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I Talk to the Woods Denuded

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Martie
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I Talk to the Woods Denuded
(in memory of Michelle)


I talk to the woods denuded
not pine or cone just black stark trunks illusion
grants me foot within
the wandering of my spirit
to see small grasses mostly weed though sweet
and tufts of rocks that fall into the clearing
like a memorial of what used to be
to cover the char that once was tree

I picture the woman she would be
on curve of time this road I take
to bring her sharper to my senses
with long brown hair by sun made to flame
and eyes the color of a wooded glen
stem brown skin and toes mostly open
from barefooted time that she would spend

I remember her love for wild and free
the sound of coyote almost cock of head
to hear from back yard pass the curl of scent
that travels bent within the nape of years
from someplace beyond this single web
she was open this way in her life as now when dead

and that is why this trail is not of sorrow
but hallow in the path it takes to certain sure
to find the lifting up of missing her is born
from a life never forsaken always worn and mostly now
the month when she stopped and winter became real
I feel her keen within continuations cycle
for every sigh I lift she with love heals

[This message has been edited by Martie (02-18-2003 10:14 PM).]

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it just wouldnt be a passions book with out Michelle in it.

" ... And think not, that you can direct the course of love ...
if it finds you worthy ...  it then directs your course."

K.Gibran

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2 posted 02-18-2003 10:27 PM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

I echo JM.

Absolutely beautiful Martie. .an excellent choice.

You know you have my vote.

,aree.
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Martie~ Touching words from your heart.

Enjoyed this last stanza so much.

and that is why this trail is not of sorrow
but hallow in the path it takes to certain sure
to find the lifting up of missing her is born
from a life never forsaken always worn and mostly now
the month when she stopped and winter became real
I feel her keen within continuations cycle
for every sigh I lift she with love heals

To heal may take a lifetime, one day at a time as memories bring a smile too your heart...Paul

"To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you"

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"picture the woman she would be
on curve of time this road I take
to bring her sharper to my senses
with long brown hair by sun made to flame
and eyes the color of a wooded glen
stem brown skin and toes mostly open
from barefooted time that she would spend"

I don't know about your Michelle, but, it would seem the world is now missing a special spirit.

A fine rememberance!

Ed
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This is beautiful. It gets my vote.

Cold hands means a warm heart

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(big hugggssssssss) God Bless You, sweet friend, I know with all my heart your Michelle will always be guiding you with her love and her whisper will be the sweet soothing zephyr and the gentle butterfly kisses her hugs! (wipes tears) I send many angel hugs of healing your way, sweet friend, you have my vote, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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Yes....it's all I can say.
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Your heart is beautiful, Martie,
and it touches mine deeply.
Love and hugs to you,
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

[This message has been edited by vlraynes (02-18-2003 11:21 PM).]

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This has to go in the book....
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And forever she will live in your writing, for you have given her life in your words
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A definite asset to an anthology...always impressed by your vivid descriptiveness

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i think you should put 'come, february'
in the collection. i love that one. i love
this one too though, oh so many choices,
whatever! :smirk:
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And I agree - would not be "Reflections" without a reflection on Michelle now would it?  

          
~* Carpe' Diem *~  

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hugs MLP..hugs and votes..

K
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hugs to you Martie...

such a splendid write...

regards,
sudhir
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Your reflections are ours to share... a small step within your wonderfully poetic mind, m'friend...
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"char that was once tree" and the rhyming of "glen" with "open" stands out. Overall, the poem reads well. The last line seems a bit cumbersome.
Got my vote.
Thanks.

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My heart hugs ya dearPoetFriend...
An absolute treasure of a read...
*~coco~*
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Lovely Martie - happy to vote for this poem - Paul
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Another page in the book to you Lady Martie.  A most enjoyable read
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You've taken this reader
on a journey, reflective and
exhilarating at the same
time.

When you think you have heard it all,
listen more closely.
~Dorene

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Power, passion, loss and forest. What else is there?
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Martie,
I don't quite know what to say, except, this is so very beautiful...
Martie
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Thank you, friends, for the heart touching replies. Michelle was very special, I'm happy to share her with you in this way.  
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