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IcyFlamez89
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0 posted 2003-02-14 05:01 PM


It's my first poem here, it's not good, but it's mine
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Black and white.
The shades of gray.
The empitiness of perfection,
All dictate my life.

How I wish for color,
How I long for imperfection.
I would give up everything
Just to taste mortality.

[This message has been edited by IcyFlamez89 (02-14-2003 05:11 PM).]

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1 posted 2003-02-14 05:04 PM


Welcome, George.
  Love rants are always welcome.
I enjoyed yours.

Bill Charles
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2 posted 2003-02-14 05:22 PM


IcyFlamez89 - It is a good one, liked it very much. You must post some more...

BC

Albert J. Allie
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3 posted 2003-02-14 05:46 PM


Great Read! Short and to the point. Thank you
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4 posted 2003-02-14 06:31 PM


Welcome To Passions!! Enjoyed your first poem. Have fun here. Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers-
that perches in the soul....
                  
                       -Emily Dickinson

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5 posted 2003-02-14 06:37 PM


Welcome this left me wanting you to tell us more... I love a good story....you do have more, don't you?
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6 posted 2003-02-14 06:43 PM


I like it!  Witty and edgy!

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7 posted 2003-02-14 06:45 PM


Welcome to PIP. I enjoyed your first
post, and hope to read more. I hope you like it here....

Ethel...garysgirl

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Yay!!! And know the rainbows are all around you, just look deep in your heart and with love and faith they will start to bubble down from the youth inside you! (big hugggsssssss) This is a lovely debut, sweet friend, I love it!!! Welcome to Passions, sweet George, may you be inspired by all of us here as we will all be inspired by your lovely words! I can't wait to read more of your lovely words, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet George, thank you for sharing, and, by the way...



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton










"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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9 posted 2003-02-14 10:28 PM


Welcome to Passions!  
Please, check your E-mail for a Special Greeting!

Karilea
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I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound

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