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She Was For Sale

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Chanson
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Up Creek w/Out Paddle


25 posted 02-20-2003 10:14 PM       View Profile for Chanson   Email Chanson   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Chanson

I can't decide if this
is a poem, a single page
out of an epic, or a corner pub
quiet moment with a story teller.
And that's a good thing...
because as any of the three,
it's ALL good.

(That means I like it!) *s

Good job, Andrew.

When you think you have heard it all,
listen more closely.
~Dorene

Justbleu
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26 posted 02-22-2003 10:45 AM       View Profile for Justbleu   Email Justbleu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Justbleu's Home Page   View IP for Justbleu

Bump....
Lost Dreamer
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27 posted 03-02-2003 01:19 PM       View Profile for Lost Dreamer   Email Lost Dreamer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lost Dreamer

Wow, I have to say this poem is amazing. I have to admit that I didn't get it on the first reading, I read through the replies and found out the true meaning of this poem, and from that all I can say is Wow, and great job.

Sometimes we have to follow a stronger voice, even if it's silent.


DawnG
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28 posted 03-02-2003 04:01 PM       View Profile for DawnG   Email DawnG   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for DawnG

Ok Andrew,

The first reading had me guessing it was a lady. But even before I had the chance to read this poem I'd been told to look for the deeper meaning hidden within. So having been told that I decided to give it a second read which had me guessing a flute. This still didn't have the comfortable feeling that I was correct so went back and reread and discovered maybe it was a harmonica. I really felt I was at least close enough to read some replies, but then found out I still wasn't totally on the mark and that you had eloquently described a sax. Great writing my friend and my vote for sure.

                             Dawn
Sunshine
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Listening to every heart


29 posted 03-07-2003 12:00 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine


Wish I could vote twice!
Andrew Scott
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30 posted 03-07-2003 02:08 PM       View Profile for Andrew Scott   Email Andrew Scott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Andrew Scott

Bsquirrel:  I like to take this poem at a slow-moderate pace.  Reading it fast doesnít give it a good feel.  As for helping it breath, Iíll consider any suggestions you care to make.  Thanks for your thoughts... Iím always willing to listen and react to constructive criticism.

Justbleu:  Thanks for the vote. Multiple interpretations are good because this one has many layers to consider.  Iím always interested to know how a piece affects someone.  Oh... and thanks for the bump!

Mysteria:  A trumpet could work just as well, although a trumpet isnít really known for its curves.  Now a saxophoneÖ Iíve always liked that ĎSí curve.  And... sax and sex, well you make the connection.  Thanks for the far-north support.

Chanson:  Glad it came across as any of the above.   Peace!

Lost Dreamer:  WOW right back at cha.  Ya, that first reading can be trickyÖ and if you didnít get it the first time that just means I did what I set out to do.  Thanks for your seal of approval.

Dawn G:  Smiles to youÖ thanks for the many reads and the thought you put into them.  Harmonicas and flutes donít have much in the way of curves.  Thanks for the kudos and vote.

Sunshine:  Your words are most generous, though I wish you could vote twice too.  But Iím sure Ron is watching for any ballot box stuffing.  

Iíd like to point out that many saxophone cases are little more than black leather or canvas bags...thus, the line ďblack leather suit stripped.Ē  I believe this caused Local Parasite some psoriasis.  If anybody runs into LP, please let him know.  I donít want him to develop a tic.
Justbleu
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31 posted 03-16-2003 09:59 PM       View Profile for Justbleu   Email Justbleu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Justbleu's Home Page   View IP for Justbleu

I like this too much for it to get lost in the shuffle.....

Bump....

Bridgette

"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again.  To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Andre Brink

Joyce Johnson
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32 posted 03-16-2003 11:26 PM       View Profile for Joyce Johnson   Email Joyce Johnson   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Joyce Johnson

My guess is that it is a much traded car.  But anyway you get my vote.  Joyce

[This message has been edited by Joyce Johnson (03-16-2003 11:26 PM).]

Justbleu
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33 posted 03-24-2003 03:57 PM       View Profile for Justbleu   Email Justbleu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Justbleu's Home Page   View IP for Justbleu

Bump....
Andrew Scott
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34 posted 03-25-2003 11:58 AM       View Profile for Andrew Scott   Email Andrew Scott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Andrew Scott

Justblue:  Thanks for the double bump.  But I must warn you that my wife gets jealous quite easily.   Peace!
Skyfire
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Riding


35 posted 03-25-2003 03:40 PM       View Profile for Skyfire   Email Skyfire   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfire

Mmmmm, what a beautiful write. I don't think I've ever read anything quite like this. *smiles* The imagery was absolutely gorgeous, and when I read it again after reading Vicky's guess, it was even more beautiful. This should definitely be in the book

If I love you enough will you feel it over the distance?

suthern
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on the threshold of a dream


36 posted 03-26-2003 12:54 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Just dropping in to see how the guessing was going... and to bump it back up. *S*

This one still plays as smoothly as ever! *S*
Dark Angel
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37 posted 03-26-2003 05:08 PM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Goodness, this is superb.. I want to vote over and over...A most excellent write indeed. A pleasure to read. A must for the book.

Maree
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38 posted 03-26-2003 06:10 PM       View Profile for SimplyGold   Email SimplyGold   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SimplyGold

Andrew,

I sound the trumpet. I enjoyed this metaphor greatly. I could be wrong but, it does not matter. You see it works for me and I can relate to the black suit that sits in the corner of my own bedroom.

Excellent and I do hope it gets in.

SG
Justbleu
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39 posted 04-03-2003 11:59 PM       View Profile for Justbleu   Email Justbleu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Justbleu's Home Page   View IP for Justbleu

Bump....

"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again.  To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown

LngJhnAg
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Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion


40 posted 04-04-2003 08:54 PM       View Profile for LngJhnAg   Email LngJhnAg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LngJhnAg

This is a beautiful, melancholy story, Andrew.
lorenlynn
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California Beaches


41 posted 04-04-2003 09:44 PM       View Profile for lorenlynn   Email lorenlynn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for lorenlynn

hoot_owl_rn
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Glen Hope, PA USA


42 posted 04-08-2003 08:30 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Just bumping this one back up to the top again....I love this poem
Andrew Scott
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43 posted 04-08-2003 09:30 PM       View Profile for Andrew Scott   Email Andrew Scott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Andrew Scott

To one and all, thanks for the kind words and bumps.  That you find my writing worthy of such attention is beyond expectation.  I bow to you all in gratitude.  Peace!
Denise
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44 posted 04-10-2003 10:01 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Extraordinary piece of writing, Andrew! Fabulous!
Justbleu
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45 posted 04-10-2003 10:03 PM       View Profile for Justbleu   Email Justbleu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Justbleu's Home Page   View IP for Justbleu

Bump....
Aimster
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46 posted 04-11-2003 09:11 AM       View Profile for Aimster   Email Aimster   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aimster

Andrew,

I read this over and over again, even
printed it out and highlighted certain
parts which I never do with a poem, but
I really wanted to get the gist" as you
say of this! And finally I think I do
A really excellent write that goes to the
very core! I gladly vote for this piece
and hope to see it in the book! I think
my only suggestion if I may would be to
put a little more pause in between stanzas,
but that's just my opinion!
take care.
Amy

"love is like a butterfly--
if you chase it,
it will surely fly away,instead
hold it close and watch it grow into
something beautiful"
~me~

Andrew Scott
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47 posted 04-11-2003 11:14 PM       View Profile for Andrew Scott   Email Andrew Scott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Andrew Scott

Aimster:  Thanks for taking the time and effort... a true kindness.  I too would like to see it in the book as I think this is one of my best efforts.  As for making the piece breath, you are not the first to make such an observation.  I'm not opposed to doing so, but I'm unsure how to go about it.  Any suggestions would be appreciated.  I for one read the piece at a slow to moderate pace, so it works for me as it stands.  Again, thank you for taking such an interest in my poem.  Peace!

SPIRIT
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48 posted 04-12-2003 11:33 PM       View Profile for SPIRIT   Email SPIRIT   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SPIRIT

This is well-crafted and brilliant and I don't have a clue as to how I missed it.  My vote is in for this delightful write.
Martie
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49 posted 04-14-2003 04:01 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Scott...I thought I voted for this already..it's incredible!  Voting now!
 
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