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kaile
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0 posted 2003-02-21 12:33 PM


Accidentally, we saw each other
We smiled, gave obligatory waves
and returned to our respective tasks
I tried to count my toe hairs
You resumed your conversation with your friend

We walked home together before
Do you recall the time
I lied to your dad about your english grade?
You looked at me with
an expression I couldn't quite figure out--
was it gratitude or amazement?

There should be some official etiquette
that calls for us to speak to
our long-lost friend for at least
fifteen minutes
when we chance upon each other
We will swap gossip about former friends,
update on our recent happenings,
maybe even relive those good old days and laugh

I'm sorry I stood aside
as the flame in our friendship
gradually extinguished

We are like
grown-up puppies
given up to different homes,
soon after birth

Did we ever function
as a pair of chopsticks?

I never failed to call you
before school reopened
so that I could "transfer" answers
to my undone homework
I need those now


[This message has been edited by kaile (02-21-2003 12:36 AM).]

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1 posted 2003-02-21 12:43 PM


Enjoyed but, it left me kinda sad

Bridgette

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2 posted 2003-02-21 01:21 AM




(big hugggssssssss) Oh Kaile, this is so very sad, sweet friend, my heart goes out to you and I send angel hugs to console your missing and yearning heart! (sad sigh) Here's hoping things will improve soon, sweet friend, God Bless You, you have my vote, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Kaile, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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3 posted 2003-02-21 03:50 AM


There is angst in this one... very well written...

Thanks for sharing.

Regards,
Sudhir

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4 posted 2003-02-21 04:21 AM




Charisma

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5 posted 2003-02-21 06:52 AM


hey, thanks for reading this one, despite its length...really appreciate it...

well, i am at the stage of life in which i am taking stock of my friendships...i guess i understand sometimes friendships die away, with the plug pulled and it's an inevitable part of growing up...but why is "forever" so darned elusive? and it hurts at times and i am left wondering if i am the only person who cares too much

thanks for visiting me

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6 posted 2003-02-21 08:32 AM


Kaile... liked the ending verse..the idea of depending on another for answers...and needing that now just as you did then....


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7 posted 2003-02-21 09:16 AM


kaile...I really like the way you ended this piece

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8 posted 2003-02-21 09:20 AM


Very nicely done Kaile!
Good one for the book!
~Hugs~

~ Trace my body with your words..
And in doing so, you touch my heart. ~

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9 posted 2003-02-21 09:27 AM


There should be some official etiquette
that calls for us to speak to
our long-lost friend for at least
fifteen minutes
when we chance upon each other
We will swap gossip about former friends,
update on our recent happenings,
maybe even relive those good old days and laugh

I'm sorry I stood aside
as the flame in our friendship
gradually extinguished

======================================

The heartfelt sincerity of this piece is its
true gift. A lovely introspective piece poet kaile...well done..those last lines had such bittersweet poetic impact.

"Trees are poems that the earth writes upon the sky ...
We fell them down to turn them into paper that we may record our emptiness."

K.Gibran


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10 posted 2003-02-21 10:16 AM


'We are like
grown-up puppies
given up to different homes,
soon after birth'

This related sincerity and in such a warm blanket sorta way.  Love the toe hair line...

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11 posted 2003-02-21 12:57 PM


Did we ever function
as a pair of chopsticks?


This, alone, makes it worth inclusion in the book.

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12 posted 2003-02-22 06:00 PM


"...I tried to count my toe hairs
You resumed your conversation with your friend..."

"...Did we ever function
as a pair of chopsticks?..."

Very cool lines here!
Enjoyed. *s

When you think you have heard it all,
listen more closely.
~Dorene

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13 posted 2003-02-22 06:46 PM


voting...another K

K

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14 posted 2003-02-23 11:10 AM


"Did we ever function
as a pair of chopsticks?"

and

"should be some official etiquette
that calls for us to speak to
our long-lost friend for at least
fifteen minutes
when we chance upon each other"

Time to dust off that old pair of chopsticks? time to pick up the phone?
Friendships you thought would last forever sometimes seem to go the way of the dinosaur. But perhaps those dinosaurs are still around, just resting in another form?

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15 posted 2003-02-23 11:24 AM


Janet, i only learnt the word introspection last year and in the short time i have known it, it has become one of my favourite words in the English language..thanks for thinking this is so...  

Mike, LOL...you singled out those lines when i first posted it...gave me a chuckle when i read your comment this time round

Kacy, you reckon? i suppose so though i must say that i am too proud and apprehensive to initate contact...go figure besides, so many years have passed...i'm trying to hold on to my remaining friends as best as I can though....hugs for your reply...

lastly, thanks to everyone for reading and replying...

[This message has been edited by kaile (02-23-2003 12:31 PM).]

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16 posted 2003-02-23 11:43 AM


It is sad when a friend leaves our life. There are "friends of the road" who come into our lives for reasons that sometimes may not be apparent, but they enriched our lives in one way or another--even if it was only to present lessons for us to learn from the relationship.

~ May your true, life friends, number as the stars in the firmament...

Warm morning hugs,
Earth Angel

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17 posted 2003-02-23 11:49 AM


Kaile, there is a saying, "Pride goeth before the fall."
Pick up the phone or write that "What's happening?" note.
Now if only I would follow my own seemingly good advice!

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18 posted 2003-02-23 12:11 PM


Kaile, I really like the message that you brought forth in this poem. It's got my vote, friend...

Heart Hugs,
Ethel....garysgirl

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19 posted 2003-02-23 12:21 PM


Very moving piece of poetry, and one with universal appeal. Book material, this.

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20 posted 2003-02-23 05:06 PM


Wow! This made me think of alot of good friends time has left me out of touch with.
Thanks for some good memories.I'll be making a few phone calls.A good write for the book.
Jason

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21 posted 2003-02-24 12:41 PM


kaile,
I don't care...you're still too wise for you age! But you know you have my vote.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

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22 posted 2003-02-24 01:10 AM



Very well expressed.
Nice job on this, Kaile.

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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23 posted 2003-02-24 01:16 AM


I agree with Kacy, a simple, "Hey how are you" would sure be the start.  Great write.
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24 posted 2003-02-24 10:43 PM


Great poem my old haikuing friend. Well deserving of inclusion.

J

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25 posted 2003-03-04 06:06 PM


Well said Kaile... I especially like the lines:

"We are like
grown-up puppies
given up to different homes,
soon after birth

Did we ever function
as a pair of chopsticks?"

That's just awesome imagery! Hmm, my best friend and I went through this a couple of years ago, drifting apart, and not really noticing for a while.. we tried to make it work, but in a way, we are still in this boat.. but this time we notice it, and try to fix it..

You have my vote here Kaile! Keep writing..

-Lynne

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Love - Lynne

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26 posted 2003-03-04 09:24 PM


It is hard to lose someone that you have had a relationship with.. I really like how this is written. You have my vote!

Oh, make me Thine forever
And should I fainting be
Lord, let me never ever
Outlive my love for Thee

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27 posted 2003-03-05 08:46 AM


There are so many different types of friends that we have along our way through life.
There are friends of the road, friends of the heart, friends that teach us valuable life lessons, soulmate friends, friends for life...but each of them has their special place in our life journey. I felt your confusion and sorrow...

Warm morning hugs,
EA

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28 posted 2003-03-05 09:28 AM


There are plenty of old friends I would love to send this to...if I only knew how to find them *sigh*

....and yes, losing a friend is just as hurtful as losing a lover...and sometimes even more painful

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29 posted 2003-03-07 09:04 AM


Oh, the loss of this type of friendship is so hard to take at times.
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30 posted 2003-03-12 02:29 PM


I wish I write like you! Impressed. Touching.

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31 posted 2003-03-13 07:52 AM


This is a wonderful piece, kaile - not too long at all... with a very nice introspective ambience...
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32 posted 2003-04-27 08:39 AM


I wonder who was it you met, but I think 'long-lost' friends shouldn't just pass like that... Unless they are just mere acquaintances, that'd be a totally different thing.

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