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Conversation Not Meant For Me (edited and repost from prose)

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1slick_lady
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    Obligations take us places we normally wouldn’t go, and doing things we do not want to do. But there we are, doing the right thing, if we want to or not. I found myself sitting in the waiting area of a hospital surgery room with enough paper and pens to write two books and enough on my mind to fill an ocean.
    And so it began the wait from hell. Blood, lust and tears flew from my pen with amazing vigor and I looked at the sheets wondering who had written the words. Time has no concept in places like this, and neither do the people sitting at the front desk. As teary eyed companions sit on the edges of seats with needles of their own flexing taunt muscles in chairs handed down from prisons that had voted out electric chairs years before. Here I was, glued to my own chair as others played musical chairs to telephones checking in at homes- where others waited.
    An older couple shuffling into the room abruptly disrupted my near perfect writing silence. He was a tall man in what looked to be in his eighties. His hair was longer than I expected of his age, past the back of his collar, neatly combed and the most beautiful white I had ever seen. When I saw him I thought to myself…Moses?  Not out of disrespect but he was what my mind had said Moses looked like. The woman with him had the same illuminating glow to her hair. She was small in comparison to his size and I smiled thinking of my own size almost the same petite. Is this I, at seventy or eighty? He in his mannerly way took her to the desk to check in for her surgery. She signed and promised to pay what was most likely the last of the money they had in the world. I tried to distract myself with the best friends I ever had, words. But the couple must have been hard of hearing for they talked a little above the crowd and echoed in every corner of the room. It was not annoying; I just didn’t want to hear their business, for it was none of mine. They grew louder, the room grew quieter.
    At the desk, they were Elizabeth and Ralph Green. He was eighty-four and she was eighty-two and a half, Ralph laughed at the half and winked at his bride. He said they had been married for sixty-one years. Sixty-one years? I said sixty-one years in my mind for about sixty one times and it floored me.
    Ralph brought Elizabeth to the same row of seats I was in, two seats down and over facing me. Ralph left Elizabeth and went back to the desk to hand over personal information and insurance cards. He scurried back quickly as not to leave her alone too long. I looked up and smiled and saw Elizabeth was crying, so I quickly went back to my writing, looking as busy as I could not to impose. Ralph took her hand in his and held it so tenderly and sweet. Elizabeth sobbed a little louder and I had to cross my legs the other way just to move body language away from them. She said, “Honey, lets go home.” He leaned in closely to her, looked her straight in the eye, “Now Liz, we have been all through this. We made this decision together, just as most of our decisions. You know if you do not do this, you will be gone soon.” “Ralph, I’m afraid. You know Dr. Butler said the surgery is a big life risk too, at my age, I have changed my mind,” she sobbed.
    Ralph reached for the woman he loved, pulled her in the cleft of his arm and kissed her cheek. He ran his fingers through her hair like she was his prized child. He told her everything would be all right. This was the best hospital in the state and Dr. Butler was the best doctor in the nation. They talked of their past. She complained she must look a fright with her hair down and no rouge or powder on and no lipstick. He told her she was still the most beautiful woman he had ever seen. He must have told her sixty one thousand times how much he loved her and how wonderful his life was with her in it. He was sorry for all he had ever done to disappoint her or to hurt her. He told her she was all he ever needed. He spoke of all the joy they had shared and how rich he was for having her. I saw her face turn from fear to contentment. Glowingly, his love, shined straight through her. The tears flowed from me like a dam bursting in a New Orleans rainstorm as I sat listening to this lifetime love story. They didn’t notice, I was no part of their conversation.  
    As he kissed her frail lips, her name was called and he walked with her till they told him he could go no further. He told them, “Take care of her please.” “I will be here waiting for you, Liz, when you get done” kissing her tender lips. Ralph came back and sat in the same exact seat as before but this time he was about seven inches shorter, hunched over and crying. He had not shed one tear in front of her being her sheer strength, but now he was drenched in his own salt. Mumbling quietly. I couldn’t hear anything he was saying. Then suddenly I heard him. He said, “God.” “ Please God, do not take her. Do not take her from me! For if you do I will surely perish.”
    I felt this incredible heat pass through me and I had to get out of there as fast as I could. I rushed to gather my things, my emotions were taking over and all I could see was red. I had to get as far away from this as I could. Ralph and I stood at the same time; he headed out one door, I out the other. I was running from that room like a deer white tailed to greenery. I almost slipped on the linoleum in my heeled sandals running out of that room trying to get into the Florida sun to bring some breath back into my lungs. But when I reached the sun my tear stained face burnt me like cinders.
    I sat there on that bench alone forever it seemed. Crying paralyzed in my thoughts and in prayers. I cried for them. I cried for Elizabeth and Ralph and wondered silently. And I cried for me too, for I wanted to be loved like that.  
    


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winston
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1 posted 02-19-2003 08:39 AM       View Profile for winston   Email winston   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for winston

Intense characters converging from a divergent and disparate life. Well depicted.

There's a typo, you've got 'parish' instead of 'perish'.

Thanks.

It's amazing I won. I was running against peace, prosperity, & incumbency.
--G. "DUBYA" BUSH. June 14, 2001. Unaware of rolling TV camera.

1slick_lady
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ty got it
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Yes!  Another "Ron, add the Kleenex to the copies forwarded" post....

Such a wonderful addition to Reflections...
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4 posted 02-19-2003 04:07 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Wow. This is powerful... and it's pure excellence!
winston
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5 posted 02-20-2003 11:50 AM       View Profile for winston   Email winston   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for winston

You are welcome.

It's amazing I won. I was running against peace, prosperity, & incumbency.
--G. "DUBYA" BUSH. June 14, 2001. Unaware of rolling TV camera.

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enjoyed
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(big hugggssssssss) Oh Helen, this is so heartaching but beautiful, sweet friend, this is wonderful and I feel this could easily become quite a poem too though I love it in this prose form, yay, this is excellent, I send angel hugs and my vote your way, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Helen, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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This is so touching, I'm glad you submitted it.
jbouder
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9 posted 02-20-2003 05:42 PM       View Profile for jbouder   Email jbouder   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jbouder

So ... did she make it?!?  Come on ... did she????

Very nicely done.  You've got my vote, but I HATE endings like that.

Jim
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10 posted 02-20-2003 06:20 PM       View Profile for Enchantress   Email Enchantress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enchantress

YES!!!  Fantastic!
A must for the book Helen!
~Hugs~

~ Trace my body with your words..
And in doing so, you touch my heart. ~

Larry C
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Helen,
Who doesn't? This needs to be in the book. Not much prose floating around and this is such excellent writing. I love it.


If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

[This message has been edited by Larry C (02-20-2003 07:28 PM).]

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12 posted 02-21-2003 03:06 PM       View Profile for Mysteria   Email Mysteria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mysteria

You certainly have my vote of confidence on this piece, well done indeed!
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13 posted 02-22-2003 07:19 PM       View Profile for Chanson   Email Chanson   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Chanson

Sixty-one years..
there is hope for
all of us. s

When you think you have heard it all,
listen more closely.
~Dorene

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14 posted 02-25-2003 11:39 AM       View Profile for kaile   Email kaile   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kaile

I had to cross my legs the other way just to move body language away from them.

Helen, what a great line here! i dig the story and add my vote, hoping that this will be included...

"I want to be loved like that too"
a good expression of our most fundamental need
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A delightful post. Great submission

                                   Dawn
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Intense.  Joyce
Bill Charles
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17 posted 02-26-2003 04:49 PM       View Profile for Bill Charles   Email Bill Charles   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Bill Charles

helen - somewhat different from you that I've read, my vote for this...

BC
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A very good submition.

And hey! it's about 61,000 words longer than your usual work. hehe.

A vote for prose.

Ed
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oh my... wow.. this is good. this stings. This burns and joys and wonders and... wow.. I really don't know what else to say.
WOW!

Always, Alyssa

- And so it was that time stood still -
     (blink, breathe, stand, fight)

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20 posted 03-09-2003 11:34 PM       View Profile for garysgirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit garysgirl's Home Page   View IP for garysgirl

Helen, I'm so sorry that I've missed this before. This is so beautiful. It reminded me so much of how my parents are. i really hope that this gets into the book. It's beautiful...

"Love makes the world go around"
~with love and hugs from Ethel__GG~  
                  

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21 posted 03-23-2003 03:58 AM       View Profile for SPIRIT   Email SPIRIT   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SPIRIT

Beautiful writing - I happily cast my vote through the tears. Enormously visual and touching.
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..1slick_lady../\..yes, very good; enjoyed much; gets my vote..

../\..Spiros


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23 posted 03-24-2003 12:37 AM       View Profile for majnu   Email majnu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for majnu

i loved it when i first read it in prose and i would love to see it in the book.

-majnu
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24 posted 03-24-2003 07:03 AM       View Profile for Skyfire   Email Skyfire   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfire

WOW... you definitely have my vote!  I'm speechless

Sometimes you find a friend where once there wasn't one. Sometimes you find a love where once there was a friend.

 
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