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Cpat Hair
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0 posted 2003-02-19 07:14 PM



Some notes
Are too low to hear
And can only resonate
Somewhere deeper than
The center of us

I have felt such songs
As those sung in tree trunks
When gales lash the tops
Stripping away the dead and weak

They hunger grumble in stomach
Shaking bowels and heart
With tension wired release

I thought of you today
And remembered
Some notes are not music
But touch us deeply
anyway

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1 posted 2003-02-19 07:20 PM




(big hugggssssssss) This is so very true, sweet friend, I can feel it in the trees who I think cry every day as mankind bends the to their will, in those starving in so many countries, in the untamed creatures of the earth whose lives are interrupted! (sad sigh) Some can be so saddening but there is one kind of note that is yet to be heard fully, love, and if we can finally come together we can finally hear the song in its long duration that never ends! (sigh) This is excellent, sweet friend, you have my vote, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ron, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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2 posted 2003-02-19 07:24 PM


So very true, friend Ron.  As always you build to a great conclusion.  
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3 posted 2003-02-19 07:28 PM


Noah... what in the world would we do without your kind words here... let's not find out..ok?  thank you sir

Marti... you dear friend are a poet... me..just a hack.. so hearing praise from you is always a treat.. thank you.


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4 posted 2003-02-19 07:42 PM


'I thought of you today
And remembered
Some notes are not music
But touch us deeply
anyway'

Ron...of course.

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5 posted 2003-02-19 07:44 PM


I choose the same lines as Duncan...
This is a must for the Passions book.
~Hugs~

~ Trace my body with your words..
And in doing so, you touch my heart. ~

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6 posted 2003-02-19 07:45 PM


Say Dunc.... so that makes me stating the obvious huh?
thanks for the visist bud...

now..go check out Rober Fraziers offering in open about French Roast... I think you'll enjoy it..

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7 posted 2003-02-19 07:45 PM


This is deep....VERY COOL!!!
Write on dear poet!!!

Bridgette

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8 posted 2003-02-19 07:45 PM


mmmmmmuah. Just a thank you for writing this one. (and a vote... )
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9 posted 2003-02-19 07:46 PM


Nacy..thank you dear friend.. you are truly kind..

Bridgett... thank you ma'am...

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10 posted 2003-02-19 07:46 PM


Ser... hugs to you sis...
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11 posted 2003-02-19 07:56 PM


Nice job! "votes twice"
Jason

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12 posted 2003-02-19 08:20 PM


I've experienced that vibrating tine in the pit of the stomach, Ron...unlike Toerag, it doesn't present itself as a belch

Your subject matter is always first-rate..voting here

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13 posted 2003-02-19 08:26 PM


Capt. Ron, I've been looking for a book submission from you. I haven't been to Open 25 since I got back on the computer (kinda got to feeling sick earlier and had to get off), so you may have put one on there.
Anyway, I knew whatever you chose would be an excellent poem, since all of yours are, so.....  
.
Hugs,
Ethel

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14 posted 2003-02-19 08:39 PM


Count me in there with Enchantress; the last stanza is tremendous.  The reader doesn't know if the writer won or lost.  KJ

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

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15 posted 2003-02-19 08:47 PM



Sometimes, one note
is all it takes...

an excellent example
of less, being more...

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16 posted 2003-02-19 09:23 PM



I remember this from before. Liked it then and still do. I also remember my reply but I just keep to simple this time.  Enjoyed, and of course it gets a vote from me.    Pat

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17 posted 2003-02-19 09:48 PM


"I thought of you today
And remembered
Some notes are not music
But touch us deeply
anyway"


this part takes my breath away....

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18 posted 2003-02-19 10:53 PM


I have felt such songs
As those sung in tree trunks
When gales lash the tops
Stripping away the dead and weak

Well this is pretty darn excellent

          
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19 posted 2003-02-19 11:05 PM


Pretty good....for a hack.

Sheesh, and I'm the one that's too self-deprecating?

Love ya man! (And I'll have a Makers' Mark)

Ed

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20 posted 2003-02-20 08:00 AM


Didn't even have to read it before knowing it would get my vote. As usual a 'splendiferous' piece - your pen can do no wrong.

I be me BUT who does me be?

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21 posted 2003-02-20 08:31 AM


Felt but not seen.
It's so true of alot
of things.

I enjoyed, Cpat.

When you think you have heard it all,
listen more closely.
~Dorene

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22 posted 2003-02-20 08:35 AM


Good morning, Captain! This poem struck a strident chord in me and is a very special little write! I do enjoy your poetry!

~ May the strength, beauty, and music of trees forever enrich your life!

Warm hugs,
EA

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23 posted 2003-02-20 09:36 AM


Applauding and voting at the same time here! I absolutely love this one, especially the final lines that will stick with me for the remander of the day
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24 posted 2003-02-20 10:08 AM


Some notes
Are too low to hear
And can only resonate
Somewhere deeper than
The center of us

===========================

which is exactly what your poetry does to me.
thank you for that.

" ... And think not, that you can direct the course of love ...
if it finds you worthy ...  it then directs your course."

K.Gibran


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25 posted 2003-02-20 12:39 PM


You've played some fine notes here.  Voting.
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26 posted 2003-02-20 12:52 PM


Some notes are not music
But touch us deeply
anyway

....

so true... and an excellent choice...

Regards,
Sudhir

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27 posted 2003-02-20 01:54 PM


And these notes are writ large
in your flintrock poems.

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28 posted 2003-02-21 11:24 AM


Ron,

firstly, a big thank you for your thoughtful and thought-provoking comments on my threads..i feel embarrassed that i haven't acquired a certain maturity level of understanding of life yet to reciprocrate likewise...

the last stanza hit me hard of course...then i read it again and got hit by your first stanza...an not-so-desirable truth you penned in a hauntingly poignant way

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29 posted 2003-02-21 02:51 PM


To pick out my favorite part would be to repeat the entire poem... and I'd rather cast my vote. *S*
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30 posted 2003-02-24 12:49 PM


I have deja-vu, reading this. I'm seeing things written that I have felt, but never put into words. An excellent write.

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31 posted 2003-02-24 01:10 AM


Can't wait to vote for this one.  Joyce
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Beautiful, Ron...simply beautiful.

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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33 posted 2003-02-24 01:34 AM


Cpat Hair - great thoughts in this from a suberb writer, my vote is in...

BC

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34 posted 2003-02-24 07:24 AM


Absent Resonance will surely ap-peal to our readers.. this is great, Cap'n...
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35 posted 2003-02-24 07:29 AM


My vote is in too!

Maree

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36 posted 2003-02-24 11:01 AM


Amen, Brother Cpat. This poem says so much in so few lines.  Great write.
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38 posted 2003-02-26 05:39 PM


Great poem.
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39 posted 2003-02-26 06:14 PM


Great poem and a fine candidate for the book.

J

There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar.
byron

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40 posted 2003-02-26 06:24 PM


Outstanding Ron. It resonates, deeply. This is a fine example of the compact, right-on-the-mark aspect of your poetry I enjoy most.
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41 posted 2003-03-02 08:10 PM


and a quick hug too...
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42 posted 2003-03-04 12:45 PM


deepness :: smile ::
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43 posted 2003-03-04 12:02 PM


This is simply a wonderful write!! And on that "note"...you get a vote
Tammy

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44 posted 2003-03-06 03:20 PM


"I thought of you today
And remembered
Some notes are not music
But touch us deeply
anyway"

I don't know how I missed this, but the lines above made me close my eyes in remembered agreement.  Deeply touching.

Susan

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45 posted 2003-03-06 03:54 PM


Somehow did not see this one sooner.  Fine work, definitely worth a vote.
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46 posted 2003-03-06 03:57 PM


As always a treat to read your thougths....

((hugs))
Charisma

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47 posted 2003-03-07 07:58 AM


It's a real pleasure to read you work, thank you for sharing this with us
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48 posted 2003-03-07 09:18 PM


You, sir, have the syndrome in full force. (I loved it )

Kielo

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