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wranx
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0 posted 2003-02-17 11:42 PM



Wordsworth

It is not my intent
To give you a litany
Of all that I’ve said
Merely to underscore that
Which you already know

But, words are all that I have
The sole vehicle
That would bring me to you

Not clever, elegant or even
Terribly well-spoken
Yet, bearing the truth
Of my being
Just as D.N.A. bears
The truth of my body

And as such
I always assumed
That they would have
An inherent value
As verity should

I’ve tried to arrange
And construct them
In such a way as to give
Weight to thought
Form to feeling

To make tangible
What I find in my heart

And found that these tokens
When strung into psalms
Make a poor offering
To one rich in verbiage

Like the dropping of bricks
Into the dark of a well
Never sure of their impact
Or impression they leave

The worth of my words
Has always been measured
By their faint, hollow echo

[This message has been edited by wranx (02-17-2003 11:51 PM).]

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1 posted 2003-02-17 11:47 PM


I can't vote if you don't check the box!!!
I love this please check the box!

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I'm with SEA!!
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Oops!
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4 posted 2003-02-17 11:52 PM


much better!! vote in!
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5 posted 2003-02-17 11:56 PM


My vote is IN!

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6 posted 2003-02-18 12:20 PM


been waiting for ya yeti...
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7 posted 2003-02-18 12:21 PM


Good poem, Vote is pending my goal is to only vote for 30 poems. So I am ranking and waiting.

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8 posted 2003-02-18 12:39 PM


Got it!

This is very good Ed.

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9 posted 2003-02-18 01:52 AM


Ed, I've been waiting for you to submit, too.....   

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But, of course!

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11 posted 2003-02-18 09:35 AM


A well placed brick is very important, no?
Good work.
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12 posted 2003-02-18 09:45 AM


Ed, your "words" are "worth" their weight in gold!

Your intelligence comes shining through all of your poetic works!

Good morning hugs to you!

Linda

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13 posted 2003-02-18 09:54 AM


"Like the dropping of bricks
Into the dark of a well
Never sure of their impact
Or impression they leave

The worth of my words
Has always been measured
By their faint, hollow echo"

Beautifully descriptive Wranx ... your visual comparison in the lines above leaves a lasting visual. An excellent write.

Best wishes,
/Kit

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14 posted 2003-02-18 01:52 PM


Always love the echoes of words falling from your fount, Wranx.
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15 posted 2003-02-18 05:20 PM


And what they're worth is a whole lot... truth and sincerity, and the will to underline what lies within the reader, are key components to a good poet.

Parasite

"Faith" means the will to avoid knowing what is true.
~ Friedrich Wilhelm Nietzsche

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16 posted 2003-02-18 05:22 PM


~ Trace my body with your words..
And in doing so, you touch my heart. ~

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17 posted 2003-02-18 07:17 PM




(sigh) Hollow their tone may be, but a mighty crescendo they make across these pages with grace and fervor, I LOVE IT!!! (big hugggsssssss) You truly are a magician of words and so I cast my vote upon you, yay, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Wranx, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

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18 posted 2003-02-18 07:22 PM


i enjoyed it very much

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19 posted 2003-02-18 08:02 PM




Fantastic! Undoubtedly your words are music to our ears and pound mightily like a bell to its chapel.....your voicings do many justice and aspire many more, good day to you and a splendid reading!

Stanley Climbfall

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20 posted 2003-02-18 08:08 PM



Wonderfully done, Ed.
I enjoyed this.
~Vicky

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you have not truly met the poet.
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21 posted 2003-02-18 11:09 PM


Casting a vote into the well of Ed!
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22 posted 2003-02-18 11:34 PM


butter

and too much bread

thanks dude

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23 posted 2003-02-19 12:13 PM


"The worth of my words
Has always been measured
By their faint, hollow echo"

Oh, great lines. I think all our words can be measured by the way the impact others

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24 posted 2003-02-19 12:18 PM


To make tangible
What I find in my heart

And found that these tokens
When strung into psalms
Make a poor offering
To one rich in verbiage

Like the dropping of bricks
Into the dark of a well
Never sure of their impact
Or impression they leave

The worth of my words
Has always been measured
By their faint, hollow echo
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the perfect "poets poem" to represent you in the book..one of my faves of yours.
Well done poet sir

" ... And think not, that you can direct the course of love ...
if it finds you worthy ...  it then directs your course."

K.Gibran


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25 posted 2003-02-19 12:27 PM


An excellent write Wranx. A must for the book.

Maree

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26 posted 2003-02-19 11:25 AM


A keepsake of a poem...
I very much enjoyed the read...
Smiles2uPoetFriendWranx
*~coco~*

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27 posted 2003-02-19 11:40 AM


YES! I want this echo of yours to be heard loud and clear. Dang, did anyone ever tell you before now that you were born to write? It's a special gift you have Ed, and we are so lucky that you share it with us.
Definitely way beyond bowling and decoupage.

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28 posted 2003-02-19 07:15 PM


Also a favorite of mine Ed.  Great choice!
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29 posted 2003-02-19 07:31 PM


you know I love this one... well if you didn't you do now...
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30 posted 2003-02-19 07:42 PM


Ohhhhhh ya this is VERY GOOD!!!!!

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This goes in the book. No doubt about it! It's good to see a poem of this quality, that talks about the way (and the ways) it feels to be a man.

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32 posted 2003-02-20 12:43 PM


Like many have said before me, this is an excellent write and should find its proper place in print...

Hats off to you Poet sir...

Regards,
Sudhir

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33 posted 2003-02-20 03:02 PM


Sure wish this gets into the book, and anyway I have printed it as a favorite for my collection of poetry called, "The Best Of The Best", which includes all my favorites from Passions.  I really admire how you used your craft on this one.

          
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34 posted 2003-02-20 05:57 PM


You have proved
your words worthy
with this gem, Wranx.
*s

When you think you have heard it all,
listen more closely.
~Dorene

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enjoyed
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36 posted 2003-02-22 10:44 AM


Just a friendly bump.....
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37 posted 2003-02-22 10:58 AM


Cool poem.  I loved the last stanza.

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wranx-wranx-wranx! You do us proud. I just went back and read this a second time, and saw dimensions in it that I missed the first time around. This is truly solid work.

Nice goin, Ed.

Ed

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39 posted 2003-02-22 11:38 AM


cool, I like that u compare it with DNA. Nicely done

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40 posted 2003-02-22 07:02 PM


Hell, I really like this Wranx...

good choice for the book methinks..

K


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41 posted 2003-02-23 12:54 PM


For my word's worth, this is a definite book submission.
I never cared for the word submit until I joined this passionate group.
Does that make me a groupie??? LOL.

PS, thanks, wranx for that snowed-in pix. We have less than an inch of snow powder outside today.

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42 posted 2003-02-26 08:54 AM


Your words have resonance indeed...
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43 posted 2003-02-26 10:56 AM


*ponders a bit and walks away* well after I check that lil box thingy..ciao..*shrugs* what can I say..I'm not much of a critique type of gal..

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

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44 posted 2003-03-03 10:01 AM


What can I say that others already haven't?  I love the way you tied this up at the end, what striking lines.     This gets my vote for sure.
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45 posted 2003-03-03 12:02 PM


The worth of my words
Has always been measured
By their faint, hollow echo''


I'm thinking, I am kicking myself for not reading you sooner.....


Lauren~

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So I can pull you into me

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46 posted 2003-03-03 01:31 PM


OMG what an Idiot I am I already responded to this doh!! having a moment

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Yes, I vote for this one.  Joyce

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48 posted 2003-03-08 06:33 PM


Oh, I like this...and I think the echo they make is far from faint
  

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49 posted 2003-03-08 07:10 PM


Ed - you are in a poetic class yet unidentified  Brilliant - my friend xxoo

Im with you on all of them -

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50 posted 2003-03-11 05:04 PM


And found that these tokens
When strung into psalms
Make a poor offering

Oh, no... they're priceless gems. *S* This is wonderful!

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51 posted 2003-03-19 12:47 PM


Hey Ed - for NOT being a writer type - you really wax poetry hehehe  Congrats xxoo
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52 posted 2003-03-19 11:23 PM


Thanks to you all, for taking the time. And to those that kindly "bumped" this poor scribble.
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53 posted 2003-03-22 08:52 PM


I really wanted this in the book....it got accepted so silly one go sign your publishing agreement!!!!
Bridgette

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54 posted 2003-04-15 12:12 PM


Thanks for the reminder Bridgette (I really am a moron sometimes)


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