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Sunshine
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0 posted 2003-02-19 06:43 AM



Quiet

Perhaps it was because she was too ill to hold me,
those first months, that before the first cry
of my awake, he would come, and lift me,
holding me quietly… then later,

in the middle of my youth, I knew when he knew that
it was time for us to do our morning dance,
he would quietly fix the coffee, and I his toast,
he would boil the eggs,
I would bring the dishes to table

the silent waltz of father/daughter.

Sleepy heads missed the unfolding golden mornings,
they missed the kiss of fog on roses,
and the brush of hummingbird wings
that would visit, he and I
in the quiet.

Perhaps it is because in his ill I held him last,
as the early morning rise of sun
brought to the morning fog a glint of the mystic
that would stay even though
he would not fix
coffee again.

I rise each morning to the quiet sounds
of remembering, smelling deep the liquid warm
of yesterday’s hot coffee and hearing yet
the golden quiet and hushing sweep

of hummingbird wings.

~*~



Dedicated in the memory of
Robert Howard Rilling

Karilea Rilling Jungel


[This message has been edited by Sunshine (03-24-2003 01:35 PM).]

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1 posted 2003-02-19 07:54 AM


Fathers and daughters have a special bond indeed... This poem speaks beautifully of yours with your dad, Sunshine...
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2 posted 2003-02-19 08:27 AM


My father died awhile ago and left my ma to fend for herself.

It's amazing I won. I was running against peace, prosperity, & incumbency.
--G. "DUBYA" BUSH. June 14, 2001. Unaware of rolling TV camera.

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3 posted 2003-02-19 08:35 AM


..."the quiet sounds of remembering"...Darnation you're good!

This whole poem is worthy of repeating! This is now one of my personal favorites of yours. You and your father were blessed with each other and when your time does come to join him, your Dad will be waiting for you with a hot cup of coffee and roses from his celestial garden.

~ Warm blessings to you both...
Linda

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4 posted 2003-02-19 08:50 AM


and hearing yet
the golden quiet
and hushing
sweep

of hummingbird wings.

=================================

whispering yes...............
the rest...you already know.

" ... And think not, that you can direct the course of love ...
if it finds you worthy ...  it then directs your course."

K.Gibran


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5 posted 2003-02-19 08:50 AM


Yes!! Excellent choice!!
Kleenex please?
~Hugs~

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6 posted 2003-02-19 09:02 AM


Good poem, Sunshine. You can have my vote!

“We are all travelers in the wilderness of this world, and the best that we can find in our travels is an honest friend.” –Robert Louis Stevenson

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7 posted 2003-02-19 09:07 AM




(big hugggssssssss) You will always make your father and your whole family so proud, sweet friend, they are all truly sunshine to your heart and I know right now will always be deeply touched by the dedications you give them and they will be the hummingbirds that will always flitter in the spring! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karilea, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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8 posted 2003-02-19 09:15 AM



Winston, my father passed in 1988; my mother in 1992.  In my mind, they were the reason analogies like "two peas in a pod" and "bread and butter; salt and pepper" are sometimes used to describe a couple.  One alone was no good without the other...

Thank you all for reading, for understanding, and Moth?  for the push...

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9 posted 2003-02-19 09:54 AM


This has my vote.  I have been reading quite a lot of father/daughter poetry this morning, and appreciating my dad more with every word.  Thank you for that.
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10 posted 2003-02-19 10:04 AM


I loved it.

the Wind is invisible.
        remeber me

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11 posted 2003-02-19 10:19 AM


Wonderful write - gets my vote.

I be me BUT who does me be?

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12 posted 2003-02-19 12:56 PM


enjoyed
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13 posted 2003-02-19 01:13 PM


Cool...I remember this.  Made me think of my grandmaother and smell toast.  I like the choice Kari.
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14 posted 2003-02-19 02:19 PM


I'm so glad you chose this for the book submission. It's one of your best.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



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15 posted 2003-02-19 02:24 PM



Ah yes...another very special write.

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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16 posted 2003-02-19 02:39 PM


An excellent choice for the book Karilea.
Very touching indeed. Voting.

Maree

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17 posted 2003-02-19 03:41 PM


Oh Karilea - this is so touching and beautiful. Not only does it belong in the book....it belongs in my library!! hugs, Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers-
that perches in the soul....
                  
                       -Emily Dickinson

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18 posted 2003-02-19 03:58 PM


how can one not vote for this touching gem......beautiful penned!

Charisma

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19 posted 2003-02-19 04:05 PM


Karilea, I remembered this one so well that I thought I had already voted for it. Well, I hadn't, so I am.....
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20 posted 2003-02-19 04:06 PM


K.,

Whenever I read you,
I am left thoughtful
and impressed.

Mike

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21 posted 2003-02-19 04:28 PM


Sunshine, you do indeed cast warm rays on all that you write.  

Beautiful.

Sunkissed.

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22 posted 2003-02-19 05:33 PM


I love this, Sunshiney One... you do him proud. *S*
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23 posted 2003-02-19 10:12 PM


you already know, this is one of my favorites...good thing I talked to my dad today, or I'd be on the phone buggin him again...
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24 posted 2003-02-20 12:12 PM


Oh my, what a touching piece!! Yes Yes!! Vote vote!!

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25 posted 2003-02-20 12:11 PM


God, that's so eerie! My pop died 7/13/89.

It's amazing I won. I was running against peace, prosperity, & incumbency.
--G. "DUBYA" BUSH. June 14, 2001. Unaware of rolling TV camera.

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26 posted 2003-02-20 02:13 PM


Touching. Even hints at off camera suffering. A warm tribute.
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27 posted 2003-02-20 02:51 PM


Sunshine,
A wondrful choice.

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28 posted 2003-02-20 05:12 PM


Karilea...I know I've said this before, but I must say it again with the posting of this poem, you have grown by leaps and bounds as a poet since becoming family at Passions. This poem shows your attention for detail and expresses the you we've come to know and love so wonderfully. What a tribute to your father and what a awesome inclusion in any book. I think that I've got a new favorite of yours Now pardon me while I go vote!!
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29 posted 2003-02-22 10:48 AM


Yep Daddies are special guys......LOVED THIS!!!!

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30 posted 2003-02-22 12:46 PM


This is a lovely tribute! on the cheek. Vote in!

~Every girl has a dream within.

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31 posted 2003-02-22 01:13 PM


This truly is marvelous, KJ, and I love the response in your answer to Winston that they were so close to each other.  Your caring for them just pours out.  Your scenes as a young child are enchanting.  You are so worth reading!! KJ

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32 posted 2003-02-24 08:04 PM


Oh my, This gave me goosebumps, bringing back memories, becoming part of yours
Superbly written
Heartwarming and wonderful
Liz

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33 posted 2003-02-24 08:05 PM


Oh my, This gave me goosebumps, bringing back memories, becoming part of yours
Superbly written
Heartwarming and wonderful
Liz

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34 posted 2003-02-24 08:39 PM


Your words are music, SUnshine, and the song they sing is the love for your father, brilliantly told. This is a very special poem. My congrats
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35 posted 2003-02-24 09:05 PM


One of my favorites of yours, Karilea. A loving tribute.
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36 posted 2003-02-26 12:42 PM


You know if you never had what you have expressed in this poem, it is warming to read, to the point of tears.  This is one of my favorites of yours because you shared the love you had for your Father with us, so we can feel what real family is all about, and we do feel it.  Fantastic poem Karilea.

          
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37 posted 2003-02-26 05:14 PM


Beautiful. Just beautiful.
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38 posted 2003-02-27 11:53 PM


"fog on roses"

Gotta tell you, that single image really caused me to remember some mornings many years ago when I saw, touched and smelled the scent of such roses.  Thank you for that, Karilea.  In the book it goes

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39 posted 2003-02-28 01:25 AM


Karilea~ Beautiful memories of your father and you. Thanks for sharing.

Morning time is my daughters favorite time also, and even though she is grown and married we somtime still share a morning together. I work nights and every now and then I stop by and have a morning cup of coffee with her...Paul

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40 posted 2003-02-28 10:28 AM


very touching sweet lady....heart hugs


Lauren~

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41 posted 2003-02-28 01:57 PM


And in the quiet moments, our memories play back the loudest.  This poem is tremendous in it's love, and feeling, Karilea, and it warms the heart of the reader.

Accept these small gifts from my gypsy heart  ~~S~~

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42 posted 2003-02-28 10:34 PM


sighs
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43 posted 2003-03-10 06:38 AM


I knew when he knew that

geez, you gotta love those moments huh? thanks for sharing these precious memories

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44 posted 2003-03-10 06:48 AM


"Perhaps it was because
she was too ill to hold me,
those first months,
that before the first cry
of my awake,
he would come, and lift me,
holding me quietly…"

Chills. My turn to say that when you wrote of you, you wrote of ME. (except I made the coffee, and he burned the toast. I remember being as young as eight years old shaking my head when he scraped it "new", as he used to say...)

smiles, hugs, and yes, a couple of tears with my vote.

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45 posted 2003-03-10 08:32 AM


My grandfather died on the day of his birth.  Jan.26, 2002.  

My one memory of him is waking with him in the morning before ANYONE else was up.  We would have Folgers coffee and a donut.  This started for me at the age of 5.  The one good memory I have of him...

thanks for the memory...

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46 posted 2003-03-10 11:43 AM


Quiet and bittersweet memories...I loved this.

Elizabeth

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47 posted 2003-03-10 02:51 PM


Karilea (what a beautiful name!),this is so warm and touching.Very well constructed.You have my vote for this.Thank you for sharing this dedication to your father.

Peace,Geoffrey

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48 posted 2003-03-19 11:48 PM


Sunshine - sorry I missed this one...

BC

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49 posted 2003-03-24 12:34 PM


Glad I didn't miss this one, Karliea... I'm so sorry I haven't read your work in so long, not only sorry to you but to myself... you have such a unique, engaging style that you've developed and absolutely mastered.  Free verse is finest when written like this... in such a way that I can forget everything I remember about form and technique, and just read, and feel my heart being touched in a way I doubt I could ever do for another.

I just love it... I'm definitely voting for this.  Great work, Kari.

(edit) Couldn't find the voting button, this one's already accepted...

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