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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA 
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See me here, I stand before you All my faults now in clear view Watch me now as walls are falling Mortar’s crumbling, bricks are too See the mask of ivory porcelain Thrown aside, cast to the ground Tears once dammed are freely flowing As my world falls all around Watch my past pour out in mirrors Kiss my eyes to ebb the flow Hold me now, here in the halflight As trembling to my knees I go Listen to the words I’m saying From tongue once mute, now truth is spilled Sense my fear as I am striping Each item shed shows more revealed Piece by piece it’s molt before you There’s nothing sacred, there’s nothing lost No more lies, no more disguises A new lease, Love’s paid the cost Whisper to me, my deaf ears hearing With your words, they’re opened wide I’m stumbling now, but I’m not fearing Because you’re standing by my side Look at all these imperfections Feel the scars I once had loathed As here I stand, now bared before you See me naked, though fully clothed [This message has been edited by Sunshine (03-27-2003 01:59 PM).] |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
The flow, the rhyme, the message...are a thing of beauty--as are you as you lay yourself bare in this wonderful piece of writing. You and your poetry are both beautiful! Warm hugs, Linda |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Wonderful write as always....I've done this I believe for my love to see. It's quite emotional, freeing, and exhausting. LOVE YOUR POETRY HOOTOWL!!!! Bridgette  |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I remember this, Ruth... and I remember how powerful it hit me then, as it did, again... you only pick the best, y'know? |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
This is an awesome poem. You get my vote. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
You are such an incredible poet, Ruth. This poem is just one of many that shows how excellent you are. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
This brings out a lot of feelngs. It is so hard to show your whole self to someone. Beautifully done. Sandra |
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Moonlight Romeo
since 2001-09-10
Posts 982The heart of you |
As one should be seen. Excellent meter and form. Thank you. What light through yon window breaks? It is the east, and Juliet is the sun. |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Lady Hoot, always beautiful no matter the form. My vote is in. Peace. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Powerful in the way it invites squirming in the reader, and then knocks him upside the head with the ending. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Thank you...it is not always easy to see ourselves naked, to totally expose ourselves and I am never so naked, so exposed, as when I write, for in my writing I tend to bare it all for the world to see and at times it leaves me feeling shaken, vulnerable. I know others feel this way too as I spoken to other poets, writers, about this sense of nakedness. I truly feel that one can not love completely without baring all, that is the precept behind this poem. So everyone, let's get naked!!  [This message has been edited by hoot_owl_rn (02-20-2003 04:51 PM).] |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssssss) God Bless You, sweet friend, I think no one is perfect and we all have flaws and scars yet you one very compassionate and loving friend and I wish for love to always heal your heart and fill you with strength to cleanse your soul! (kiss on cheek) This is wonderfully introspective, sweet friend, I love it, you have my vote, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ruth, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Ruth excellent choice as so many will fall into this one. Your rhyme lady is too devine by the way. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
YES!!! Fantastic! A must for the book Ruth! ~Hugs~ ~ Trace my body with your words.. |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
As a reader as well as a poet, I appreciate what you have said here in your poem and in your comment. I admit most of the time I do not read the poems of others as if they are written to me, but this poem really opens my eyes to how truly naked we all become before our reading audience. I had to go back and read your poem as if it were written to me and yes it did bring a tear to my eye.... So very honest and revealing you are my friend. --Thank you dear dear Poet. -Bob |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
you paint a portrait of a woman adorned in sincerity and truth of heart. A most powerful introspective write Poetess Ruth and a most appropriate poem to reflect your work in the book "Trees are poems that the earth writes upon the sky ... |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I see no imperfections from where I'm sitting...especially in your writing...excellent work, Ruth |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Bob, Janet and Balladeer....a special thank you to each of you for your touching comments ...and thanks to all who've read and replied! |
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rodger_jr Junior Member
since 2000-05-16
Posts 37Glen Hope, PA |
It's hard for me to be objective about this one. My perspective is from the glazed over eyes of a love sick husband. I couldn't see any imperfections even if I wanted too. Truely in all seriousness Ruth you are a very talented poet, and most of the time you hit it right on. This one is right up there. Love, Rodger |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
This poem is so true, Ruth. My Love and I reveal >b>all to each other. That's the only way people can know each other completely. Thank you for this, Ruth....  Hugs, Ethel |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Awesome penned......but then you always pen beauties. Charisma |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
...this.... is amazing |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Ruth~ I absolutely LOVE this, and it's an excellent choice for book submission. Hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
hoot_owl_rn - you do write them well, this one for sure gets a vote... BC |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
This love cathartic helps us all to cleanse a bit and reveal just who we are. Thank you for a great write. Ken J Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Of all of your exceptional work, this is a wonderful choice for submission.. Your personal exposure has a way of clothing your readers in warm blankets, ya know??.. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
This is an excellent choice for the book, Ruth ... I love this one. Best wishes, /Kit |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Definitely should be in the book. This is incredible. 'Naked fully clothed'..perfect! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Oh this is a must for the book....beautifully penned Lady Ruth |
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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle |
Ruth, your beauty shines in this poem! *s When you think you have heard it all, |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Thank You all |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
One of my all-time favorites, Ruth! This one is a must for the book! I'm glad you made it safely home. I had a great weekend with you, Nan and Elizabeth. We must do it again! |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Reads really well. Sure to be a favorite for the book. JThere is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Ruth, What a delightfully candid write. But isn't it "stripping" not "striping". Either way I'm voting. If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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Jason Lyle Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438With my darkling |
Forgive me, but you look good naked. Jason |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is one of my favorites. *S* And Rodger's response says it all... with no masks, no disguises, no hiding... you're magnificent. *S* |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
See me naked, though fully clothed That's me *s and I couldn't resist this one with "naked" in it, Ruth. hugsss M by the way I love this picture of you. |
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KristieSue
since 2003-01-31
Posts 1460PA, US |
beeauuuuuutiful |
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Fred Hobbs Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 329Tallahassee, Florida, US |
The screen says "You may reply to this poem WITHOUT voting for it." but I don't know how that's possible. My reply comes with my vote. Great job. fh |
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BlueEyes Member
since 2002-08-30
Posts 152TX, USA |
this brought tears to my eyes - for reasons I can't explain. Thank you so much for sharing it... BlueEyes |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Thank you all for seeing me naked, seeing my pains, my scars, and my imperfections and loving me anyway ~ Ruth |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
A very vulnerable write. Nicely done. |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
Wonderful poetry. Joyce |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed it so much |
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SPIRIT Senior Member
since 2002-12-29
Posts 1745California Desert |
I am in awe - it is a beautiful write. |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Ruth, I am glad I didn't miss this. Touches me deeply. And, a pleasure to read because it is so well written. It is very special! Hugs, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
Could have sworn I'd replied to this... I was just checking in to see why this hadn't made it into the book yet. I adore your technique, the simple formatting of this poem lets it flow nicely enough and still not seem too strictly structured. I have trouble doing that... kudos to you. I vote. Parasite |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ruth...of course, this one should be in the book!!!  |
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jjote Senior Member
since 2002-12-25
Posts 1088Ontario, Canada |
It takes a lot of character, confidence and courage to "bare" it all - but you've done it in a way that one really doesn't feel "naked" - like a beautiful piece of art, there for all to admire. I'm voting too. |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Bump.... |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Sure do wish I could vote twice for this... |
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zenny Member
since 2002-11-24
Posts 371Belgium |
i loved this |
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christian Member
since 2002-12-18
Posts 331 |
this is fabulous. 'walls falling.. 'mortals crumbling, bricks are too' how honest is that, jeez. we're not worthy .. we're not worthy .. we're not worthy :smirk: click click. --chris. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Thank you everyone for your support of this piece, you have all seen me at my most naked and still respect me, what more could a person ask for? Thanks!! Chris...you're so funny, thanks for the smile |
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rodger_jr Junior Member
since 2000-05-16
Posts 37Glen Hope, PA |
just a bump up for a well deserved poem |
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