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Sunkissed
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0 posted 2003-02-17 08:15 PM



And if I weren't gritty
Would you have still wanted me?
Down to earth I am
Down to earth is where you
Found me
& for a while, did I
Not please you?

I am flawed

Like so many others before
Enamored or awed by
The image of rainbows
& Mystery
You've finally arrived
At me

But don't be

Terribly disappointed
You were sweeter than
Rain washed skies

To me,
You were more than
A carefully constructed
phrase in time or space
More than white candles
Or lace praises that with
a click can disappear like
confessions on a deaf ear

See, I favored us both
& swore an oath
To let it all float softly
Down to earth & settle

Here...


Sunkissed.

"I have to hurry past the moon...to Jupiter..."

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1 posted 2003-02-17 08:26 PM




(big hugggssssssss) This is so beautifully bittersweet, sweet friend, I hope now love has tread you softly back down to earth without either of you falling and now forgiveness and comfort has been made! (sad sigh) This is heartfelt, sweet friend, I always love your gorgeous writings and am voting for this, yay, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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2 posted 2003-02-18 11:11 AM



Confessions on a deaf ear...


Connel
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3 posted 2003-02-18 11:12 AM


Very beatiful... My votes in!

Anyone can write, But only poets can capture the heart.

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4 posted 2003-02-18 01:44 PM


Always enjoy your music.
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5 posted 2003-02-18 04:40 PM


How lovely.  I almost wonder if it should be an epitaph, and not an epilogue.     Rich with feeling and simply impressive verse.  I'll vote.

Parasite

"Faith" means the will to avoid knowing what is true.
~ Friedrich Wilhelm Nietzsche

Janet Marie
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6 posted 2003-02-18 10:55 PM


Terribly disappointed
You were sweeter than
Rain washed skies

To me,
You were more than
A carefully constructed
phrase in time or space
More than white candles
Or lace praises that with
a click can disappear like
confessions on a deaf ear
==============================

what a lovely unique write this is...
wonderful imagery and phrasing.
excellent SK!!

" ... And think not, that you can direct the course of love ...
if it finds you worthy ...  it then directs your course."

K.Gibran


Justbleu
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7 posted 2003-02-20 09:34 AM


Lovely yet sad!!!!

Bridgette

Chanson
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8 posted 2003-02-22 05:01 PM


I like the gritty/down to earth play.
Very nice. *s

When you think you have heard it all,
listen more closely.
~Dorene

Kellie_Cantrell
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9 posted 2003-02-23 01:04 PM


Good... very sad!
wayoutwalt
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10 posted 2003-02-23 01:07 PM


sweet and nicely laid out!
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11 posted 2003-02-24 12:12 PM


Can't believe I missed this when it was first posted!

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Martie
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12 posted 2003-02-24 12:27 PM


Soft and sweetly passionate
Bill Charles
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13 posted 2003-02-24 01:02 AM


Sunkissed - very nicely written, my vote...

BC

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14 posted 2003-02-24 01:17 AM


Bittersweet, but beautiful writing.
Sudhir Iyer
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15 posted 2003-02-24 06:01 AM


a click can disappear like
confessions on a deaf ear
..
..
To let it all float softly
Down to earth & settle

Here...
---------------------

this is excellent writing... liked it very much...

regards,
sudhir

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16 posted 2003-02-24 04:58 PM


Nice way of conveying the thought.  Leaves
one pondering..well done..

hoot_owl_rn
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17 posted 2003-02-25 11:47 AM


I like the way this one is broken...it reads well
DawnG
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18 posted 2003-02-25 11:52 AM


You've got my vote

                          Dawn

Nan
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19 posted 2003-03-03 11:15 AM


Very nice...
Earth Angel
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20 posted 2003-03-05 11:47 AM


Lucky is he who has been kissed by the sun!
Expressive--and impressive!--writing.

Warm hugs,
Earth Angel

WhiteRose
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21 posted 2003-03-15 04:56 PM


Beautifully sad.
Kethry
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22 posted 2003-03-15 05:37 PM


Wonderful images, as autumn fades to winter's cold. A contenhder for sure.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



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23 posted 2003-03-16 01:54 AM


I thought I had already voted to this poem...
apparently I haven't..until now..

"Love makes the world go around"
~with love and hugs from Ethel__GG~  
                  

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24 posted 2003-03-16 04:36 AM


Or lace praises that with
a click can disappear like
confessions on a deaf ear

Really enjoyed quite a few of the descriptive passages very much.

           
R.E.S.P.E.C.T.
Aretha Franklin  

regards2you
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25 posted 2003-03-19 09:36 AM



SunKissed,

Enjoyed every line. This is wonderful and unique. Loved the ending.


Hugs, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
        "Desiderata"

Jason Lyle
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26 posted 2003-03-19 10:35 AM


Yes this one was nicely done, my vote also.
Jason

dgvarner
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27 posted 2003-03-27 06:58 PM


cool....

hugs, g

"laughter is the shortest distance between two people"  - victor borge

LngJhnAg
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28 posted 2003-03-30 04:53 PM


That's very sweet, SK.  It has a ring of melancholy, tinged with hope.
Charisma
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29 posted 2003-04-04 03:35 PM


Enjoyed the read very much

Charisma

LngJhnAg
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30 posted 2003-04-04 08:34 PM


Great writing.  I like the sense of personality you brought out in this.
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31 posted 2003-04-11 10:21 PM



passing shadows
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displaced
32 posted 2003-04-28 05:25 AM


beautifully sad to me...I like them that way
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