Nightshade   Email Nightshade   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nightshade's Home Page   View IP for Nightshade

Kamla - this is very good. It gets my vote for sure! Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers-
that perches in the soul....
                  
                       -Emily Dickinson

Duncan
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6 posted 02-22-2003 08:06 PM       View Profile for Duncan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Duncan

'Itís tangled, love:
my life, and the hope
that stretches, thin as the apple
peelings I remember my mother
discarding; I craved
her apple crumble, and I havenít
had it for years.

Yes, some things, we leave behind
and others we carry,
theyíre unreleasable, unable
to fall into the waste

although they force a prodding -
like sore teeth in
an aching, wet mouth.

This is my disease, this tangle
of lines and affliction.
                Waitings, and unknown roads.

If I could shake it all out
Iíd walk smoothly, knowing I
could feast on my childhood
safeties
         for the duration,        
         for my seasons.'


I started replying to this 5 minutes ago but I keep changing my mind about what lines I like most... !  Glad to see you here Kamla.  At times, I saw this as though filmed on that old 8mm film my parents used, with the white dots at the beginning and end.  Little girls jumping rope, in between...  
Dark Angel
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7 posted 02-22-2003 08:32 PM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

speechless SB..speechless.
This would have to be my absolute favourite of yours.

So glad you submitted

and voting!

Maree
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"'Itís tangled, love:
my life, and the hope
that stretches, thin as the apple
peelings I remember my mother
discarding; I craved
her apple crumble, and I havenít
had it for years."

Such a touching and powerful piece... I loved this so much!

Oh, make me Thine forever
And should I fainting be
Lord, let me never ever
Outlive my love for Thee

garysgirl
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9 posted 02-22-2003 09:50 PM       View Profile for garysgirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit garysgirl's Home Page   View IP for garysgirl

Severn, girl, this is a beautiful poem, with so much meaning. I love it and think it should be in the book.....

Hugs,
Ethel
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two very enthusiastic thumbs up... for the movie "New Zealand Nights" as for the poem... oh yuh!!
ecrivan
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thumbs up on a pleasant prediction from the lines you read and hugs from Canada

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12 posted 02-22-2003 10:58 PM       View Profile for Mysteria   Email Mysteria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mysteria

Is this the Canadian line up for thumbs up?  Great as this just has to be in the book Severn, absolutely fantastic entry.  I miss your poetry girl, write more will you?

          
~* Carpe' Diem *~  

Aenimal
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Admittedly I haven't read much of your work over in the archives but that is a sin soon to be mended. This is not cheap flattery I am seriously awestruck.

[This message has been edited by Aenimal (02-22-2003 11:00 PM).]

ellie LeJeune
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14 posted 02-22-2003 11:11 PM       View Profile for ellie LeJeune   Email ellie LeJeune   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ellie LeJeune

Hello Kamla..it has been so long since we spent that lovely afternoon at liz's. I was very touched by this wonderful poem...how deep you are and so gifted in putting your feelings to lovely poetry! Hugs, Ellie

A friend hears the song in my heart, and sings it to me when my memory fails.

Justbleu
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15 posted 02-23-2003 01:31 AM       View Profile for Justbleu   Email Justbleu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Justbleu's Home Page   View IP for Justbleu

Hi Kamla....GREAT PIECE OF POETRY HERE!!!!  It's been a long time since I read your writing....this needs to be in the book!!!!

Bridgette

"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again.  To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown

Sudhir Iyer
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Kamla,
I was beginning to wonder when you were going to show up and submit one of your great works for 'Reflections'... Now you have made a choice and what an excellent one to submit... WOW

I really have enjoyed reading you and would definitely love to read this one in print...

Regards, my friend,
Sudhir
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17 posted 02-23-2003 05:39 AM       View Profile for kaile   Email kaile   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kaile

Hi K,

I well remember this, since i was a pretty decent rope jumper in my childhood..don't think i was snooty though
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18 posted 02-23-2003 05:41 AM       View Profile for Charisma   Email Charisma   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Charisma's Home Page   View IP for Charisma

Awesome penned.......enjoyed it very much

Charisma
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  Voting (of course)
Earth Angel
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Many of your treasured memories are similar to ones that I have tucked away in my heart and soul.
I enjoyed this travelog of your life's journey as well as your expressed thoughts, hopes, and dreams.

Warm morning hugs,
Earth Angel
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21 posted 02-23-2003 10:01 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

hey k...

smiling--

the fantasy of weakness...

oh--me too...

been waiting for you!

Jamie
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Your arm will get better dear, ( from my twisiting on it to post this ) but I don't think we will see better poetry than this. Should I be fortunate enough to see mine in the book, I hope it isn't paged alongside this one.

J

There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar.
byron

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Kamla, this is awesome! Excellent expression! Life does have those tangles, doesn't it? You will get them all unraveled bit by bit, I've no doubt.
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24 posted 02-23-2003 07:47 PM       View Profile for Enchantress   Email Enchantress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enchantress

Kamla..I admire your writing ability..
You have such a unique style...
This is beautiful, yet amazing.
~Hugs~

~ Trace my body with your words..
And in doing so, you touch my heart. ~

 
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