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Duncan
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0 posted 2003-02-20 10:23 PM



Your photograph

still affords me
a moment of delusion

just long enough
to fleetingly embrace
the narcotic dream of us.

You are beautiful…

I am better on paper

this time
let’s leave me there.


© Copyright 2003 Duncan - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2003-02-20 10:30 PM


Well, you're certainly good on paper here! I like your character portrayal here, Duncan,...and the humility
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2 posted 2003-02-20 10:44 PM


Duncan
Well you threw a loop over me.

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3 posted 2003-02-20 10:57 PM




(sigh) Oh Duncan, this is very touching, sweet friend, may that pretty face from behind the photograph forever caress the depth of your heart and fill you with comfort and assurance! (big hugggssssss) This is wonderful, sweet friend, I love it, God Bless You, you certainly have my vote, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Duncan, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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4 posted 2003-02-20 10:58 PM


OMG!!!  YES!!  I love this!
~Hugs~

~ Trace my body with your words..
And in doing so, you touch my heart. ~

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5 posted 2003-02-20 11:11 PM


"Your photograph

still affords me
a moment of delusion"


ohh this does ache...

[This message has been edited by SEA (02-20-2003 11:12 PM).]

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6 posted 2003-02-20 11:12 PM


This has got to be in the book. I love this.

Cold hands means a warm heart

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7 posted 2003-02-20 11:31 PM


I am better on paper
=======================


I still recall the first time I read that line....it just went thru me.
yeah... youre something else on paper...
but then great poets are.

"Trees are poems that the earth writes upon the sky ...
We fell them down to turn them into paper that we may record our emptiness."

K.Gibran


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8 posted 2003-02-21 08:22 AM


wondered if you were ever going to get around to this... about time.

I've got to go look in the archives... I know there was one you wrote that made me totally envious..wishing I had written it.

This one made me think of it...


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9 posted 2003-02-21 08:25 AM


this is very well done... so easy to read... yet the meaning behind the words... wonderful

"better on paper" ... fantastic...

regards,
sudhir

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10 posted 2003-02-21 08:40 AM



Better...

on or off paper...

just better that you are finally here...

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11 posted 2003-02-21 08:47 AM


I get the feeling that you are better off the paper, than you think you are!---and that is saying something, because you are pretty darn good on it!

Warm hugs,
Linda

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12 posted 2003-02-21 09:29 AM


VERY NICE!!!!!!

Bridgette

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13 posted 2003-02-21 09:29 AM


Awesome!

I'm a reader - not a writer.

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14 posted 2003-02-21 09:31 AM



Duncan!  You made it!

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15 posted 2003-02-21 09:31 AM


Really wonderful, simplistic and real. I like it.

Jenn

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16 posted 2003-02-21 01:01 PM


This should be required reading.
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17 posted 2003-02-21 02:04 PM


Duncan, this is fantastic. So sad, though. I know the feeling.
Sandra

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18 posted 2003-02-21 02:04 PM


Duncan......Perhaps a poet is always envious of the person they are on paper..I wonder, and a great read! Voting!
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19 posted 2003-02-21 03:14 PM


How well I understand. *S* I think my words ARE me... but some read more there... and I fall short. Excellent!!!
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20 posted 2003-02-21 03:58 PM



I think you're better....period

Definitely getting my vote

Titia

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21 posted 2003-02-21 04:03 PM


Enjoyed!!



Charisma

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22 posted 2003-02-21 10:41 PM


It's about time my paper boy showed up! I needed my poetry fix for the night! LOL.
I'm sorry that you are delusional.
       

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23 posted 2003-02-22 01:43 AM


Duncan - yes you are good on paper, and with this write is my vote...

BC

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24 posted 2003-02-22 01:53 AM


Duncan, this said so much in so few words, and brother do I feel the same as this poem you sure have my vote for the truth and humility offered in this poem.
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25 posted 2003-02-22 02:02 AM


I LOVE this Dunc...

long time no hug, either--

so...?


Duncan
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26 posted 2003-02-22 04:54 PM


Thank you to everyone for reading and responding.  I do appreciate your time.
Ron...I'm still waiting.

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27 posted 2003-02-22 07:26 PM


awww...I am sure you are better in real then just on paper
I enjoyed this view of you
M

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28 posted 2003-02-22 07:41 PM


(Smiles) Notice that I don't include a picture!!! Some of us here I'm afraid are a lot less photogenic than we are poetigenic. I like this one. Short, simple and to the point.

-Bob

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29 posted 2003-02-22 09:02 PM


Duncan, this is sweeeeet! *s

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listen more closely.
~Dorene

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30 posted 2003-02-22 09:19 PM


sigh...

this, to me, is a must...

love your writing D

K

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31 posted 2003-02-22 09:20 PM


Duncan, I thought for sure that I voted for this yesterday...
reckon I was wrong,
so..*click*  There it goes
Hugs  
Ethel

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32 posted 2003-02-22 09:35 PM


Duncan, if this doesn't go in, i will throw a tantrum!!!  it's going into my library.

lots of love, gemma xxxxxxxx

learning each day, for you and i, our paths have met, i've already learnt that you are love.

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33 posted 2003-02-22 09:38 PM


I just love the first few lines,
I can relate to them so well. *sigh*
Beautiful, Beautiful poem.
It has my vote as well.

WinterWren
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34 posted 2003-02-22 10:30 PM


You are better on paper, but I like you even better without

thanks for your comment!

Lyra

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35 posted 2003-02-22 10:43 PM


Oh this HAS TO BE be in the book.

Love it.

Maree

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36 posted 2003-02-23 01:24 AM


Duncan,
You surprised me. A submission that is not your typical write. Well done, I like it. Gets my vote for sure.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

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37 posted 2003-02-23 08:18 AM


Yep, so am I...but you have said it simply and with artistic flair! beautifully written! Ellie

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38 posted 2003-02-23 10:18 AM


I feel this one my friend..well written in such few words..

hugs, g

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39 posted 2003-02-23 06:53 PM


Excellent expression, Duncan. Definitely has to go in the book!
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40 posted 2003-02-23 07:13 PM


Not one syllable wasted. This is a fine write!!  Ken J

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The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

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41 posted 2003-02-23 10:06 PM


Duncan...I've only got one word for this poem


YES!!!!!

P.S. by the way, I liked it

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42 posted 2003-02-23 10:07 PM


...oops, I liked it so much I voted twice

[This message has been edited by hoot_owl_rn (02-23-2003 10:08 PM).]

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43 posted 2003-02-23 11:19 PM



Love this, Duncan.
So much said, in so few words.
Wonderfully done.
Hugs,
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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44 posted 2003-02-23 11:50 PM


A great little poem -- gets my vote for sure.

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45 posted 2003-02-24 01:36 PM


I like it, Duncan.. yep...
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46 posted 2003-03-10 05:29 PM


Back up to the top with you dear fellow...great write, can't vote twice, but I can get you back up to the top
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47 posted 2003-03-28 08:59 PM


WOWWWWWWW what a great poem...
I really enjoyed the read PoetFriend Duncan...
Smiles2u
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