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the_loner_23
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0 posted 2003-02-14 09:42 PM


When I close my eyes
I can picture you
So perfectly

I can picture everything
From your dark brown eyes
And muscular chest
Down to your bare feet

When I close my eyes
I feel the warmth of your body
So close to mine
So close
That I can feel the heat radiate

When I close my eyes
I can feel your lips
Softly brush against mine
And at times
Your lips kiss mine so passionaitely
I can't get my breathe
For what seems like an eternity

When I close my eyes
You are mine
To have and to hold
Like a threefold cord
That never can be broke

When I close my eyes
I feel the passion
The love

When I close my eyes


Cold hands means a warm heart

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Local Parasite
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1 posted 2003-02-14 09:55 PM


I like this, Julie, it's a great concept... imagination to love, thoughts to vision.  You did this rather well, nice work.  

Parasite

"Faith" means the will to avoid knowing what is true.
~ Friedrich Wilhelm Nietzsche

ThunderMage
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2 posted 2003-02-14 10:13 PM


That and then some is what I feel just breathing because I know you Julie.

What is life without poetry and adventure?
"Little sister" is just another way of saying "Guardian Angel"!
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Magicmystery
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3 posted 2003-02-14 11:39 PM


Julie, You have out done yourself here.  I very much like this post.... it is a poem of passion and dreams.. and it is intoxicating, the way it draws you along.... Your first line is your last.... and it completes a longing thought... I adore it and it goes into my library to read again.

Sherry

Cherish the good memories of the past and look forward to the adventure called Tomorrow. But above all... be kind to yourself today.

Magicmystery
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4 posted 2003-02-14 11:53 PM


Sorry... didn't check the vote box the first time....I would love to see this one in a book.
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5 posted 2003-02-15 01:06 AM




(smiles) Oh Julie, this is lovely, sweet friend, this is definitely a romance poem that will always be a bookmark in your loves life book in a library of smiles! (big hugggsssssss) Love this, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart sweet Julie, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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6 posted 2003-02-15 01:02 PM


Julie, I believe this is the best poem I've ever read of yours. It's really good. I would love to see it in a book, so you have my vote....

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~  
                  

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7 posted 2003-02-16 08:52 PM



Julie, one of your best!

carol
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8 posted 2003-02-16 10:34 PM


Julie, I really like this it is good

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Love from Rita

ecrivan
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9 posted 2003-02-17 09:13 PM


a reassuring love poem, click for you


Lighthousebob
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10 posted 2003-02-18 08:04 PM


I found a couple of your poems here and both were very good, but of the two I liked this one the best... full of passion and of course I loved the part about the threefold cord... So wonderful to know that Love is always with you my friend.

-Bob

Earth Angel
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11 posted 2003-02-18 09:00 PM


Julie, if I were you, I would go around with my eyes closed all the time! tehe May I suggest a blindfold! You wouldn't want to miss a thing!

Warm hugs,
Linda

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12 posted 2003-02-19 01:56 PM


This is excellent, loner!! I like it very much! *S*
vandana
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13 posted 2003-02-19 02:03 PM


enjoyed it
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14 posted 2003-02-19 05:06 PM


Breathtaking.
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15 posted 2003-02-19 08:53 PM


smile...honest simple and sweet....but full of passionate longing.

'tis lovely Julie.

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16 posted 2003-02-20 12:14 PM


Your best, and you're one of our best. I felt honored just to read it.

~~(¸¸¸¸ºº>   ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº>  ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº>    ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº>
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Justbleu
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17 posted 2003-02-20 12:24 PM


This is very nice....SMILES here!!!

Bridgette

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18 posted 2003-02-21 04:36 AM


Very Nicely done.....

Charisma

SPIRIT
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19 posted 2003-02-21 08:53 AM


Wow!

Wow!! Wow!!!


Bill Charles
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20 posted 2003-02-22 01:54 AM


the_loner_23 - this one goes back to the top with my vote...

BC

Nan
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21 posted 2003-02-26 08:45 AM


This is one of your best, Julie...
GG
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22 posted 2003-02-26 09:06 AM


I'm with the crowd, this is one of your best.
And I, too, like threefold chord part. That is truly when it cannot be broken. Well done
here's my click.

Always, Alyssa

- And so it was that time stood still -
     (blink, breathe, stand, fight)

Ceinwyn
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23 posted 2003-02-26 10:59 AM


I too agree one of your best you have out done yourself.. enjoyed obviously!!

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

WhiteRose
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24 posted 2003-02-26 08:02 PM


This is lovely Julie.
SimplyGold
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25 posted 2003-03-15 07:39 PM


Hi Loner,

Yes, I like this. You have changed your style and have grown alot since I've last been here (a couple of months it seems like)
Good work.

SG

Alicethruglass
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26 posted 2003-03-17 07:11 PM


I enjoyed this one too, Julie..catch those few spelling errors when it gets voted in.

so passionaitely... should be passionately
I can't get my breathe ...and this should be breath

otherwise very good work.

~A~

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27 posted 2003-03-18 02:07 PM


Julie, love is being able to see someone clearly with your eyes closed and smiling, and you said this perfectly.  I think this is your very best poem ever!

  
Sharon

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