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ecrivan
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my own state

0 posted 2003-02-16 09:08 PM


I might have had a favorite bear to cuddle
needed to refer to some comfort..to huddle
away from the chill bite of winter winds
hidden somewhere where there was traquility.

That a parakeet's company meant so much
it succumbed to desease..there was a hush
some tears were shed..
hearts spang a leak..bled
consoled with another to take its place
the corner of the living room..offered space.

The need to write to a special friend
and say 'stick around to the very end.'
consolation broke when distance divided
reality spoke up when flight took hold
experience came by the book..grew bold.

might have had a favorite game around the house
and read beyond curfew..silent as a mouse
removed from the chill bite of winter winds
buried beneath the covers on a dark lonely night.

grew to know how to console another's sorrow
reconcile the past and see a brighter tomorrow
developed a knack of seeing myself from the outside
put some peace between me and trivial circumstances
this material world...is all but a brief instance
so why nuture heart pains
life has its strains
wiser to be gentler on myself.



[This message has been edited by ecrivan (02-16-2003 09:09 PM).]

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1 posted 2003-02-16 09:30 PM


at one point it sounds like the person's spirit is at peace, and then at another, burdened by sadness.
ecrivan
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2 posted 2003-02-16 10:01 PM


I suppose that is what consolation is all about... to help relieve our conscience of disquieting burdens so as to attain peace of mind...but that is so fragile...thanks for sharing


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3 posted 2003-02-17 12:05 PM


It's wise to be gentle to oneself indeed...
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4 posted 2003-02-17 04:03 PM




(big huggssssss) It can be so much harder when you get so hard on yourself, and I can forgive those many times when I was left defenseless and dropped off on the shoulder lane and to appreciate oneself is an even bigger advantage! (sigh) This is so wonderfully expressed, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martin, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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5 posted 2003-02-17 04:04 PM


yes I like this poem a lot. You get my vote.

Cold hands means a warm heart

ecrivan
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6 posted 2003-02-17 08:41 PM


Loner,

I did think of you when I wrote this, you and Noah..and myself..you are not the only one who feels something isn't right with how you feel about yourself..so it's always good to be positive and make that shine through


ecrivan
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7 posted 2003-02-17 08:43 PM


Nan,

wise to be gentle and yet firm...wouldn't want to be too soft


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8 posted 2003-02-18 01:10 PM


An uplifting piece.  I like the second stanza quite a bit, it was just unusual enough to keep me interested throughout the rest of the poem.  Nicely written.

Parasite

"Faith" means the will to avoid knowing what is true.
~ Friedrich Wilhelm Nietzsche

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9 posted 2003-02-18 01:18 PM



When I need some consolation and there is nobody around to give it, I grab my "cuddly bear" and a good "book" and I'm on my way to being consoled! I enjoyed this gentle and introspective piece from you!

May you never have the need to be consoled, but if you do, I will send you some warm, loving hugs.

EA

ecrivan
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10 posted 2003-02-19 12:23 PM


Parasite,

unusual in form as I'm still trying alternate rhyme endings like visual rhymes...
using  lot more reference to fiction/myth/hostorical opinion so alluding to them...thanks for sharing


ecrivan
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11 posted 2003-02-19 12:25 PM


Hey Linda

Had a couple of crystals in Europe...and apprciate your spirituality...yeah I'll keep you mind


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12 posted 2003-02-20 09:11 AM


Really cool....yep sounds like consolation to me

Bridgette

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13 posted 2003-02-20 09:26 AM


Sometimes it's easier said than done to be less hard on ourselves. We are often our own worst critics and toughest bosses
Sudhir Iyer
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14 posted 2003-02-20 03:17 PM


very well written...

Regards to you,
Sudhir

ecrivan
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15 posted 2003-02-21 01:06 AM


Ruth,

I see your point, that's what spurred the motivation on this one..the need to spend less head time on analysis and just doing what my heart was set on...being as less harsh on myself as possible..utopia for me


ecrivan
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16 posted 2003-02-21 01:08 AM


Brigitte, Sudhir

it serves it's purpose..thanks for sharing


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17 posted 2003-02-22 10:09 PM


It's a great accomplishment
to be able to see ourselves
from outside ourselves.

Enjoyed, as always. *s


When you think you have heard it all,
listen more closely.
~Dorene

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ecrivan
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18 posted 2003-02-22 10:33 PM


Doreen,

and I hope that continues...yet the opportunity is there for all of us to open an external eye on what we do

[This message has been edited by ecrivan (02-22-2003 10:36 PM).]

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19 posted 2003-02-23 08:12 AM


Excellent write!
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20 posted 2003-02-23 08:38 AM


Wnderfully written...my path exactly, when i realized that i was my own worst enemy, I made a decision to be my own best friend, with God's help, I'm slowly learning how! It is a journey well worth the travel! Ellie

A friend hears the song in my heart, and sings it to me when my memory fails.

ecrivan
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21 posted 2003-02-23 02:16 PM


Munda, Ellie

Thanks for reading..planning a trip to Amsterdam soon. Ellie still my own best critic..but hey..there is so much one can physically do and I still run around like a 'spring chicken' sometimes.


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22 posted 2003-02-23 02:41 PM


Well now this speaks loudly to the me that just up and quit work one day, and decided to get to know the world I lived in before I was gone.  Well done and I have no idea now I missed this one either.

          
~* Carpe' Diem *~  

ecrivan
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23 posted 2003-02-24 07:04 PM


Mysteria,

very true, there's so much more to knowing life than just being "dedicated" at a job place..especially in the revovlving door ones!


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24 posted 2003-02-25 02:39 PM


You've got my vote

                          Dawn

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25 posted 2003-02-25 03:14 PM


YES Martin my friend.
~Hugs~

~ Trace my body with your words..
And in doing so, you touch my heart. ~

ecrivan
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26 posted 2003-02-26 12:01 PM


thanks for your encouragement Nancy and Dawn


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27 posted 2003-03-16 11:06 AM


So true, Martin...didn't know I missed this one...Sorry...

"Love makes the world go around"
~with love and hugs from Ethel__GG~  
                  

ecrivan
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28 posted 2003-03-19 12:05 PM


thanks for voting on this...it's rare for me to express sentimentality on the forum...here is one piece that shows it
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29 posted 2003-03-21 03:26 PM


grew to know how to console another's sorrow
reconcile the past and see a brighter tomorrow
developed a knack of seeing myself from the outside
put some peace between me and trivial circumstances

This is such a tranquil write. Peace seems attainable. A lovely thought.

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30 posted 2003-03-25 08:42 PM


Martin - you touched me deep with this one - wish I had your attitude - need to take lessons . . .  this one hit home xxoo
ecrivan
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31 posted 2003-03-27 12:02 PM


WhiteRose,

Inner peace is attainable what's frightening is how global peace gets repeatedly fragmented.

Martin

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32 posted 2003-03-28 08:26 PM


There's so much to be said for remaining true to ourselves~

put some peace between me and trivial circumstances
this material world...is all but a brief instance

I'll be looking for this in the book.

Peace to you Ecrivan~

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33 posted 2003-03-28 11:25 PM


Martin, it's so true that to be able to console others you have to develop empathy by feeling loss yourself. You have a lot of wisdom in this one.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

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34 posted 2003-03-29 03:44 PM


Excellent, enjoyed much.
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35 posted 2003-03-29 04:50 PM


grew to know how to console another's sorrow
reconcile the past and see a brighter tomorrow
developed a knack of seeing myself from the outside
put some peace between me and trivial circumstances


how I understand this...I'm still trying to not be so hard on myself.

~A~

Jason Lyle
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36 posted 2003-03-30 12:31 PM


This one struck a chord.My vote
Jason

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37 posted 2003-03-30 07:02 PM


Beautiful form and wisdom, all tied into one great poem.  Man!  I wish I had some of your inspiration.  This a great piece of writing.
ecrivan
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38 posted 2003-04-02 12:29 PM


LngJohn

inspiration comes experience and age...and we each have our own style. Thanks for sharing.

Jason,

thanks for the vote of confidence


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ecrivan
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39 posted 2003-04-02 12:35 PM


Sandra,

it's good to read again and remind myself of the objectivity I have to have sometimes. Thanks


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