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Orchards of Quiet Moon

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Greeneyes
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0 posted 02-15-2003 08:27 PM       View Profile for Greeneyes   Email Greeneyes   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Greeneyes


Paint the sky with petals
of a thousand flowers
trace the star-cast shadows

that I could breathe again
upon     earth:

I fell into darkness
      into your amber midnights
your naked hope    laying beside
me  

Whispers fell upon curves of
   the moon
soft yields in silence

echoing how winter feels
    when snow falls
gentle dancers

touching the world
   of my eyes

{you loved winter, the
     ice storms}


I sometimes failed
     to cross the silent
borders of your thoughts

I, the lover, counting
   anxious hours of loss--
veiled light, bronze   colors
glitter of unnamed stars

moving my   lips skyward
    
     {I am where I need to be}   an
angel between worlds  in endless water
pool of tender blue


             how my dreams arrive:


I fell for hours
    splashing into stars




I sing to life
To it's tragic beauty
To pain and strife
Let all that dances through me
The rise and the fall, I lived through it all

[This message has been edited by Greeneyes (02-15-2003 08:33 PM).]

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1 posted 02-15-2003 08:34 PM       View Profile for Mistletoe Angel   Email Mistletoe Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Mistletoe Angel's Home Page   View IP for Mistletoe Angel



(smiles) Oh Lauren, this is sooooooooo beautifully breathtaking, sweet friend, yay, I just love the iagery in this of you falling and swimming through stars to find yourself only to fall on a dew-laden flowerbed! (kiss on cheek) I just love this, sweet friend, yay, this has my vote, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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highways, & byways, for now


2 posted 02-15-2003 09:12 PM       View Profile for Bill Charles   Email Bill Charles   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Bill Charles

Greeneyes - how could this not be included...

BC
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3 posted 02-15-2003 09:44 PM       View Profile for garysgirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit garysgirl's Home Page   View IP for garysgirl

Lauren, every poem of yours I've read is beautiful, and this is no exception.....

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~  
                  

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4 posted 02-15-2003 09:56 PM       View Profile for Jason Lyle   Email Jason Lyle   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jason Lyle

And a nod from the novice also,very nice.
Jason
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5 posted 02-15-2003 10:11 PM       View Profile for Enchantress   Email Enchantress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enchantress

But of course...this one belongs.
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No contest. Wow.
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Hi Lauren, this is a wonderful example of your work. It should be in the book!
Sandra
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8 posted 02-16-2003 11:53 AM       View Profile for Chanson   Email Chanson   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Chanson

A *fantastic* poem.

I especially like:

"I sometimes failed
     to cross the silent
borders of your thoughts"

*s

[This message has been edited by Chanson (02-16-2003 11:57 AM).]

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9 posted 02-16-2003 12:29 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

I'm not sure even 'beautiful' describes this..it's more than that. It's exquisite!
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10 posted 02-17-2003 12:21 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

What PdV said... It's wonderful...
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11 posted 02-17-2003 04:49 PM       View Profile for Sunnyone   Email Sunnyone   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunnyone's Home Page   View IP for Sunnyone

'I am where I need to be', and this one needs to be in our new book...it is so lovely, and I love the flow!!

Accept these small gifts from my gypsy soul, and let the magik happen!  ~~S~~

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12 posted 02-17-2003 11:39 PM       View Profile for Larry C   Email Larry C   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Larry C's Home Page   View IP for Larry C

Lauren,
I absolutely love this poem and your gorgeous new pic. I miss you so much. An awesome write as usual and it gets my vote.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

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13 posted 02-17-2003 11:41 PM       View Profile for Connel   Email Connel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Connel

This poe sounds like another poem i once read.. Thanks for sharing.

Anyone can write, But only poets can capture the heart.

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14 posted 02-18-2003 02:08 AM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

"   {I am where I need to be}   an
angel between worlds  in endless water
pool of tender blue


             how my dreams arrive:


I fell for hours
    splashing into stars"


I love this part! stunning write
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15 posted 02-18-2003 04:16 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

This is so very beautiful.. a must for the book.

Maree  
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16 posted 02-18-2003 07:26 AM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

Your language and phrasing throughout is superb Lauren ... a wonderful choice for submission, very much enjoyed this.

Best wishes,
/Kit
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Greeneyes? Well, I'll take your word for it.

Thanks.

It's amazing I won. I was running against peace, prosperity, & incumbency.
--G. "DUBYA" BUSH. June 14, 2001. Unaware of rolling TV camera.

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When, poet of softness, will you come out with your own book?  Very well done.  Almost like reading a cloud.

Thank you.

What light through yon window breaks?  It is the east, and Juliet is the sun.

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19 posted 02-18-2003 01:01 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Love the eroticism in your breaths of snow, here.
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20 posted 02-18-2003 01:28 PM       View Profile for Earth Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Earth Angel's Home Page   View IP for Earth Angel

Your poetry matches your beautiful face!

May you continue to grace these pages with your graceful writing!

Linda
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21 posted 02-18-2003 04:35 PM       View Profile for Local Parasite   Email Local Parasite   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Local Parasite's Home Page   View IP for Local Parasite

This is breathtaking... especially the last two lines, that left me in a state of amazement, hungry for more, so I read this two or three more times.     I really, really like this poem.  You must have somehow stood right there in that moment you captured and written it all on your invisible notepad with your invisible pen, 'cause I can't imagine how your memory could bring that moment back so clearly.

Just amazing.  This earns my vote.

Parasite

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~ Friedrich Wilhelm Nietzsche

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22 posted 02-18-2003 04:38 PM       View Profile for Charisma   Email Charisma   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Charisma's Home Page   View IP for Charisma

beautifully penned......love it

Charisma
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you already know how much I adore this poem...and the poet

" ... And think not, that you can direct the course of love ...
if it finds you worthy ...  it then directs your course."

K.Gibran

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Another masterpiece I've read!! Loved this:
"I sometimes failed
     to cross the silent
borders of your thoughts"

angsana

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