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0 posted 2003-02-19 06:10 PM



These words will fail me
As I try in this longing
To tell you how

I would taste the salt of you
So that my soul would be seasoned
As I felt you move beneath my touch
And I would know the offering of tender
The surrender of eyes

Slow wrapped tangle of us
Sliding through a time would
In knots hold us bound deeper than surface
To settle rhythms pounding
Then simply beating

Dip the pen of your tongue
Into the well of my mouth
That I might find the words
That will not fail me

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1 posted 2003-02-19 06:18 PM


Ron, you know I LOVE your poetry....all of it...but this wow...major *sigh* definate vote!
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2 posted 2003-02-19 06:22 PM


Ahhh words didn't fail you here!!!! Wonderful!!!

Bridgette

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3 posted 2003-02-19 06:30 PM


Ron

"Dip the pen of your tongue
Into the well of my mouth
That I might find the words
That will not fail me"

I do think you found the words...this is a beautiful love poem!  Voting!


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4 posted 2003-02-19 06:33 PM




(smiles) Oh Ron, this is gorgeous, sweet friend, I agree that it is always much easier to write better love poetry when a sweetheart will actually let you look deep in the mind or the heart and observe, then you know so much more! (big hugggssssss) This is a well of poetic passion, sweet friend, I love it, this has my vote, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ron, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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5 posted 2003-02-19 06:36 PM


I am so intrigued! Are you as sensuous as your writing? Do you walk your titillating talking?!?...

Very warm hugs, tehe
EA

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6 posted 2003-02-19 06:49 PM


Sea... thank you. You are always kind...

Bridget.. thank you ma'am

Noah... you sir are always on the spot with a kind word and encouragement.. thank you

marti... dear friend.. thank u

EA.. nah.. I'm a big tease.. three left feet and warts... do well to walk let alone try and be sensual (chuckling)

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7 posted 2003-02-19 06:54 PM


Somehow...

your words never fail...

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8 posted 2003-02-19 06:56 PM


sunshine.. or always do..depends on where you sit doesn't it? thanks friend for the visit..


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9 posted 2003-02-19 07:01 PM


I would taste the salt of you
So that my soul would be seasoned
As I felt you move beneath my touch
And I would know the offering of tender
The surrender of eyes

Slow wrapped tangle of us
Sliding through a time would
In knots hold us bound deeper than surface
To settle rhythms pounding
Then simply beating

Dip the pen of your tongue
Into the well of my mouth
That I might find the words
That will not fail me
=======================================


oh my...oh my... oh my... oh my... Oh sigh...

*will ya look at that*...you just turned a moth in to a stuttering puddle


Oh and btw ... the words didnt fail
not the reader nor the poet.
So glad you joined the rest of us nervous moths *L*

*thank you* *doing moth happy dance*

" ... And think not, that you can direct the course of love ...
if it finds you worthy ...  it then directs your course."

K.Gibran


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10 posted 2003-02-19 07:14 PM



You know what I think? I think you're a poet. So I'm going to voet(I spelled it this way to rhyme with poet!). Sigh.

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11 posted 2003-02-19 07:16 PM


JM.. thank you Mothy one.. you are always too kind.. always..

Ms Devine.. now Voet... seems to be a word to me..and poetic license is indeed allowed to someone of your skill. thank you

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12 posted 2003-02-19 08:02 PM


I also "voet"
Jason

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13 posted 2003-02-19 08:39 PM


This has so much good in it, but I thnk this sentence was so original and descriptive
"So that my soul would be seasoned"
Sandra

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14 posted 2003-02-20 10:28 AM


I would taste the salt of you
So that my soul would be seasoned
As I felt you move beneath my touch
And I would know the offering of tender
The surrender of eyes

======================================

OH YEAH....gets better each time I read it.

(you oughtta try it)  LOL

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15 posted 2003-02-20 11:10 AM


Wow - this evokes some great images.
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16 posted 2003-02-20 11:33 AM


But the words *don't*
fail you, as always. *s

When you think you have heard it all,
listen more closely.
~Dorene

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17 posted 2003-02-20 11:42 AM




Mmmmmmm. This is the best of your love poems that I've read. So
special.

Enjoyed, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
        "Desiderata"

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18 posted 2003-02-20 11:47 AM


yes,i'll vote for this one good poem
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19 posted 2003-02-20 01:05 PM


beautiful
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20 posted 2003-02-20 01:10 PM


WOW you got my vote.
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21 posted 2003-02-20 01:52 PM


I need a drink of water --
and to vote for this!

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22 posted 2003-02-20 02:01 PM


You know this hopeless romantic loves this....
Hugs,
Ethel

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23 posted 2003-02-21 04:38 AM



WOW Ron you knew I would love this one...don´t you.....


Charisma

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24 posted 2003-02-21 08:23 AM


this is great ... really great...

and "voet" is cool as well...

regards,
sudhir

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25 posted 2003-02-21 08:59 AM


Love it!

[This message has been edited by SPIRIT (02-21-2003 09:23 AM).]

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26 posted 2003-02-21 09:06 AM


Great!
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27 posted 2003-02-21 09:10 AM


Wonderful! Really liked this one very much. Certainly gets my vote



I'm a reader - not a writer.

[This message has been edited by cupcake (02-21-2003 09:26 AM).]

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28 posted 2003-02-21 10:36 AM


'Slow wrapped tangle of us
Sliding through a time would
In knots hold us bound deeper than surface
To settle rhythms pounding
Then simply beating

Dip the pen of your tongue
Into the well of my mouth
That I might find the words
That will not fail me'

I read something like this from you and I remember why I 'try' to write... !



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29 posted 2003-02-21 11:42 AM


Ron,
i appreciate your self-deprecating sense of humour because you should know just how good you are!

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30 posted 2003-02-23 04:24 PM


You will not throw that pen and paper away!     Lovely lovely - voting here.
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31 posted 2003-02-23 05:04 PM


Very Beautiful.


Sunkissed.

"I have to hurry past the moon...to Jupiter..."

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32 posted 2003-02-25 08:33 AM


Um... YES!... ...
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33 posted 2003-02-25 11:32 AM


Gets my vote Excellent poem here
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34 posted 2003-02-25 02:06 PM


(Big Smiles) I think under such conditions that my pen would equally fail me for quite some length of time. This poem definitely gets my vote simply for erotic value and content. Good job.

-Bob

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35 posted 2003-02-25 11:38 PM



Oh yeah...absolutely, positively, YES!!
Wonderful, Ron.

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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36 posted 2003-02-28 12:35 PM


Dip the pen of your tongue
Into the well of my mouth
That I might find the words
That will not fail me


WOW! Absolutely love it! and am voting!

Maree

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37 posted 2003-03-08 04:38 PM


Sometimes I wonder what English I took at school, especially when I read your poetry

           
R.E.S.P.E.C.T.
Aretha Franklin  

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38 posted 2003-03-08 07:56 PM


Ron this is just pure liquid - awesome - you have my vote xxoo
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39 posted 2003-03-08 08:44 PM


Yup what they all said.  When I grow up I want to see things through your eyes so I can write one line with that much punch.

           
R.E.S.P.E.C.T.
Aretha Franklin  

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40 posted 2003-03-09 12:54 PM


Wow....this left me speechless....wonderful words....


Lauren~

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So I can pull you into me

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41 posted 2003-03-09 10:22 PM


...the pen of your tongue.... Darn nice! Makes me think about the taste of ink...and "ink"....

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42 posted 2003-03-10 12:55 PM


Brilliant (I know how you love the praise).

Susan

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43 posted 2003-03-10 06:03 PM


I can't believe I missed this one.  Must have been when my computer was oput of order.  I love it.  Uniquely descriptive of fresh ardor.  Joyce
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44 posted 2003-03-11 04:21 PM


Oh, wow. *S* I would have sworn the werk monster had dulled my senses. *G* But they came alive with this reading! *G*
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45 posted 2003-03-11 05:39 PM


Oh yes, yes, yes!

Hugs, Marti

Few are those who see with their own eyes and feel with their own hearts.

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46 posted 2003-03-11 05:48 PM


A master of the pen to find such words and feeling. Fantastic...gentle smile
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47 posted 2003-03-15 12:44 PM


Superb! I loved every single word.
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48 posted 2003-03-15 02:57 PM


It's about time you got published, my friend!

Add my vote to the tally.  This is pure Ron in its style, sensual impression, dense detail, and "deceiving simplicity" which lingers down a road of thought...

-MVS

"AS ABOVE SO BELOW"

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good to see that this will be in the book
hugssss you...

Lauren~

Here I am
Running after dreams ~
I made it through another lonely night
Thinking of you
I know I should be strong
I just can’t say ~goodbye~(LR)

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50 posted 2003-03-15 03:42 PM


Just came back to see if I'd read this..yup.
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51 posted 2003-03-19 04:48 PM


Thank you everyone...the kind words..and the votes are appreciated... it is in so many ways..a touching experience to write something and have people appreciate it. To have fellow poets appreciate what you write makes such an experience one that touches even deeper.

Many many kind thank yous...for the thoughts and the words...

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52 posted 2003-03-20 04:23 PM


This is a wonderful piece of writing Ron, and it has my vote...

K

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53 posted 2003-03-20 07:58 PM


this is the kind of thing... that leaves one ...breathless...h
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54 posted 2003-03-20 08:23 PM


I see no failure of words here my friend.  Palpable, sensuous, and heartfelt.  I enjoyed this very much.

[This message has been edited by waldopepper (03-20-2003 08:23 PM).]

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55 posted 2003-03-21 02:49 PM


Softly sensuous - you have my vote!

Cor

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56 posted 2003-03-22 08:22 AM


Yes, this is very fine. It touches me, especially during these trying moments.

Let me say that is a splendid addition to the book. I hope I can get you to autograph it.

SG

[This message has been edited by SimplyGold (03-22-2003 08:24 AM).]

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