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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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Indictment in averted eyes- forgiveness in the spark of look. A judge awaiting jury's word-- his silence always did speak more. A knife stuck in a block of wood-- a drawer filled with handkerchiefs. Tin-type photos placed with care. His secret life beneath it all. Red ballpoints that always bled and stained the pocket over heart. I smiled to note the white stretch tanks and boxer shorts in such neat fold. "Oh Dad, you are in fashion now..." I thought I heard him laugh. I sneaked a bottle of cologne-- tonight I'd wear a splash. We found a secret candy stash. He loved milky way... I glanced the walls and saw faces-- all of us--in disarray-- photos tacked any which way-- and all the things we'd given him-- proudly on the shelves displayed. Books in corners--they'd been read-- the spines were wrinkled with the bend; and there were pages stained with tears dog-eared with his diligence. The smell of him is almost gone. I held my head and wept. Rocking like a little girl sitting there at daddy's desk. I touched the row of hats he kept, on pegs above the books. I grabbed the Whitman just for me-- before I took one final look: Soon, this too, will all be gone. I felt the punch of pain within again-again I felt the void. And prayed that I could keep my friend. I looked around the room once more, and wondered of his wanderings... I took a picture in my mind and thought: "This is my father." |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
serenity, this is stunning, but just a quick query why have you used the masculine form of "my"? Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
because I am a coon ass? *chuckle* forgot to thank you! [This message has been edited by serenity blaze (02-19-2003 05:10 AM).] |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
fair enough then. Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Gorgeous.... you have me in tears hon. This is simply beautiful. you have my vote and I'm adding this to my library. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
But, of course, Reflections should hold memories... and more. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Books in corners--they'd been read-- the spines were wrinkled with the bend; and there were pages stained with tears dog-eared with his diligence. The smell of him is almost gone. I held my head and wept. Rocking like a little girl sitting there at daddy's desk. I touched the row of hats he kept, on pegs above the books. I grabbed the Whitman just for me-- before I took one final look: Soon, this too, will all be gone. I felt the punch of pain within again-again I felt the void. And prayed that I could keep my friend. I looked around the room once more, and wondered of his wanderings... I took a picture in my mind and thought: "This is my father." =================================== A MUST for the book me twin...perfect choice KA.   ps:LOL@Coon ass!! Now theres a southern phrase I hadnt heard in a while LOL " ... And think not, that you can direct the course of love ... |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssssss) Memories are so very precious, sweet friend, you speak with such heart here and will always make your father so proud and all your loved ones blessed! (sigh) You have my vote, dearest friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karen, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." Shakira [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (02-19-2003 09:11 AM).] |
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Moonlight Romeo
since 2001-09-10
Posts 982The heart of you |
A memory, self-contained within the heart, and the soul. Thank you. What light through yon window breaks? It is the east, and Juliet is the sun. |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
I want to see this in the book, missy. Sigh sigh - I wish I had something more profound to say. You write life better than anyone. Hugs Nic |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
Serenity...What would I do without your poetry? the Wind is invisible. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This held me so entranced I almost forgot which forum I was in... clicking now. *S* Excellent, heart-touching work! |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
An office full of junk or one full of memories? I still love this pome. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Ah Karen, you know you have my vote on this one and my love too. |
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majnu
since 2002-10-13
Posts 1088SF Bay Area |
this needs to be in, maybe my fav of your works. -majnu |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
One of my favorite pieces of your heart. Love and hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Oh this makes me miss my Dad. How sad and yet a glowing tribute. Sandra |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I'm a sucker for German titles  Remember this one, serene lass, and it's just as powerful...vote's in.  |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
not me..I'm not voting on this one.. ( I already have) hugs to you sis... |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
I'm all teary-eyed girlie girl....LOVED THIS VERY MUCH!!! Reminded me of how I felt returning home to my parents house after my Dad passed away and seeing things in there place...where he last touched them. Well, my votes in!!! Thank YOU!!!! Bridgette |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Serenity felt the punch of pain within again-again I felt the void. With your words, I feel it too.  |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Yes..you knew I would... |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
this is one of my favorites..yes you capture your feelings like no other yes |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
Really like the way you hang on when you should, while others don't know to let go when they should. Great tribute. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
That is a picture that will never turn old and yellow, the memory that you'll hold forever in your heart. This is full of imagery |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
full of imagery even for the trivial/sublime, click...nicely styled |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Karen, I loved this when I read it in Open, and I still love it. So  , you've got my vote, friend....  Hugs, Ethel |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Yep!!! This is such a great write... a most necessary part of the book, I'd say... Regards to you, Sudhir |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
You writes are always wonderful, this is no expection,... Charisma |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Fantastic Karen. Loved it. (even with the masculine my JThere is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
'The smell of him is almost gone. I held my head and wept. Rocking like a little girl sitting there at daddy's desk. I touched the row of hats he kept, on pegs above the books. I grabbed the Whitman just for me-- before I took one final look:' Reminded me of the first time I walked into my grandmothers house and realized that her smell was gone. It floored me... Got me with this K. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh geesh Karen....You have me in tears... and you have my vote! ~hugs~ ~ Trace my body with your words.. |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
Very well done. Joyce |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
about as good as it gets... M |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
smiling here... I think my Dad would be proud. and as to the masculine? I COULD blame it on hormones, but greatfully, should this find a home in Reflections, that can be fixed. (I understand editing is cheaper than a sex change operation too!) and thanks again, this makes me happy to know I can share my Dad with you all. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Always loved this one |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
serenity blaze - my dear, I have the one right here for my vote, of course all of them I would vote for... BC |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Great poem girl. |
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aries_luv_ppl Senior Member
since 2001-09-20
Posts 1448Universal Mind |
Nice ~Every girl has a dream within. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Well my dear..I don't remember seeing this...glad I found it here... hugs  K |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Your dad must be smiling at this tender memory write. Thank you for sharing such a personal moment. Yes, a wonderful submission from one of the best of Pips. |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
er, what does the title mean anyway? |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
so--what is the feminine my? J |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Jamie? I had the opportunity to ask tonight, and the cajun french would be: "C'est Ma Pa" smile? yes... thank you all. |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Karen, Without question it gets my vote. And you're ill equipped for the gender presented!  Such an awesome dad.If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Tres bon, serene one... |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
What a classy tribute this is, Serenity. I hope my daughters will think of me as fondly. This is beautiful, and poignant. |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Karen~ Such beautiful words and memories about your father. Glad you entered this one...Paul "To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you" |
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El_Campeador Senior Member
since 2003-01-29
Posts 761Ohio, USA |
Sweet... I hope your father will forever remain alive in your memory! “We are all travelers in the wilderness of this world, and the best that we can find in our travels is an honest friend.” –Robert Louis Stevenson |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
I didn't want to cry... I don't want to cry. But the house I cleaned out is gone now, along with the one who lived there, the tear stained books, and all the pictures I'd drawn for her... I don't know if I want this in my library or not.. I don't want to cry again. It'll wait there until I decide. I think I thank you, and here's my vote. Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Your writing often amazes me. |
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Muys Member
since 2002-04-06
Posts 389The Netherlands |
Ii is so wonderful if you have Memorys Muys |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I know I've been here before.... I know I've voted... I know Ron won't let me stuff the ballot box. *G* But some words just reach out to be read again and again. *S* |
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Tammy Blessing Member
since 2002-08-26
Posts 366PA |
Enjoyed, even though I cried. Tammy |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
it's amazing what will trigger the memories. . .isn't it? you know that I'm voting for this one. . . -------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Good Lord Woman! This is just silk . . . and yes he is proud xxoo |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Indeed he is.... Bump! |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
serenity blaze - yes... my vote cast... BC |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Merci, pour la vignette chere de votre pere... Love & Light, EA |
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