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In his shell

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skyshine
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Beneath the northern stars


0 posted 02-19-2003 09:22 PM       View Profile for skyshine   Email skyshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit skyshine's Home Page   View IP for skyshine

Emptiness comes rushing in
As happiness fades out
No one now is here with him
No one hears him shout.
He says his life is perfect
And that everything is great
Everybody loves him
But for himself he feels hate.
He stares into the mirror
And glares at his reflection
He’s screwed up so many times
No chance now for perfection.
Nothing seems to work for him
Everything goes wrong
When things are looking up
They never last for very long.
People reach out their hand to him
He draws back into his shell
Won’t let anyone get close
Life for him is hell.
So now he sits here by himself
Pushes everyone away
Waiting for something, though he doesn’t know what,
And for another day.
© Copyright 2003 Elizabeth Costello Larson - All Rights Reserved
Justbleu
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1 posted 02-19-2003 09:34 PM       View Profile for Justbleu   Email Justbleu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Justbleu's Home Page   View IP for Justbleu

This is a very real piece....there are sooo many people that are locked inside like this.  And in varing degrees.  Very sad piece!!!  

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2 posted 02-19-2003 11:20 PM       View Profile for the_loner_23   Email the_loner_23   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for the_loner_23

Very heartfelt piece. I really liked it.

Cold hands means a warm heart

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3 posted 02-19-2003 11:24 PM       View Profile for Enchantress   Email Enchantress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enchantress

Excellent and a perfect choice for the book.
Gets my vote!
~Hugs~

~ Trace my body with your words..
And in doing so, you touch my heart. ~

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4 posted 02-20-2003 12:36 AM       View Profile for Mistletoe Angel   Email Mistletoe Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Mistletoe Angel's Home Page   View IP for Mistletoe Angel



(big hugggsssssssss) Oh Elizabeth, this is so sad but true, sweet friend, I see this ever so much and believe true happiness begins with yourself and I think so many doubt themselves at first and believe they can find joy in others! (sad sigh) This illustrates the real meaning of joy, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Elizabeth, you have my vote, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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5 posted 02-21-2003 04:32 AM       View Profile for Charisma   Email Charisma   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Charisma's Home Page   View IP for Charisma

Enjoyed the read

Charisma
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6 posted 02-21-2003 07:50 PM       View Profile for Mysteria   Email Mysteria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mysteria

Sure speaks to those lacking confidence well, and you got my vote!

          
~* Carpe' Diem *~  

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Lots of feeling here and true to some sad lives.  Joyce
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8 posted 02-21-2003 08:42 PM       View Profile for Mysteria   Email Mysteria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mysteria

Extremely poignant piece and definitely book worthy.

          
~* Carpe' Diem *~  

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9 posted 02-22-2003 10:11 AM       View Profile for fractal007   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for fractal007

A powerful and heartfelt poem.  Great job.

"If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh"
-- Magus
"there is no good and evil, there are just sides."
-- Local Parasite

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10 posted 02-22-2003 10:18 AM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

there is so much of this, that folks I'm sure, can relate to...yes, this is very very real....I like it
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well done!

~Every girl has a dream within.

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12 posted 02-22-2003 11:39 AM       View Profile for Earth Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Earth Angel's Home Page   View IP for Earth Angel

You had something to say, and we were all listening. Beautifully written.

Warm morning hugs,
Earth Angel

P.S. Love your user name!
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13 posted 02-22-2003 10:25 PM       View Profile for Chanson   Email Chanson   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Chanson

The emptiness and happiness
reads like the ebb and flow
of the tides.
Nice. *s

When you think you have heard it all,
listen more closely.
~Dorene

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14 posted 02-22-2003 10:50 PM       View Profile for skyshine   Email skyshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit skyshine's Home Page   View IP for skyshine

Thank you to all who voted and commented! I appreciate it lots.

--Liz

It's not having what you want, it's wanting what you've got...
--Sheryl Crow

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15 posted 02-23-2003 10:01 PM       View Profile for LoveBug   Email LoveBug   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LoveBug

What a sad situation you wrote about... but a good story that needs to be told!

Oh, make me Thine forever
And should I fainting be
Lord, let me never ever
Outlive my love for Thee

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16 posted 02-23-2003 11:36 PM       View Profile for garysgirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit garysgirl's Home Page   View IP for garysgirl

Even though this is sad, it written very beautifully. A good book submission...

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17 posted 02-26-2003 11:57 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

It's very hard to want something..but not know what exactly you want. Life..sigh...I like this.
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18 posted 03-01-2003 06:45 PM       View Profile for nakdthoughts   Email nakdthoughts   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for nakdthoughts

that poem could be about me...very nice work
and a good choice.
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I know this man and you portray him very well....
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20 posted 03-10-2003 11:40 AM       View Profile for skyshine   Email skyshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit skyshine's Home Page   View IP for skyshine

Thank you! Everyone knows a person like this. In fact, I think that everyone IS a person like this at one time or another. Thanks again for your words, everyone, I appreciate them all!

Elizabeth


It's not having what you want, it's wanting what you've got...
--Sheryl Crow

[This message has been edited by skyshine (03-10-2003 11:15 PM).]

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Elizabeth,
I remember that feeling. Excellent write. Here's my vote. Hope it makes the book.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

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skyshine
You got a winner here and my vote.
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A beautiful poem.

Kielo

I know only one thing, and that thing is that I know nothing.

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Reflections should contain all ways
of how we look at ourselves, even
if it is from the inside of our
self-made shells...

Well done, skyshine...thank you!
 
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