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0 posted 2003-02-17 09:41 PM



They enter through the arches in the early morning light.
Young, healthy bodies move along with faces just as bright
As spotlights, pouring out enthusiasm as they make their way.
The workers at McDonald's have begun another day.

Although it is a menial nook, you'll hear no one complain
Or have an incongenial outlook similar to pain.
Their whole lives lie before them and, like many, they've begun
By serving skinny burgers on a sesame seed bun.

Our future doctors fix the fries and nurses pour the shakes.
There is no pharmacist alive who doesn't know it takes
Three seconds for the meat to thaw or how to fill a cup,
Our future lawyers serve it - future bankers ring it up.

They're going to be successes, each and every single one
And, if you ask, my guess is they will say before they're done,
They will all be rich and famous. Isn't that what Life's about?
The world is waiting patiently and they're just starting out.

So there they stand. The innocence of youth is on parade.
No possibility of failure lies in plans well-laid.
Amid the fries and apple pies, with ketchup on their hands
The leaders of our country's newest generation stand.

...............* * * * * ** * * *...............


He enters through the arches in the silent dead of night.
His uniform is threadbare and a badge reflects the light
From streetlamps bouncing off the valleys of a time-worn, wrinkled face.
In motion and emotionless, the store guard takes his place.

He checks the doors around the store, makes periodic rounds,
His ears long since accustomed to all strange, nocturnal sounds
Then settles in a back booth near the corner of the wall
And lets his mind roam aimlessly on nothing much at all.

If one could turn the pages back, oh, fifty years or so
To see the lad that this man represented long ago
One could have seen a bright, young boy set out to make his mark
Instead of this aged, huddled figure sitting in the dark.

But something passed along the years he did not understand
And adolescent dreams did not turn out as he had planned.
His hopes to turn the world around were met and neutralized
By resentment and indifference in Humanity's cold eyes.

No audience applauded as they did for picture shows
Depicting heroes conquering unconquerable foes.
No background music played to guide him - not one single song,
No happy endings out of novels ever came along.

His goals turned into gallstones as the years passed endlessly.
Opportunity knocked at times but he had lost the key.
Enthusiasm turned to spasms only seconds long
That left behind a bitter man who wondered what went wrong.

His anger turned to hatred as the years went marching on,
Then hate turned to indifference-then even that was gone.
Now, sitting in the back booth with his head slumped to his chest,
A previous leader of our current generation rests.

...............* * * * * * * * * *...............

They enter through the arches in the early morning light.
He opens up the doors for them, smiles vaguely, says goodnight
Then shuffles down the sidewalk of a lonely, one-way street,
Arrives at home and goes to bed - the cycle is complete.

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1 posted 2003-02-17 10:01 PM


I'd vote for this if you'd checked the submission box, Deer... ...

Because it's pretty darned good...

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2 posted 2003-02-17 10:03 PM


smiling at Nan---I was kinda wondering too.

This guy has a kinda knack for meter, huh?


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3 posted 2003-02-17 10:09 PM


Of course I could "assume" he wants it submitted and fix it... but that'd just get me in deep trouble... and I've got enough of that trying to figure out how to shovel myself out tomorrow...
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4 posted 2003-02-17 10:15 PM


oops! All fixed....thank you, ladies
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5 posted 2003-02-17 10:17 PM


All righty then... Voting here - This is one of my favorites, Deer...
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6 posted 2003-02-17 10:17 PM


Thank you...
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7 posted 2003-02-17 10:20 PM



Oh yes....

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8 posted 2003-02-17 10:52 PM



Love this, 'Deer...glad you fixed it for voting purposes.

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you have not truly met the poet.
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9 posted 2003-02-17 11:15 PM


'bout time you showed up. I was getting worried and was going to post one of yours for you!

You always have my vote.

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10 posted 2003-02-17 11:27 PM


Beautiful poem.. Thanks for sharing!

Anyone can write, But only poets can capture the heart.

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11 posted 2003-02-17 11:29 PM


funny, I did my time working at Mickey Dee's, I had my regular early morning customers, older folks, that I adored. There was one gentleman, that would always be so kind, and when he got back from one of his famous trips to Reno, he'd come give me a silver dollar, and tell me not to tell the other girls, then he'd make his way to the next girl, and do the same thing. My mom still has those silver dollars in a safe deposit box....I'll never forget him

LOL all this just to tell you, this poem touched me, but in a different way...

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(big hugggssssssss) Oh my gosh, if only I could imagine this kind of condition, dearest friend, I haven't gotten a job yet other than doing volunteer and community service, I suppose I need to immerse myself out more in society and behold what many others like me are doing and what they hope to accomplish! (sigh) This is excellent, sweet friend, a strong message for our youth and I hope to see this in the next book, yay, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Balladeer, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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13 posted 2003-02-17 11:52 PM


Michael,
Glad to know that I get to vote for this. Excellent as usual! My vote is in.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

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14 posted 2003-02-18 01:56 AM


Well, Mr. Balladeer....where ya been???
You know you got my vote...   

Ethel  

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15 posted 2003-02-18 04:35 AM


So glad you submitted this for the book Deer...it's one of my favourites from you.

Voting!

Maree

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16 posted 2003-02-18 06:18 AM


A wonderful submission for the book, Michael.

Best wishes and hugs,
/Kit

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17 posted 2003-02-18 07:09 AM


Narrationally exceptional. I like the way the individual in this poem is characterised.

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--G. "DUBYA" BUSH. June 14, 2001. Unaware of rolling TV camera.

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18 posted 2003-02-18 09:28 AM


reading you is always a treat

Charisma

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19 posted 2003-02-18 03:09 PM


Shall I say that I missed classic poetry from the master Balladeer?

Dear Sir, I am always left in awe with your words.. this one is even more special, if it can be said...

Regards,
Sudhir

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20 posted 2003-02-18 03:16 PM


I am curtsying, bowing and genuflecting before you in all humility, my Dear Master Storyteller/Poet!!!

Warm HUGS!
Linda

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21 posted 2003-02-18 04:08 PM


The answer is YES, what would any book be without a submission for Balladeer?
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22 posted 2003-02-18 05:25 PM


Love this one Balladeer.
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23 posted 2003-02-18 06:20 PM


This, Balladeer, is just wonderful.  Indeed, it is the current theme that our lives revolve entirely around our career goals... the first thing you're asked when you meet someone new is what you do for a living, and somehow that defines people and their accomplishments - how much money they make, what their contribution is to society.

There are ways to contribute to the world that aren't career-based.  Whatever career I end up with, it's not going to be my contribution to the world... it's going to be how I make money, that's all.  It's tragic that we must set our goals so specifically, and feel as though we've failed when they don't turn out quite like we planned.

So touching that you capture the tragedy of a life unappreciated.  Indeed, he recieves no audience to applaud... but your tribute is more than applause.  This is the kind of poem that makes your username so accurate.

Excellent work, my friend.  This earns my vote.

Parasite

"Faith" means the will to avoid knowing what is true.
~ Friedrich Wilhelm Nietzsche

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24 posted 2003-02-18 07:27 PM


in it goes!

btw have you already published "a hole in my chest" (in think its called - i mean the one about the young soldier who dies in the speaker's arms)? if not you really ought to submitt it for this collection.

-majnu
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Timid thoughts be not afraid. I am a Poet.

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25 posted 2003-02-18 07:32 PM


   Indeed!! I love this....
Lauren~

Take me where the tides start
So I can pull you into me

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26 posted 2003-02-18 08:01 PM



LOL I lived on MacDonalds burgers and fries for over a half year back then in the seventies, I bet it's still there somewhere in Bethesda, Maryland.

As usual a beautiful, true life story poem you wrote here Deer. You always know how to turn simple things into delicious delights.

Such a pleasure to read you pal
I've cast my vote, may it become you well

Titia

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27 posted 2003-02-18 08:07 PM


Hi there Michael...voting here! :
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28 posted 2003-02-18 08:08 PM


Thank you all for your wondeful support and votes. I appreciate you all..

Local Parasite..yes, this is the way I like to write. I used to live up to my name way back when....thank you for the comment.

Manju...Small Pain in my Chest was included in the first Passions book. Thanks for enjoying it...

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29 posted 2003-02-18 11:48 PM


Balladeer...Enjoyed...Paul

Where would we be
Without Mickey D
I'll take a number three

"To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you"

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30 posted 2003-02-19 01:14 AM


It wouldnt be a PIPS book without your wisdom rhymes and cadence cool.

" ... And think not, that you can direct the course of love ...
if it finds you worthy ...  it then directs your course."

K.Gibran


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31 posted 2003-02-19 01:15 AM



i respect this, i respect you.

(i think i already said that? oh well)

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32 posted 2003-02-19 01:31 AM


I love it, I voted for it, but sit shaking my head wondering if you could take a request for just ONE that I don't cry after it is finished, just one!    
                  
~* Carpe' Diem *~  



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33 posted 2003-02-19 04:38 AM


This get's my vote, it's one of my favourites.

Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



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34 posted 2003-02-19 03:40 PM


It's certainly nice to know you mess up on something... even if it's just on submission details. *G* For your pen doesn't make a mistake when it tells a tale so well... Love this, Deer one.
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35 posted 2003-02-19 04:39 PM


Of course this is going in 'Deer One... I LOVED IT!!!  My heart went out to your guy as I read.....  

Bridgette

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36 posted 2003-02-19 04:54 PM


Nice message
in a nice package.

Lots to learn from this 'un.

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37 posted 2003-02-20 12:23 PM


Never did time at the Big M, but I did a stint at Baker's Better Burgers and Tacos.  Truth told, it was some of the best times spent with good friends. A lot of fond memories.  

Sir Balladeer, this one gets my vote for content, style and feel.  I bow to you and yours.

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38 posted 2003-02-20 01:27 PM


Mike,
I wouldn't miss a vote for you.

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39 posted 2003-02-21 08:06 AM


I remember this poem, Mike - It was a long time ago, but I still remember it.  This poem and your "Statue in Central Park" poem are two of my favorites.  I could hardly let this slip by without a vote.
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40 posted 2003-02-21 09:07 AM


Mr. Balladeer
THis is one of the greatest comentaries on the simple man, and to have you recite it to me was a thrill. Your story telling abilities are unmatched as you pick up on the obvious but unrecognized bits of life and weave them into the perfect poem
Warm poetic hugs
Liz

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41 posted 2003-02-21 09:11 AM


Deer...you know..I love this one...
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42 posted 2003-02-21 09:49 PM


This is one I have always liked, from the first time I found it and read it. Very sad but wise poem, Balladeer.

--Liz

It's not having what you want, it's wanting what you've got...
--Sheryl Crow

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43 posted 2003-02-21 11:07 PM


Touching...absolutely.

When you think you have heard it all,
listen more closely.
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44 posted 2003-02-21 11:28 PM


Well his cycle is near complete. Pity the ol' boy, hope he had a few moments on his cycle where the wind caressed his hair and he was so balanced he felt flight. Well done
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45 posted 2003-02-23 06:44 PM


One of my all-time favorites, 'Deer! I'm glad it will be in the book!
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46 posted 2003-02-23 06:48 PM


This is a wonderful write and deserves recognition in a wider audience.  I am voting for it!

Betty Lou Hebert

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Oh you do tell a tale.  Joyce
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Oh my, I am speechless. You make this look easy, this very heavy topic, put to rhyme.
Sandra

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49 posted 2003-02-28 06:09 PM


there is no one who can write these ballads as well as you Michael.

Always rolling off the tongue and so smooth on the ear.
M

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Just checked to see if I'd read this yet. I guess so, but what's the harm in a bump?
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51 posted 2003-03-17 09:26 PM


Ruth has read this one to me before, liked it then, like it now
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53 posted 2003-03-21 09:38 AM


Just goes to show that everyone has their purpose...no matter what it is.  Granted, lost dreams are an entire different story...

great job...I'll vote.

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54 posted 2003-03-21 10:21 PM


I loved this one the first time I read and I think I love even more now   You have definately got my vote. How could we not have such talent in the book?

Tara


"wake me up inside
call my name and save me from the dark"
-Bring Me To Life by Evanescence

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55 posted 2003-03-22 12:58 PM


This is awesome, you always have a way of serving your poetry just right.



Sometimes we have to follow a stronger voice, even if it's silent.


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56 posted 2003-03-22 01:27 PM


Enjoyed.

               Dawn

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57 posted 2003-03-22 04:15 PM


hugsss you......enjoy your words much!


Lauren~

I close my eyes and there in the shadows I see your light
You come to me out of my dreams
Across the night

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58 posted 2003-03-24 02:35 PM


Yep, I already read it.....and voted.....
but, just a quick  


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59 posted 2003-03-24 02:42 PM


I loved it.  

Susan

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60 posted 2003-03-24 06:04 PM


Deer it is lovely and I love it.  Excellent writing and outstanding.
Very well written


love and warm stuff
as always
Krissy

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at every pore with instant fires
Andrew Marvell 1621-1678

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61 posted 2003-03-24 10:50 PM


Wish I could vote again!
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62 posted 2003-03-25 12:18 PM


You know, I never worked at McD's, does that mean I missed the cycle or just made my own?  I joined the Navy when I was 17. Before that I worked in food service, and officially got my bum pinched at the age of 14 by a man old enough to be my dad.  He tipped me $10.  I was happy....

Great write, I really enjoyed it.

Susan

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I know I already voted for this, so I had to look at the ratings to see why on earth it was not on the already accepted list.  I know I can't vote again but I wish I could.  I guess because it is a 2 page poem, but it is truly worth it.  Love, Joyce
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Rest, Dear Friend, Rest.... Awesome writing there 'Deer.... This one definitely gets my vote.
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65 posted 2003-03-25 02:39 PM


Thank you for all of the awesome comments and heartfelt replies. I appreciate you...

Susan...ten bucks for a bum pinch? I'd be happy, too!!!

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66 posted 2003-03-25 02:39 PM


Stop that!!!

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67 posted 2003-03-25 02:39 PM


good grief!!!! It's gone berzerk!!

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68 posted 2003-03-25 03:24 PM


Oh but it is so worth more than $10 now!!


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69 posted 2003-03-25 03:34 PM


Wow. I love the way you intertwined both parts of the poem at the end you get my vote!
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Back to the top...

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

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71 posted 2003-03-27 11:29 PM


Why, thank you, LArry!!


Susan...I'll mortgage the house!!

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72 posted 2003-03-27 11:55 PM


I give it two all-beef votes, with lettuce, pickles, tomatoes, onions, special sauce, on a sesame seed bun!  This is a grand cycle indeed!
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73 posted 2003-03-29 04:25 AM


never worked at Macdonalds but worked at KFC for a while and remember those youthful dreams very well...how we will move on to better things, how the world is our oyster etc etc...

i guess i will tell you several decades later whether i have evolved to be the man as described in your poem..

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74 posted 2003-05-13 09:13 AM


Oh Mike. Another one for the Ballad King. Excellent job my dear friend.

Marilyn

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75 posted 2003-05-17 06:15 PM


ok I know I can't say anything that hasn't been said, and I now its already in the book... but I can't help myself, This is great. And any poem this long that can keep my attention must be the best!

Always, Alyssa

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